Woodland Secrets Part One
a fantasy ottava rima - see author's notes91 total reviews
Comment from skye
What a delightful beginning.. but it may take them days to arrive at the wedding, riding on snails... LOL
I like the cadence of the lines, slow, processional, stately.
Looking forward to more, and find it fun.
Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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What a delightful beginning.. but it may take them days to arrive at the wedding, riding on snails... LOL
I like the cadence of the lines, slow, processional, stately.
Looking forward to more, and find it fun.
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Skye, oh, I am not going to drag this out that much! LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Donovan
Fairies on snails may constitute an abuse that should not go unchallenged. I shall wait until the next installments to decide...and I do not...I repeat, do not take any pledge to remain silent on the identity of anyone. I have National Enquirer connections and they pay big bucks for the salacious which I can make it even if it is not.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Fairies on snails may constitute an abuse that should not go unchallenged. I shall wait until the next installments to decide...and I do not...I repeat, do not take any pledge to remain silent on the identity of anyone. I have National Enquirer connections and they pay big bucks for the salacious which I can make it even if it is not.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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ah, Donovan, if they offer to pay you enough, I can't say as I blame you for taking the payoff - of course, now that you've given me the idea, maybe I'll sell the location myself! LOL Thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
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...and cut me out...why you rat....I intended to give you a pittance.....were you ever a gangster's moll in a former life?
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Oh, I wish I had been and then perhaps I'd still have a bit of his money!!! :-)
Comment from Begin Again
Brooke
Post away...what ever it takes...You have captured the whimsy in me with your magic. This flowed so easily and the second stanza made a smile cross my face. Very cute!
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Brooke
Post away...what ever it takes...You have captured the whimsy in me with your magic. This flowed so easily and the second stanza made a smile cross my face. Very cute!
Carol
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Carol, thank you. Glad this appeals to your whimsy :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes I really liked this one and look forward to following it through to the finish your descriptions are very good the readers could put themselves in the place of the writer well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Oh yes I really liked this one and look forward to following it through to the finish your descriptions are very good the readers could put themselves in the place of the writer well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Fuller, thank you!! The next installment will be either much later today or tomorrow. I'm so far behind in answering reviews and need to do more of that today. You are most generous :-) Brooke
Comment from krishna0306
beautiful poem, would love to read the second part for sure...i just loved the way words flow, the way you create each line connected well to each other. the first stanz was funny too! i am pretty sure kids will love to read this one (not just kids)
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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beautiful poem, would love to read the second part for sure...i just loved the way words flow, the way you create each line connected well to each other. the first stanz was funny too! i am pretty sure kids will love to read this one (not just kids)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Krishna - glad you're enjoying - not sure if second half will be posted today or tomorrow :-) Brooke
Comment from melyuki
Hi Brooke , this is yet another little marvel. You have a magical mind and I love the image your story depicts. A caravan of snails with fairies riding on their shells. Love it. And the last 2 lines take the reader back to reality just for one moment. Very interesting rhyming and the poem flows like a dream. Have a wonderful day, and I promise not to tell.... Melyuki
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Hi Brooke , this is yet another little marvel. You have a magical mind and I love the image your story depicts. A caravan of snails with fairies riding on their shells. Love it. And the last 2 lines take the reader back to reality just for one moment. Very interesting rhyming and the poem flows like a dream. Have a wonderful day, and I promise not to tell.... Melyuki
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Melyuki, for your attentive and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from Joyce L.
This poem of nature and of make believe stirs an interest to watch for. The picture is good with the poem. and adds a magical touch to it.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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This poem of nature and of make believe stirs an interest to watch for. The picture is good with the poem. and adds a magical touch to it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Joyce, thank you. Glad you're enjoying :-) Brooke
Comment from grassroots08
Some people have all the luck. I am always late to arrive and it seems I always miss what's going on. I got here too late to see this caravan as slow even as it was moving. LOL Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Some people have all the luck. I am always late to arrive and it seems I always miss what's going on. I got here too late to see this caravan as slow even as it was moving. LOL Cheers, Don
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Don, thank you - you'll just have to hang out with me more if you don't want to be missing things! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from tony bronk
A very intersting poem about a subject that is rare.I promise not to tell your secret, but I believe that yuou already have. Good write. Tony
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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A very intersting poem about a subject that is rare.I promise not to tell your secret, but I believe that yuou already have. Good write. Tony
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Tony - yes, I fear the narrator is a blabber mouth :-) Brooke
Comment from HalfHoff
If I had a 6'er left in my bank, I would place it here - if not for the excellence in the verses themselves, but for the simple fact that you not only TRIED to write one of these thingies, but acutally understand what the heck it is. Hats off to you, doll. whew. XO Lea Ann
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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If I had a 6'er left in my bank, I would place it here - if not for the excellence in the verses themselves, but for the simple fact that you not only TRIED to write one of these thingies, but acutally understand what the heck it is. Hats off to you, doll. whew. XO Lea Ann
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, HalfHoff - Dawn of Tomorrow challenged me to use the form a week or so ago and I've written several now - I really love the form. Brooke :-)
