Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

Bravo! "What Color Might I Make my Gift?" is the perfect love sonnet. Perfect in rhyming as well as rhythm as always. Bravo!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009

Thank you - I'm so glad you enjoyed my love sonnet. I don't write sonnets too often, but I did enjoy composing this one! Brooke :-)

Comment from Abba Lin

Excellent

HOW BEAUTIFUL AGAIN IS YOUR POEM.. IT WAS SO ENTICING AND FULFILLING AS AS IMAGINED ALL THE COLORS AS I READ YOUR WORDS. WHAT WE DO OR WILL DO TO FIND LOVE... LOVE LIN

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2009

Thank you, Lin - your gracious response is most welcome :-) Brooke

Comment from ArtGal

Excellent

Oh my, what a wonderful Sonnet! I have written these, they're fun to do. I love your wording, the many hues you offer him to be enticed. When you talk of the peacock, the picture you chose really adds to your poetry, I so enjoyed!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you, Art Gal - yes, it's hard to beat the sonnet for form :-) I so appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

I should think you'll have
them queuing up at your door
after all these gifts you've
promised.

This is really quite beautiful - perfect, in fact.

Good luck with the contest, my friend.

Margaret.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009

thanks, Margaret - hey, a girl needs an edge in today's market. LOL Brooke

reply by Margaret Snowdon on 27-Oct-2009

It's a pity you don't enjoy cooking...
that's a sure way to a man's heart...
thru his stomach - I know!!

M

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Hi Brooke An excellent sonnet,descriptive and a lovely use of colourful words. So romantic with great choice of artwork. Cheers Gaye

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009

Gaye, I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Thank you :-) Brooke

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

You are truly a master rhymer, Miss Brooke. This is a lovely Shakespearean sonnet, the meter and rhyme are absolutely perfect and the meaning is clear and dripping with love and color. I enjoyed it every line of the way to the colorful ending.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2009

Thank you, MIssMerri :-) I'm so glad you enjoyed this sonnet and its rhymes :-) Brooke

Comment from sara-beth

Excellent

Hey, I think I might be a little late on this one. Anyway, I have to say "wow"! This is brilliantly "colored" writing, and what makes it even more Shakespearean is the underlying tone of unrequited love....I adore the lines.... "Could I entice with golden threads of silk
wove into yards of pale champagne brocade,
or would chiffon as creamy white as milk
help find the love you lately have mislaid?"
.......ah, if only it were that simple! I love this...you are awesome. And the peacock pic is perfect...how's that for alliteration?

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009

Thanks so much sara-beth - sorry for this much-delayed reply. Brooke :-) Oh, and your alliteration is great! :-)

Comment from luna

Excellent

Brooke, lovely poem. I checked the meter and it seems to be in order (we're going over meter in class so I just had to check it!) I wish you well in the contest. Nice to be able to review one of your poems again.

Love,

Jenny *smile*

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2009

Thanks, Jenny - hope you're having fun in your class. Brooke :-)

Comment from Atlantalu

Excellent

How often we have wondered what it would take to have our love reciprocated. Part of love and life's journey. Well said. Thanks! Atlantalu

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2009

Thank you, Atlantalu - I'm glad you heard this voice that speaks for so many in so many relationships :-) Brooke

Comment from leesm

Excellent

A beautifully conceived and written love sonnet. One can feel the angst of a fading love.
Very enjoybale to read and review.
Best of luck in the contest.
-Lee

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2009

Thank you, Lee - I appreciate your kind and encouraging comments :-) Brooke