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Twenty for Halloween

Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "My Mind Astir - a Rondeau"
Halloween Poems in Various Forms

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Comment from Winslow
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Dear Brooke,

The mind creates these hideous beasts, for them it provides many feasts, it is insane this lack of sleep, why doesn't this person just count the sheep? Good poem as usual.

Warm regards,

Winslow


 Comment Written 03-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2009
    Ah, I think when one is in that state of mind, the sheep turn into scary beasts as they are being counted! LOL Thanks, Winslow :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
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ADEWPEARL,

All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions, well expressed.

It is completely error free.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Oatmeal, for your positive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from stormwolf2
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I don't know how I missed this one, Brook. Reminds me of my story. Puts the creeps up me. "It" will return! Just seeing those words brings a cold shiver down my spine.

I enjoyed, even though it gave me goosebumps. Well done and well written.

Best wishes,
Malcolm

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Malcolm :-) Nothing like creeping out a cowboy!! It's far too easy to creep out my nice lady friends, so I like a challenge :-) Brooke
reply by stormwolf2 on 04-Nov-2009
    Well there you go, you succeeded! lol :-)


Comment from perunest
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You are a master of the scary poem! With
hints and dread, mind reeling and insides
quaking, you transfer your fear to the reader.
What is it that makes you/us so frightened?
I don't think I want to know . . .
Thanks for another spine-tingler!

Carolyn

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Carolyn - alas, the scary poems are done for the year :-) Glad you enjoyed! Brooke
Comment from Maurice WA Johnson
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A very effective portrayal of feverish thoughts, driven by fear. Have people been having a go about the number of Halloween poems you've posted? Hah, ignore the plebeian rascals. Follow your muse, my dear, follow your muse. And if you should come across mine, tell her I need help. (50,000 words on topic in a month? Ye Gods!)

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
    Maurice, I read your first installment of the novel - I think all of you who take on that challenge are a little touched, but I sure admire your spirit!!! LOL Yes, I had some of my nicer lady friends practically begging me to leave the dark side to return to nature and fairies and sunsets :-) Thanks, Maurice. Brooke
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
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Well you need to get the Bible out and get rid of that demon!! Very well written. But I do think you need to write one of those more contemplative ones in this format, LOL Good thing halloween is over.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
    Yes, it is now the end of dark season and time for the contemplative rondeaus - this afternoon I plan to work on that :-) Thanks so much, Jo Lynn. Brooke :-) (in the meantime I'll whip out my Bible!)
Comment from Just2Write
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Nice finale Brooke. You did yourself proud with this series of creepy poems. Halloween has been given it's proper dues, and as we say adieu, we start the countdown to Thanks-giving and Christmas! You do the Roneau well (as you do with most rhyming forms of poetry) This one is no exception. Rose.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Rose - yep, now time for the Thanksgiving mood :-) Brooke
Comment from jdrhye
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Interesting style and flow. I appreciate your explaining the style of verse and syllables. The poem itself gives the reader a sense of fear and danger lurking.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2009
    Good morning, my friend - and thank you! Glad you could feel the sense of danger :-) Brooke
Comment from Lady & Louis
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Hmm, this could well describe trying to sleep on board a plane ... especially if one flies with Screaming Baby Airlines! (I think Dawn made up that name, btw.) That's as scary a prospect as any, lol. Good poem, I enjoyed it.

Louise :)

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2009
    Louise, thank you - sorry I'm so delayed in responding. My daughter has a bad luck streak with flying - she ALWAYS is seated right behind the one screaming baby! LOL Brooke
Comment from Queenise
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Brooke, this still seems like one hard form to tackle, but you do it so beautifully and make it seem so easy. I get the complete scary picture from your very good projection and imagery. Great flow,pace and rhythm. Blessings. Queenise

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2009
    Thank you, Queenise - I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
reply by Queenise on 06-Nov-2009
    You're welcome Brooke. Peace. Queenise