Comment from Mischief's Momma

Excellent

I don't think I want to fall foul of this guardian of the dark - brrr!

Great job on this poem Brooke - sorry I missed it before. Marching band season is almost over!

Did you see that Margaret Snowden wrote a lovely tribute to you - it was well deserved too :)

Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thanks so much, Sharon. I cried at Margaret's poem - she is such a lovely lady and talented writer, not to mention my best friend on site though I've never met her in person. She made my week with that poem :-) Brooke

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This reminds me of the serpent in the garden of Eden and his power over Adam and Eve. This is a good Halloween poem,
"My poison fangs can't wait to pierce your skin" gives me chills.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Elaine - so glad it gave you the chills :-) Brooke

Comment from jdrhye

Excellent

Once again the duality of your words is ingenuis and thought provoking as well as true. I like the flow and the meter as well as the message.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thanks so much - I truly appreciate your feedback :-) Brooke

Comment from eraserlynch

Exceptional

I must say I am very much impressed by the wonderful words in this poem. I was reading through and thinking of the latest issue with my teenage/adult son and was applying it to him and where he is at the moment thinking he is untouchable and can walk away from his responsibilities. Awesome poem that enabled some well due reflection on my behalf. Thank you!!

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

So many young people at that age feel this about themselves in the world. Luckily, most outgrow it :-) Thanks so much for your most insightful and generous review, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman

Excellent

I think my author friends spend a lot of time perusing the various forms of poetry; but I love the author notes and am always learning something :-) This is an awesome presentation; a bit of a shift from what I'm used to reviewing from you so I'm wondering if this is Halloween fueling the muse? :-) It could easily have been entered in a contest; well done as usual my dear Brooke!

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Tricia, for this thoughtful review :-) Yes, it is definitely the Halloween mood!!! Brooke :-)

Comment from melyuki

Excellent

Oh what a wonderful ode to the snake. Should they not be given respect always. Unfortunately , man has to rule, and so ' killing venom courses throught your veins" . Such truth comes from this poetic beauty. However, if snakes enter my house, then there's another story...... geat poem Brooke, and very colourful in its words. cheers and smiles from Mel

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thank you, Mel. I appreciate your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from TinyTeena

Excellent

I really like this style of poem. Set in times of folklore and legends, the vocab choice suits the topic and style. The words also follow the characteristics of the snake. A snake doesn't hit out immediately, but will assess the situation and danger before striking. If the offender continues on, he will strike. If the offender backs off, he will remain on guard, but ever alert. The snake senses the feelings and movements of the offender. There is a great use of sibilation - 's' sound, imitating the hissing sound of the snake. A great play on the words "no arms of welcome have I to extend" - literally: the snake has no arms, and figuratively: I'm not here to welcome you but to stop/kill those who try to proceed any further. Well done

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Bless you - I do believe you are the FIRST reviewer of dozens to say anything about the no arms play on words - and I was so proud of that one. LOLOL Thanks so much for that and your other attention to detail :-) Brooke

Comment from kleck140

Excellent

You are always giving a new dimension
to your message. This one is eerie and yet tells
a good story in few words. Very fitting for this
time of year. Keep 'em coming

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thanks, my friend, for another positive and thoughtful review :-) Brooke

reply by kleck140 on 29-Nov-2009

Thanks for your quick response.

Comment from grassroots08

Excellent

This was a cool read, but I stumbled here: "no arms of welcome have I to extend." It seemed to be off in timing or its beat. The overall poem was excellent. Cheers, Don

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2009

Thanks, Don - just reread it and didn't stumble - there are so many times we as writers and reviewers could read lines out loud to each other to see where we are deviating from each other in how we are pronouncing and inflecting :-) Brooke

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

Brooke:
Remind me not to upset you
any time soon--LOL! The
picture is indeed perfect
for this writing. I'm really
glad I didn't miss this one
as I'm not used to seeing
this side of you. love, jan

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009

Thank you, Jan. Hey, I'm a power to contend with, especially when in the Halloween mood!! LOL Brooke