Blood Relations - A Vampire Tale
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Close Encounters of the Worst Kind"Some bloodlines run very deep.
19 total reviews
Comment from Deejharrington
Wow! Talk about twist and turns in the story line! Terrific changes and unique plots. You put a whole lot into one exciting chapter. I really enjoyed reading it. Glad the grasshopper guys were taken care of but not that Stan is in big trouble. And the girls don't remember who he is. Can't wait to read what happens next.
deb
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Wow! Talk about twist and turns in the story line! Terrific changes and unique plots. You put a whole lot into one exciting chapter. I really enjoyed reading it. Glad the grasshopper guys were taken care of but not that Stan is in big trouble. And the girls don't remember who he is. Can't wait to read what happens next.
deb
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you Deb! A lot going on for sure. The grasshopper guys are still out there somewhere, but yes, Stan is in a world of trouble. Hopefully he can convince the rulers he's not interfering with human civilization. The girls not remembering him opens up a new door of opportunity. Imagine their first kiss, their first bite, or maybe now that he has his root, no biting at all. Lots of things to throw at the Muse. Thanks again!
Comment from angel of the quill
WOW WHAT AN INTERESTING SWITCH AND TWIST
NOW WILL HE BE BACK DID HE BLANK THE MEMORIES
OH THE QUESTIONS THIS RAISES
AND THE EXCITEMENT
PRAY CONTINUE KIND SIR
FOR THIS FAN AWAITS.
... BRAVO!!!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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WOW WHAT AN INTERESTING SWITCH AND TWIST
NOW WILL HE BE BACK DID HE BLANK THE MEMORIES
OH THE QUESTIONS THIS RAISES
AND THE EXCITEMENT
PRAY CONTINUE KIND SIR
FOR THIS FAN AWAITS.
... BRAVO!!!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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A SIX STAR review AND a BRAVO at the same time. Holy cow! Thank you, thank you, thank you!!! You have made my evening and I appreciate this so much. I can tell you the blanking of the girl's minds was not done by Stan, he would never do that to those he loves so much. The mind erasing was done by Raul to cover his and Stan's tracks. He fully intends to take Stan back across the galaxy with him as ordered. How Lori and the others get by and try and figure things out will be interesting. Imagine Stan returning and coming into her life. Their first kiss, their first bite, all over again. Or her remembering pieces of him, oh, the opportunities. Thanks again for such a wonderful and encouraging review! :)
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always we as readers have our favorites and our favorite types of stories
this has to be one tidbit at a time i know
but i love each tantlizing bite
and each moment i savor the words so richly expressive
.. great work
i am usally a finicky reader
so praise is hard won with me
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Wow! Thank you. Even more appreciated. :)
Comment from Amyna
This chapter truly gives me the creeps. Your descriptions are so explicit as to make the reader be there mentally. Great writing.
"...families safety in my absence"-- do you mean 'family's safety'?
"...ship being covered in this green slim" -- slime
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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This chapter truly gives me the creeps. Your descriptions are so explicit as to make the reader be there mentally. Great writing.
"...families safety in my absence"-- do you mean 'family's safety'?
"...ship being covered in this green slim" -- slime
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for this very encouraging and helpful review Amyna! I have put your excellent suggestions to good use. Anything green with more than two arms gives me the creeps too, LOL. The bug world offers some scary looking creatures.
You are welcome. Those are some 'hurried' mistakes, I'm sure. That's what I call them. Regards, Amyna
Comment from L.lora
What an interesting fast
paced segment, full of
mystery, intrique and oh
so many questions. Well
written and presented,
flows smoothly for the
reader's ease. Great
descriptions and dialogues
move this along nicely and
work well together. no nits..Lora
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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What an interesting fast
paced segment, full of
mystery, intrique and oh
so many questions. Well
written and presented,
flows smoothly for the
reader's ease. Great
descriptions and dialogues
move this along nicely and
work well together. no nits..Lora
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review Lora. Yes, many questions and possibilities now. Imagine Lori meeting Stan and not knowing him, or Brook too. That's if Stan is even allowed to return. And what about those green aliens?
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
What a great chapter!
Interesting.
Entertaining.
Suspenseful.
Good action.
Good dialogue.
Good descriptions.
