When Death Stalks the Serengeti
quatrains in 9/8/9/899 total reviews
Comment from Deejharrington
It captures the violence and terror of life in Africa. The beautiful animals and vistas disguise the true nature of the land. You have put that beautifully and terrifyingly into words.
deb
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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It captures the violence and terror of life in Africa. The beautiful animals and vistas disguise the true nature of the land. You have put that beautifully and terrifyingly into words.
deb
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Deb - I'm glad you like this one! Brooke :-)
Comment from Nicnac
Whoa!!! Fabulous imagery!
This reminds me of watching the TV program 'Wild Kingdom with Marlin Perkins' when I was a child. I used to watch in horror as animals would hunt down smaller prey. I always rooted for the underdog and couldn't understand why the photographers stood and watched without helping the poor little victims.
This is a wonderfully written poem, Brooke. The flow is very smooth and the picture painted is clear. Very dynamic!
Stunning work.
I love it.
No suggestions. (If there was anything to change in any of your poems, I'd be having palpitations and clutching my chest. You're a perfectionist and it shows in your work.) LOL
Brilliant. (I still can't give you a sixer - but I would if I could.)
Nic
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Whoa!!! Fabulous imagery!
This reminds me of watching the TV program 'Wild Kingdom with Marlin Perkins' when I was a child. I used to watch in horror as animals would hunt down smaller prey. I always rooted for the underdog and couldn't understand why the photographers stood and watched without helping the poor little victims.
This is a wonderfully written poem, Brooke. The flow is very smooth and the picture painted is clear. Very dynamic!
Stunning work.
I love it.
No suggestions. (If there was anything to change in any of your poems, I'd be having palpitations and clutching my chest. You're a perfectionist and it shows in your work.) LOL
Brilliant. (I still can't give you a sixer - but I would if I could.)
Nic
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Nic, great. Now in addition to my normal obsessive/compulsive need to eliminate any errors before I post because I can't stand the embarrassment of having someone point out a typo, now I have the added burden of knowing if I ever slip up I am going to give you palpitations!!! LOL Thank you for your lovely and generous review. You're the best - stay healthy!! Brooke :-)
Comment from hfriscia
I really enjoyed reading your poem, it explains the beauty of mother nature, so peacefull, like. The poem, while reading it jumps out you, well done.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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I really enjoyed reading your poem, it explains the beauty of mother nature, so peacefull, like. The poem, while reading it jumps out you, well done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend - I appreciate your thoughtful comments. :-) Brooke
Comment from DrCarter2001
Really nice, I love the imagery here and could picture the zebras fleeing lions and jackals through the plains as I read, even though I've never even been to Africa (but want to).
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Really nice, I love the imagery here and could picture the zebras fleeing lions and jackals through the plains as I read, even though I've never even been to Africa (but want to).
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Dr.Carter, for your thoughtful review - I, too, have not been but would love to see it all firsthand and not just in documentaries :-) Brooke
Comment from LYLE
Brooke,
These quatrains in 9/8/9/8 have a musical flow when they are read aloud. I will try to write one after I get my
daDUMdaDUM under control. But, then again, having to
hit on syllables 3,6, and 8 is going to be difficult, because I am having enough problems with daDUMdaDum:(
Seriously, I do like the structure, the meter, and the description within the poem. I have flown over a small portion of those plains in a balloon and they are spectacular. Those plains, by the way, are at an elevation of 4,000 feet. A wonderful poem as always.
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Brooke,
These quatrains in 9/8/9/8 have a musical flow when they are read aloud. I will try to write one after I get my
daDUMdaDUM under control. But, then again, having to
hit on syllables 3,6, and 8 is going to be difficult, because I am having enough problems with daDUMdaDum:(
Seriously, I do like the structure, the meter, and the description within the poem. I have flown over a small portion of those plains in a balloon and they are spectacular. Those plains, by the way, are at an elevation of 4,000 feet. A wonderful poem as always.
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Lyle, for such a generous review!! You flew over them in a balloon????? I am now dying with envy. I don't care if I'm not supposed to covet - I am coveting big time. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Gramma Kathy
Well done! You have taken my imagination on a realistic journey to the Serengeti.
Your descriptions are vivid, making the scenes you've painted come to life.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Well done! You have taken my imagination on a realistic journey to the Serengeti.
Your descriptions are vivid, making the scenes you've painted come to life.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Kathy - it is good to hear from you - I'm glad you enjoyed :-)
Comment from Fish
K... gotta try this one...
I love to drug all of the penguins
That languor all day at the zoo;
I take one or two home for dinner:
It's fun just to feed them to you.
Oops, failure! da-da-dumdumdum!
Not a very cheery poem you've written...but
vicious, vicious...RRrrrrrrrroooooooow!
Fish
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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K... gotta try this one...
I love to drug all of the penguins
That languor all day at the zoo;
I take one or two home for dinner:
It's fun just to feed them to you.
Oops, failure! da-da-dumdumdum!
Not a very cheery poem you've written...but
vicious, vicious...RRrrrrrrrroooooooow!
Fish
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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You're so right, Fish - this one just ain't cheery! LOL Thank you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Another marvelous poem, Brooke. I always wonder where you get your inspiration from. This is a sad but necessary fact of life. I don't like watching nature shows which show this kind of thing. You have captured it perfectly.
John
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Another marvelous poem, Brooke. I always wonder where you get your inspiration from. This is a sad but necessary fact of life. I don't like watching nature shows which show this kind of thing. You have captured it perfectly.
John
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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John, thank you!! The inspiration comes from a bazillion places - in this case, it was this beautiful picture combined with documentaries I've watched in the past :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
I am never disappointed in opening
up one of your creations. Besides
being beautifully constructed, visually
perfect in the way you dip your brush
into the palate of words which you
softly spread upon this site, your
author's notes are a class in writing
all by themselves.
You are both prolific and an artist
with words.
As always, well done
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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I am never disappointed in opening
up one of your creations. Besides
being beautifully constructed, visually
perfect in the way you dip your brush
into the palate of words which you
softly spread upon this site, your
author's notes are a class in writing
all by themselves.
You are both prolific and an artist
with words.
As always, well done
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you. I so appreciate your most thoughtful and warm comments, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
Great read--great lesson in your Author Notes. Can't tell you how much I've learned from your impromptu lessons. Thanks. Enjoyed this poem. Very serious subject treated with well-chosen, powerful words and images. elaine
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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adewpearl,
Great read--great lesson in your Author Notes. Can't tell you how much I've learned from your impromptu lessons. Thanks. Enjoyed this poem. Very serious subject treated with well-chosen, powerful words and images. elaine
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Elaine, I am honored by this most generous review. Thank you so very much!! Brooke :-)
