Twenty for Halloween
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The House Behind the Gate"Halloween Poems in Various Forms
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Comment from Fleedleflump
As far as I'm concerned, that's the only way to pronounce macabre; the re is always silent, but maybe that's just me :-). We used have a nearby house on a corner plot with a mini jungle for a garden, rusting cars amongst the weeds, and mostly broken windows, and you've very well captured the way it made us feel :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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As far as I'm concerned, that's the only way to pronounce macabre; the re is always silent, but maybe that's just me :-). We used have a nearby house on a corner plot with a mini jungle for a garden, rusting cars amongst the weeds, and mostly broken windows, and you've very well captured the way it made us feel :-)
Mike
Comment Written 19-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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Dictionaries offer both choices and I've heard people say it with a little sucked in re sound, but yeah, I always say it without :-) Glad you could connect with this image - thanks, Mike :-) Brooke
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Nice n' creepy, just in time for Halloween. I wonder if you found the picture first, and it prompted you to write this delightful tale, or you wrote this tale, and you were fortunate to have found this wonderful photo.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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Nice n' creepy, just in time for Halloween. I wonder if you found the picture first, and it prompted you to write this delightful tale, or you wrote this tale, and you were fortunate to have found this wonderful photo.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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Which came first, the poem or the picture - sort of half and half - I wanted to write about a haunted house, then when I found this picture, I was inspired to focus on the gate :-) Thanks, Steve :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
There isn't a chance in Hell that I'd be turning that lock. But thanks for asking. Excellent poem, Brooke with just enough of the scary stuff to make your tailbone tingle, and no so much as to turn one off with gore and ghoul. Really well done. Boo!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2009
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There isn't a chance in Hell that I'd be turning that lock. But thanks for asking. Excellent poem, Brooke with just enough of the scary stuff to make your tailbone tingle, and no so much as to turn one off with gore and ghoul. Really well done. Boo!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2009
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Thanks so much, Rose, for this generous and fun review :-) Brooke
Comment from jeslaf
Brooke, I love the way you use the image as the impetus for the piece, and the appropriate, seasonally creepy tone--the ending question serves as a grand finale to the prior lines. As always, your rich language raises the FS bar. :)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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Brooke, I love the way you use the image as the impetus for the piece, and the appropriate, seasonally creepy tone--the ending question serves as a grand finale to the prior lines. As always, your rich language raises the FS bar. :)
Comment Written 18-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend - I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from BPL76
This is long but i can see your point of view
this is detailed and interesting
The way you expressed your self is good
The flow works well
It adds to the overall effect
Good Job
BPL
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2009
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This is long but i can see your point of view
this is detailed and interesting
The way you expressed your self is good
The flow works well
It adds to the overall effect
Good Job
BPL
Comment Written 18-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2009
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I just never thought of 20 lines as long :-) Thanks so much, my friend for your positive comments. Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh yes. One of my friends is a detective and my husband is a forensic detective, when they drive by high cross or marsh land long the roads or highways they always wonder how many bodies are hidden there. Another great job.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Oh yes. One of my friends is a detective and my husband is a forensic detective, when they drive by high cross or marsh land long the roads or highways they always wonder how many bodies are hidden there. Another great job.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Barbara - I bet cops harbor suspicions about lots of things after all they experience and witness every day! Brooke :-)
Comment from Anya Dawn
ooooh..nothing gives me the kicks like the element of suspense!
Love this piece, too. Adewpearl, you are really amazing!
I especially like these lines:
What specters circumambulate,
from whom blocked entrance warns, turn back?
if it were me there, i would turn back immediately and fled for life. kekeke better be safe than sorry!
Cheerio,
Anya ;-)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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ooooh..nothing gives me the kicks like the element of suspense!
Love this piece, too. Adewpearl, you are really amazing!
I especially like these lines:
What specters circumambulate,
from whom blocked entrance warns, turn back?
if it were me there, i would turn back immediately and fled for life. kekeke better be safe than sorry!
Cheerio,
Anya ;-)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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I'm so glad this one would scare you into fleeing as that was my goal!! Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from Aussie
Ooh...your dark side is showing. You should be writing scripts for 'Bones.' Great story/poem, I loved it. A real change from your sweet side and nature poems (love them also.) I think you should stick with a few of these because you write the darkness and spookiness so well. Blessings Mrs Poe.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Ooh...your dark side is showing. You should be writing scripts for 'Bones.' Great story/poem, I loved it. A real change from your sweet side and nature poems (love them also.) I think you should stick with a few of these because you write the darkness and spookiness so well. Blessings Mrs Poe.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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I've reassured a couple of people who want sweet Brooke back that after Halloween come Thanksgiving and Christmas, so that side of me shall return - until then, I'm still in the spooky mood. LOL Thanks so much, Kay. Brooke
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Along came a spider and sat down beside her and frightened Mrs Pearl away! LOL.
Comment from RebelRose
I think there is a house like this in pretty much every neighborhood. I love the poem. It is well written with a great rhyme scheme and good imagery.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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I think there is a house like this in pretty much every neighborhood. I love the poem. It is well written with a great rhyme scheme and good imagery.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Thanks, Rose - your visits and comments are most appreciated :-) Brooke
Comment from lola29
Brooke, you've described a house that I would never enter after reading your splendid poem. Never have I read something so mysteriosly intriguing, but yet, I would to scared. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Brooke, you've described a house that I would never enter after reading your splendid poem. Never have I read something so mysteriosly intriguing, but yet, I would to scared. Brilliant!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Lola. Those are some damned nice comments! Brooke :-)