Good balance between all of the elements.
Great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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What a great chapter!
Interesting.
Entertaining.
Suspenseful.
Good action.
Good dialogue.
Good descriptions.
Good balance between all of the elements.
Great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review Kathryn!
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You're welcome.
kathryn
Comment from jadapenn
What an action packed chapter. The monsters were gross and sound like the Parktown Prawns of Jo'burg South Africa. I really liked the part with the dolphins. Amazing animals. Then we meet Raul. Now I have mixed feelings about this Prince. I hold my judgement for the time being.
Well Written, Night. A sixer to you. luv jada
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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What an action packed chapter. The monsters were gross and sound like the Parktown Prawns of Jo'burg South Africa. I really liked the part with the dolphins. Amazing animals. Then we meet Raul. Now I have mixed feelings about this Prince. I hold my judgement for the time being.
Well Written, Night. A sixer to you. luv jada
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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A SIXER! WOW! Thank you so much Jada for this much appreciated review and stars. I'll have to look up those Parktown Prawns! Yes, dolphins are a smart animal, I think smarter than we realize. Thank you again so much!!! :)
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Steve:)
What a change in circumstances. That's the great thing about fantasy, you can change reality in a flash. I have many questions that need an answer. Now the two most pertinent are:
1. Since all memory of Stan has been purged from the girls, what will they do once they get back to Wishes? Who will control Wishes while Stan is away?
2. Will some of Stan's relatives join him on earth after he faces his uncle? Will they become a part of the earth's population?
I really am anxious for the next scenes to unfold.
Thank you for sharing your great SPAG-free writing.
Roger
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Hi Steve:)
What a change in circumstances. That's the great thing about fantasy, you can change reality in a flash. I have many questions that need an answer. Now the two most pertinent are:
1. Since all memory of Stan has been purged from the girls, what will they do once they get back to Wishes? Who will control Wishes while Stan is away?
2. Will some of Stan's relatives join him on earth after he faces his uncle? Will they become a part of the earth's population?
I really am anxious for the next scenes to unfold.
Thank you for sharing your great SPAG-free writing.
Roger
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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All excellent questions Roger! Thank you so much for your wonderful review. As the next chapter comes out, some of your questions will be answered and explored.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi steve, oh, what a commotion. Felt like I was watching an alien movie. Now I wonder what will happen to stan. What imagery you have!
Some notes:
->She tried to scream, but couldn't move. She was paralyzed.
Nothing wrong but rather unbalanced - scream/move. How about:
She tried to scream, but lost her voice. She couldn't move either. [She was paralyzed.] - this part can be deleted.
->They had six arms with two finger claws at the end of each.
how about:
Six arms with two finger claws at the end of each extended out of their bodies.
->One stepped up to Brook and lowered its scaly [looking] head and smelled her neck. - need 'looking'?
->Once they surrounded Stan[,] they rushed him.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Hi steve, oh, what a commotion. Felt like I was watching an alien movie. Now I wonder what will happen to stan. What imagery you have!
Some notes:
->She tried to scream, but couldn't move. She was paralyzed.
Nothing wrong but rather unbalanced - scream/move. How about:
She tried to scream, but lost her voice. She couldn't move either. [She was paralyzed.] - this part can be deleted.
->They had six arms with two finger claws at the end of each.
how about:
Six arms with two finger claws at the end of each extended out of their bodies.
->One stepped up to Brook and lowered its scaly [looking] head and smelled her neck. - need 'looking'?
->Once they surrounded Stan[,] they rushed him.
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review! If it plays like a movie in your mind's eye, then I know I did a good job describing this world. Also, thank you for your excellent suggestions. I've put them to good use. Thanks again!
Comment from leachwriter
Wow, non stop action in this chapter! I read the previous chapter also, so I kind of have the jest of the story. So with Stan gone, what will we do???
Great writing, I didn't notice any errors but I was enthralled with the story, so not paying close attention. Good job.
Regards
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Wow, non stop action in this chapter! I read the previous chapter also, so I kind of have the jest of the story. So with Stan gone, what will we do???
Great writing, I didn't notice any errors but I was enthralled with the story, so not paying close attention. Good job.
Regards
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging review! Much going on for sure, LOL.
