Comment from Bananafish308

Excellent

Brooke, this is incredible. Such a profound poem in perfect rictameter form. This is a hard form to master. I considered giving it a try, then thought better. Also loved the rhyming. Congratulations on winning the contest - certainly not surprising. Bill

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009

Thank you, Bill. I find this form incredibly difficult to write in - every time I've used it was a frustrating experience. LOL Brooke :-)

Comment from Arkine

Excellent

I like it, reminds me of the current strifes that I've been faced with lately. But I stepped through the door a long time ago, can't turn back now and pretend like I never opened it. ;) Curiousity, exploring--is a driving force for the human race. Those that choose not to walk through the door are missing out.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009

Your comments are most insightful - you've completely gotten to the heart of the matter. Thanks so much for your thoughtful read of this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Amfunny

Excellent

First of all, I am still trying to catch up on the reviews, etc. But congrats on winning this contest. This is a great poem and I can see why it won. Good job.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009

Thank you, Norma Jean - for the review and the congratulations :-) I won't even complain you didn't vote for it!! LOL Brooke :-)

Comment from kukarad70

Good

Dear Adewpearl, Good courage stepping in your poem. The poem sweet and short and strong giving peculiar ignition in my mind that I would do salute to your creativeness which I found deeply touched in my heart. You will really be door finder for unexpected creation which made me much craze to study more and more. Please keep on trying more improved I am always admire you by warm respect. Thanks and regards, Kamal

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009

Kamal, thank you for your kind words - since on this site a 4 review means you believe the poem is in need of revision, I would appreciate your clarifying for me what part you think needs to be fixed. Brooke

Comment from Maurice WA Johnson

Good

Hey, Brooke. I love this piece, but I can't help but view the second line as fatally flawed. I'm sorry to be an old pedant when so many others don't see the flaw. (Congratulations on the win, by the way.)

'I cross the door', I'm sorry, you can't cross a door, you can't even cross a doorway.

Now, 'I ope the door' works, even if it is a bit archaic.

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

I wondered about that before I wrote it so googled the phrase and found several places where people have used the phrase, so I went ahead with it. I understand your thoughts as I had the doubts myself and can't fault you for finding it a flaw :-) Thanks, Maurice. Brooke

Comment from Rabianabian

Excellent

ANOTHER contest winner?! You are just too good! Wonderful job on this. I love the picture--I should try what you do and look for inspiration on Fanart. Really great job.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

Thanks, Mary - this was a pretty good win! LOL FanArt is a GREAT source of inspiration - you really should!!! Brooke

Comment from dtimes3

Exceptional

I really like this poem. I have always been a big fan of exploration and discovery, probably because of my asthmatic childhood and the year I spent in a wheelchair. That's why I read everything I could get my hands on. I had a special relationship with the librarian.

You have constructed this with the utmost care and wisdom. The alliteration, the assonance and consonance, and the word choice are right on the mark.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

Thank you, dear friend - I'm so glad you connected with this as I always hope that will happen with anything I write :-) You are most generous. Brooke :-)

Comment from Soulester

Excellent

Congratulations on a well-deserved win, Brooke. I like to study your poems. You make it look so easy, yet each poem has so many ingredients to consider. Somehow, you always manage to choose a strong message, and then blend in the exact right words to make it pop. This one is a fine example. Thanks for sharing your work and ideas. Mary

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

thank you, Mary. I appreciate your thoughtfulness - it is truly encouraging to read such kind words :-) Brooke

Comment from DrCarter2001

Exceptional

Wow, I'm really blown away by this piece. The multiple layers and the clear imagery with just a few words; I'm humbled. No wonder this was a winner. Mazel tov!

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

Thank you so much, my friend!! This is most generous of you :-) This was a lovely win, and I appreciate your kind words about that! Brooke :-)

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

As usual, the reason your piece won this contest was because it was the best. Excellent from first glance to the final word. thanks. ann

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009

Thank you, Ann - how gracious of you :-) Brooke