Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

OH MY!
Sibling rivalry is brutal, isn't it? haha

This is a great 'gotcha' poem. :)
I enjoyed it.

This just wreaks with anticipation. I could feel the tension building and then Wham! It got me. :)

No suggestions, Carol. This is fabulous! I'm sure this will do very well in the booth. Smells like a winner. ;)

Best of luck.
Nic

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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Nic

Glad you enjoyed my sinister poem. I remember my brother always trying to steal my candy thus the poem. Thanks for the review, CArol

Comment from becky7777

Excellent

a great story in your poem. this is scary and funny too and so real like. great write with the word sinister. good luck in the contest.
Becky

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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becky

I appreciate you stopping by to read my poem. Thanks for the comments. Carol

Comment from bkrighter

Excellent

Very nice! The ending is great. It reads easily and feels appropriately sinister at the beginning before we are given a clearer picture of what is going on. Good job and good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Steve

Glad you enjoyed my poem. I'm not into vampires so this is about as ghoulish as I am going to get. Thanks for the review. Carol

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is well-written. The tension built throughout the poem and then a surprise ending. I can picture the siblings doing this.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Eliz

Thanks so much. The inspiration came from my brother when we were younger. He always stole my candy. Thanks again CArol

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Ha! What good fun. I enjoyed this one. Reminds me of when I was trick-or-treating age and my sister would go through my candy. She was ten years older and never let me forget it! Best of luck in the contest with this sweet surprise ending.
Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Linda

thanks ...My inspiration came from my brother who would steal all my candy. Guess it's just the right of passage!!

Carol

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

This is so clever and humorous. I really enjoyed this one. I thought it was going to be the father stealing the candy. I think I would have used another word for sibling. Maybe brother. That's just me. I felt it didn't fit with the other words. It's your poem and an excellent one at that. Good luck
Delora

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Delora

I started to do just that and then thought it might relate to others better if I didn't give a gender. Thanks for the review. Carol

reply by Carol D Parker on 31-Oct-2009

You're rightt. I didn't tthink about that.
Delora

Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

I love it, Carol. The other entries are all dark and filled with terror, except for yours and mine. Yours is also very appropriate for Halloween.
Sally

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Sally

I loved your surprise as well! Enough of the vampires and ghoulish stuff...I have read more than my yearly quota in the past few days. Fun and frivolous is so much better!

Smiles to you Carol

Comment from BJean

Excellent

This is a humorous acrostic that I can relate too.
We were raised on practical jokes to scare the jeebies
out of us. Very well done acrostic with nice surprise ending:) Jean

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Jean

Glad you enjoyed this one. I can't do vampires so this is as ghoulish as it gets. Thanks so much. Carol

Comment from Phil Kitom

Excellent

An excellent acrostic poem that at first
appears to be just that, until reading
the horror and expecting at any time
to see blood and gore, only to find
that is a wonderful and teasing
tale of family fun. Well done Carol...

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Phil,

Glad you enjoyed my little acrostic poem. I can't do the vampire stuff..this is about as ghoulish as I get. Smiles, CArol

Comment from Queenise

Excellent

You had me too, almost until the end. You are one humorous and funny devilishly creative writer. A cute poem with a catchy ending. Smile. Enjoyable and easy to get into. Easy to be carried away with this one. Great art also. Would recommend. Queenise

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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Queenise

Thank you for the very kind and generous comments. I truly appreciate them. I am glad that you enjoyed the little poem. I don't do vampires so this is about as ghoulish as I get. Carol

reply by Queenise on 01-Nov-2009

You're so welcome Carol. Queenise