Poems for children of all ages
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "What is Love?"My writings for and about the children in my life
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Comment from nora arjuna
hi marijke, a lovely poem describing love. i have no problem with the repetition. i love the last stanza most. my best wishes on this.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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hi marijke, a lovely poem describing love. i have no problem with the repetition. i love the last stanza most. my best wishes on this.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much. Just tried something a bit different, and thought it worked reasonably well. But the readers are always the best judges, so thank you.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your sequence about love and the clusters of definitions. I think you have covered just about all of the possibilities, and I especially enjoyed the last heartfelt lines.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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I liked your sequence about love and the clusters of definitions. I think you have covered just about all of the possibilities, and I especially enjoyed the last heartfelt lines.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Thank you Joan, for your review and very generous rating.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from adewpearl
I like the repetition, the items on your list, the flow, and the rhyming that ties together the verses - what a beautiful musing on the nature and meaning of love :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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I like the repetition, the items on your list, the flow, and the rhyming that ties together the verses - what a beautiful musing on the nature and meaning of love :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Thank you Brooke, for your review and very generous rating.
I tried to keep it simple, often love is thought of in such a complicated way.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Miska
I think you have love covered. All different things spell love you only have to pay attention.
A worthy entry in the contest, good luck at the voting.
best regards Miska
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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I think you have love covered. All different things spell love you only have to pay attention.
A worthy entry in the contest, good luck at the voting.
best regards Miska
Comment Written 28-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much. Yes, if you look around, love can be so many different things.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from melyuki
Hi Marijke, what a beautiful verse of love. Such a wonderful choice of words you have used to describe love.
I was just playing with my precious little cockatiel and he got his foot caught in the kitchen drawer. He flew on to his cage and I raced to see if he was ok. And the very thought of hurting him made me burst into tears. I realised just how much I really love the little delight. And then I read your poem. By the way, he appears to be ok just got a bruised foot. So love can come in many ways for many precious things in our lives. Thank you for writing such a lovely verse and have a happy day, smiles and hugs from Mel
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Hi Marijke, what a beautiful verse of love. Such a wonderful choice of words you have used to describe love.
I was just playing with my precious little cockatiel and he got his foot caught in the kitchen drawer. He flew on to his cage and I raced to see if he was ok. And the very thought of hurting him made me burst into tears. I realised just how much I really love the little delight. And then I read your poem. By the way, he appears to be ok just got a bruised foot. So love can come in many ways for many precious things in our lives. Thank you for writing such a lovely verse and have a happy day, smiles and hugs from Mel
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Mel, hope your day improves now that your cockatiel is okay.
Yes, love can take many forms.
Animals can really get into the heart and the home.
Warmest Regards and hugs
Marijke
Comment from MizKat
Fiona: Pretty picture and perfect poem. It's true love is different for everyone. You did a great job on this and I enjoyed reading it. Kat
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Fiona: Pretty picture and perfect poem. It's true love is different for everyone. You did a great job on this and I enjoyed reading it. Kat
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Kat, appreciate your comments and your lovely stars. Yes, it is what it is to each individual.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
What a truly lovely entry! Quite right, love is many different things. *smiles* Thank you so much for such a delightful contest entry! Just great! Seraph ~
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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What a truly lovely entry! Quite right, love is many different things. *smiles* Thank you so much for such a delightful contest entry! Just great! Seraph ~
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Seraph, for your lovely comments and those lovely stars.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Sunie617
You are love indeed. This poem had alot of sweetness to it. I loved how you narrowed down the very essence of the word. I found it to be simple yet heartwarming. Each line made me smile. Thanks for sharing, job well done.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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You are love indeed. This poem had alot of sweetness to it. I loved how you narrowed down the very essence of the word. I found it to be simple yet heartwarming. Each line made me smile. Thanks for sharing, job well done.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Sunie, for your lovely review and rating.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
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You are very welcome. :)
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You are very welcome. :)
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You are very welcome.:)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Love is indeed all these things,
and such a blessing to be cherished.
A lovely entry for the contest..
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Love is indeed all these things,
and such a blessing to be cherished.
A lovely entry for the contest..
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Margaret, for your lovely review and rating.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
Comment from Plotosaurus
You have an interesting start here. In general, the repetition works well here. However, some variety in at least one of the stanzas would improve the dramatic effect of the remaining stanzas. Best of luck with your love poem and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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You have an interesting start here. In general, the repetition works well here. However, some variety in at least one of the stanzas would improve the dramatic effect of the remaining stanzas. Best of luck with your love poem and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review and rating, it is truly appreciated. I have just changed the last stanza, although no substantial enough to improve the dramatic effect.
Warmest Regards
Marijke
