My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Mending"My collection of various sonnets.
24 total reviews
Comment from eraserlynch
Great read written here. I have not read much of your work before but I really enjoyed this and look forward to reading more soon.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Great read written here. I have not read much of your work before but I really enjoyed this and look forward to reading more soon.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review, very much appreciated, glad you enjoyed.
Comment from rama devi
Hello my lovely friend!
Beautiful sonnet.
A strong contender for this contest, surely.
true to form with good iambic flow.
Favorite lines-
to reach emotions long ago dispelled
when hatred's hands secured a knotted rope.
and the closing couplet-
A miscued vow can leave a life in shreds,
but true love found will bring the mending threads.
Bravo. Kudos.
Lovely presentation too.
Hugs,
rd
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Hello my lovely friend!
Beautiful sonnet.
A strong contender for this contest, surely.
true to form with good iambic flow.
Favorite lines-
to reach emotions long ago dispelled
when hatred's hands secured a knotted rope.
and the closing couplet-
A miscued vow can leave a life in shreds,
but true love found will bring the mending threads.
Bravo. Kudos.
Lovely presentation too.
Hugs,
rd
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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I never win contests but hey if they can get my muse kicking I'll keep joining them, LOL Thanks so much hun and once again, congrats.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Very good poem with a serious message. I liked the rhythmn and the flow, the rhyming is good and the lines scan beautifully. This is good work, very well done indeed.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Very good poem with a serious message. I liked the rhythmn and the flow, the rhyming is good and the lines scan beautifully. This is good work, very well done indeed.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you for the most encouraging review, very much appreciated.
Comment from Diny
You show such promise- I love reading this style- so classical and full of vivid imagery- Yet I dare not write it for Iam a sodd and within this mind is all but slang- haha
Lovely and write on-Good luck-Di
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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You show such promise- I love reading this style- so classical and full of vivid imagery- Yet I dare not write it for Iam a sodd and within this mind is all but slang- haha
Lovely and write on-Good luck-Di
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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LOL Di, I'm sure you could write one, just write a modern sonnet and use that slang, LOL
Comment from TKField
You should consider writing a romance novel. I could practically feel the bodice ripping off. Very passionate and sexy. You really steamed it up with this well written love poem. Nice rhymes as well.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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You should consider writing a romance novel. I could practically feel the bodice ripping off. Very passionate and sexy. You really steamed it up with this well written love poem. Nice rhymes as well.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Think you might have read that differently than intended, interesting interpreation though. Not sure I could pull off a novel but thanks for the support.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your sonnets and its strong rhymes very much. I especially liked all of your metaphors: "rope, flame (also personified), battlefield, threads" and your personification of "heart" and "love." I admired your fresh phrase "miscued vow."
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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I enjoyed your sonnets and its strong rhymes very much. I especially liked all of your metaphors: "rope, flame (also personified), battlefield, threads" and your personification of "heart" and "love." I admired your fresh phrase "miscued vow."
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Thank you for the wonderful words of review, very much appreciated.
Comment from Jarlsbane
Hey Hey... This is great! I know I beat up on your last post a little bit but that was mostly to kick ya in the butt and get ya thinking... This poem is fantastic... I really think you nailed it! My only glitch is the word shriveled...may just be a man thing lol....hugs sweetie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Hey Hey... This is great! I know I beat up on your last post a little bit but that was mostly to kick ya in the butt and get ya thinking... This poem is fantastic... I really think you nailed it! My only glitch is the word shriveled...may just be a man thing lol....hugs sweetie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Yep, definitely think it's a man thing, lol. I seem to do better with structured meter but practice makes perfect, one day I'll write a metered free verse and you won't bitch, maybe??? lol
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Probably not... I'm a heartless bastard so I'll find something not to like .... LOL
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hahaha, Michael, you are far from heartless but we'll just let you keep believing, of course you give me another 4 and I might have to agree with that
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p.s. I gave some thought to shriveled, changed that to tattered, also changed the first line in the second stanza per a previous suggestion, think it might read a bit better now.
Comment from djcoomes
Beautifully expressed love sonnet. Takes the reader from despair from a lost love to hope for the new. Good luck in the contest. Darlene.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Beautifully expressed love sonnet. Takes the reader from despair from a lost love to hope for the new. Good luck in the contest. Darlene.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for the lovely words of review.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Dawn of Tomorrow,
Your description of your poem, is very interesting: "from war to peace" Your sonnet, "The Mending" is mesmerizing as you draw the reader in deeper with each progressive line. It is filled with passion and emotion and lots of 'heart'
Each and every one of your lines holds a thought that is very interesting and enthralling. I am no expert, and I did not, and could not, and would not any way, go through your form with a fine tooth comb, but I very much enjoyed the passion and thoughts, the real emotions and the healing that is represented in this sonnet.
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Dawn of Tomorrow,
Your description of your poem, is very interesting: "from war to peace" Your sonnet, "The Mending" is mesmerizing as you draw the reader in deeper with each progressive line. It is filled with passion and emotion and lots of 'heart'
Each and every one of your lines holds a thought that is very interesting and enthralling. I am no expert, and I did not, and could not, and would not any way, go through your form with a fine tooth comb, but I very much enjoyed the passion and thoughts, the real emotions and the healing that is represented in this sonnet.
SweetLinda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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I could not ask for a more encouraging review. Your words mean alot to me. Thank you so much.
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Great! It was my pleasure!
Comment from Begin Again
Dawn
A beautiful love sonnet
about finding a new and stronger love
to mend a shattered heart.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Carol
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Dawn
A beautiful love sonnet
about finding a new and stronger love
to mend a shattered heart.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Carol
Comment Written 22-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for taking time to review and for the luck wish.
