Comment from Sally Carter

Excellent

Another Brooke special, full of magical words and images. You certainly capture a sense of wonder. (I did briefly consider entering this contest and basing my poem on wonderment how I would ever win a contest you had entered. LOL) Now I know whey I didn't! What do you think of this new rule that every poem has to be reviewed before one can cast a vote? Best wishes, Sally

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009

Thank you, Sally. I think the rule stinks - as of now not even every poet in the contest has voted. Ideally it is nice that people read all 18 entries and review them, but I know that even I, as a conscientious person, often just read them all but skip reviewing some - it takes forever to vote when you have to leave 18 reviews, so most people simply don't bother! Thanks for your great review :-) Brooke

reply by Sally Carter on 14-Nov-2009

I agree. I ALWAYS have a look at every entry, even if I only skim some of them because they just aren't my cup of tea. I had done the same in this contest and was determined to vote, because there was one that particularly caught my eye. But it really took forever, and I hated reviewing things that I just didn't like. It's fine reviewing something that you can see potential in, and offering constructive suggestions, but that is a different thing altogether. Grumble, grumble...... cheers, S

Comment from Laidy

Excellent

i thought this was a great poem, i thought it was well written as always. you take such simplicity and turn it into such an art. great job with this write and wish you the best.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you, Laidy - I so appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Kathryn Varuzza

Excellent

Brooke,
I like your poem.
I like the image and the visual presentation.
I like the form you chose.
I like how it flows.
I like your rhymes.
In your second line, I'm not sure if you meant to write ebon or if it is a mistake and should be ebony? Just thought I would mention it, just in case it was a mistake.
Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Kathryn

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you, Kathryn - no, I intended ebon, which is a traditional poetic form of ebony. It fits the meter here :-) I appreciate your many lovely comments! Brooke

reply by Kathryn Varuzza on 13-Nov-2009

Brooke,

I thought you meant it, and I thought ebon was cool, but I just wanted to make sure.
Have a great night.
Kathryn

Comment from Helvi2

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
I love the thought of gleaming dawn light illuminating my day and taking me away from darkness.Your poem seems so calming and peaceful surrounded by joy. Those are the nicest feelings to have in the world.

I escpecially love the last two lines

"I gaze upon my world in wonderment,
resplendent in the glow of sun's ascent."

It lifts your whole spirit....but then again your writing always does.
Good Luck in the Contest
Helvi :o)

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you so much, Helvi - it was a pleasure to read the poems in this contest - what a positive theme it gave people to work with :-) Brooke

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

This is wonderful, beautiful. And so real. It's true how the doubts and fears disappear in the morning light. If it's raining and gloomy I just go back to sleep. I love the way you put things, your way with words. You take something we take for granted and turn it into a miracle. Good luck in the comp.
Carol

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thanks so much, Carol. I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem of wonderment :-) Brooke

Comment from melyuki

Excellent

Hi Brooke, what a wonderful way to describe the coming of dawn. Your verse fills the reader with warmth and sunshine , of all the beauty that lies ahead as a new day is born. You have a wonderful way of expressing emotion through your poetry Brooke, and this poem is no exception.
It has a warm glow and embraces the reader with happy and pleasing thoughts. Great work Brooke and best of luck in the contest. have a great day, smiles always from Mel

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you, Mel. I'm so glad you enjoyed the mood of this quiet poem of wonderment :-) Brooke

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Early morning is indeed a time of wonderment. The sun brings with it the start of a new day, and another chance to express our being. The imagery in this is very vivid and the feeling in your heartthoughtfully expressed. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your kind words about this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Abba Lin

Excellent

BROOKE, ITS AMAZING HOW MUCH WE CAN HAVE DOUBTS AND FEARS IN THE MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT..THINGS SEEM SO MUCH HEAVIER WHEN BLACKEN BY NIGHT, BUT WHEN THE SUN(SON) COMES IN AND ILLUMINATES THE DARK, THING BEGIN TO HAVE SPRING HOPE...LOVE LIN

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2009

Thank you, Lin - your insightful response is most encouraging :-) Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

And again I look with "wonderment" at your skill with the ottava rima form. I am awed by the image and color in "ebon vail of night" and the motion of "sun's ascent." Your rhymes and alliteration add great liveliness to the work.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2009

thank you, Joan - I'm so glad you like the form and the imagery of this poem - you are such a gracious reviewer :-) Brooke

Comment from ArtGal

Excellent

I have to get out my handbook of forms, lol! I just love your wording in this as a new day begins. You certainly can use great adjectives in your poetry that makes it oh so good!

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009

Thank you, ArtGal - you are most encouraging :-) Brooke