Twenty for Halloween
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "A Trespasser's Lament"Halloween Poems in Various Forms
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Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh my, Brooke!! The words used in this ottava rima had my head spinning and the words just rolled off my tongue like a spoken song. Excellent poetry, Brooke.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Oh my, Brooke!! The words used in this ottava rima had my head spinning and the words just rolled off my tongue like a spoken song. Excellent poetry, Brooke.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Karyn. So glad you enjoyed my spooky poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Rain Chapman
I like this, it brought to mind old pirate stories, and New Orleans type swamps. Guess it proves that old adage about not being able to take it with you. Kind of felt sorry for the guy even though he comes across as not all that likeable, lol.
Have you put your talent for horror to work creating a poem for the sites Halloween contest?
Lorraine :)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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I like this, it brought to mind old pirate stories, and New Orleans type swamps. Guess it proves that old adage about not being able to take it with you. Kind of felt sorry for the guy even though he comes across as not all that likeable, lol.
Have you put your talent for horror to work creating a poem for the sites Halloween contest?
Lorraine :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Lorraine, thank you. Hey, you're a nice person - I kinda felt sorry for his sorry ass too! LOL Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
I wish, again, I could find as many words to use in comment as you, day after day, find in writing beautiful, melodic poetry.
Regards
Reg
PS You are definitely catching up with Byron.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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I wish, again, I could find as many words to use in comment as you, day after day, find in writing beautiful, melodic poetry.
Regards
Reg
PS You are definitely catching up with Byron.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009
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Thanks, Reg - you're making me blush with such compliments :-) Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, this poem has wonderful rhyming and flow. The presentation is excellent and it has a halloween feel to it perfect for this time of year.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009
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Brooke, this poem has wonderful rhyming and flow. The presentation is excellent and it has a halloween feel to it perfect for this time of year.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Mary Jayne - I've been in that Halloween mood of late! :-) Brooke
Comment from asma khan
With arrogance I entered on a trail
that even seasoned guides would not attempt.
They called me to turn back to no avail,
for I was sure my might made me exempt.
Now only Satan's serpents hear me wail,
my pleas for mercy met with their contempt.
Take heed this warning issued through my moans --
from heights the haughty fall to die alone.
The poem is very nicely written. The diction is good, and the words flowed smoothly. Excellent job done.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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With arrogance I entered on a trail
that even seasoned guides would not attempt.
They called me to turn back to no avail,
for I was sure my might made me exempt.
Now only Satan's serpents hear me wail,
my pleas for mercy met with their contempt.
Take heed this warning issued through my moans --
from heights the haughty fall to die alone.
The poem is very nicely written. The diction is good, and the words flowed smoothly. Excellent job done.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, asma - I apologize for such a delayed response to your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The denizens of midnight have conspired
to part my body from my mortal soul.
What a great opening line! In fact,
it is perfect throughout. Has a real
Halloween feel to it, Brooke.
And the artwork sets the mood.
You're one talented lady, my friend.
My first read since returning home,
and well worth my six.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009
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The denizens of midnight have conspired
to part my body from my mortal soul.
What a great opening line! In fact,
it is perfect throughout. Has a real
Halloween feel to it, Brooke.
And the artwork sets the mood.
You're one talented lady, my friend.
My first read since returning home,
and well worth my six.
Margaret.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009
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Margaret, I've been in an eerie Halloween mood - I bet I've written ten Halloween-themed poems this month while you've been traveling - glad you enjoyed this one :-) T hank you for your wonderfully generous rating! Brooke
Comment from L.lora
Brooke another one
of your poems from
a most accomplished
pen. The verbiage
and mood are fresh
and most enjoyable.
An appropriate poem
for this season, nice
to see your dark side.
no nits.. Lora
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Brooke another one
of your poems from
a most accomplished
pen. The verbiage
and mood are fresh
and most enjoyable.
An appropriate poem
for this season, nice
to see your dark side.
no nits.. Lora
Comment Written 24-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Lora, thanks so much - so sorry this review got buried and my reply is so late :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
A well-executed ottava rima, with a bit of philosophy woven into the mix. I enjoyed it immensely... especially the final verse. "They called me to turn back to no avail, for I was sure my might made me exempt" is a telling line, one I will remember.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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A well-executed ottava rima, with a bit of philosophy woven into the mix. I enjoyed it immensely... especially the final verse. "They called me to turn back to no avail, for I was sure my might made me exempt" is a telling line, one I will remember.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Thank you, MissMerri - I apologize for how late my reply is to your gracious review. Brooke
Comment from knowledge
Good job here. I enjoyed it. I also like your art. You are surly an amazing poet. You have a knowledge of so many different types of poetry.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Good job here. I enjoyed it. I also like your art. You are surly an amazing poet. You have a knowledge of so many different types of poetry.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 24-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Knowledge - so sorry for the delayed reply :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
ADEWPEARL,
Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive. All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions, well expressed.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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ADEWPEARL,
Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive. All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions, well expressed.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 24-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Oatmeal - so sorry for the much-delayed reply. Brooke
