The Ottava Rima
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Comment from sara-beth
Hmm....this is interesting. I'm not sure; I think people want to wander freely, but if they had the chance, would they really do it? Sometimes people dread their familiar fences, and cling to them at the same time! But the fun of dreaming is that we are safe and sound, I guess. Food for though, and enjoyable!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Hmm....this is interesting. I'm not sure; I think people want to wander freely, but if they had the chance, would they really do it? Sometimes people dread their familiar fences, and cling to them at the same time! But the fun of dreaming is that we are safe and sound, I guess. Food for though, and enjoyable!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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I would not have wandered even if given the means as much when my family was young, but given the chance now, I'd travel full-time! Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from EllieKaye
Those who dare to dream--to risk and find adventure! Yes, I know what you mean. Our window keeps us in our safety zone. We peer out, but rarely open it and climb through. Love this, Brooke. :)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Those who dare to dream--to risk and find adventure! Yes, I know what you mean. Our window keeps us in our safety zone. We peer out, but rarely open it and climb through. Love this, Brooke. :)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend - glad you found the meaning in this :-) Brooke
Comment from Arkine
Interesting question. In truth, I'm pretty content where I am, but there are things that tweak my interest and make me want to wander from time to time. To explore the world beyond and meet new people. It's a vast, yet surprisingly small world that we live in. Great job on this!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Interesting question. In truth, I'm pretty content where I am, but there are things that tweak my interest and make me want to wander from time to time. To explore the world beyond and meet new people. It's a vast, yet surprisingly small world that we live in. Great job on this!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend - at this stage in my life, I'd like to live a couple of years out of a suitcase :-) Brooke
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I think a lot of people do, thus the motorhome migration every summer. ;)
Comment from Eternal Muse
Another masterpiece. This make Ottawa Rima your own.
An ode to a window! And to what lies beneath! That ceratinly sets a bar for imagery. And how very creative, and your iambic is spot on. I really have to try this form. A tastefully done poem in imabic pentameter is a treat for a soul (lol). Your poetry has grown amazingly since I first met you. A delight.
Hugs and love, Yelena
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Another masterpiece. This make Ottawa Rima your own.
An ode to a window! And to what lies beneath! That ceratinly sets a bar for imagery. And how very creative, and your iambic is spot on. I really have to try this form. A tastefully done poem in imabic pentameter is a treat for a soul (lol). Your poetry has grown amazingly since I first met you. A delight.
Hugs and love, Yelena
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Yelena. I do hope you try the form - I just love it :-) Brooke
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I will be posting chapters for my book for the next or so; so there will be no poetry, regretfully. Then I'll have to promote the chapters, as the deadline is November 15th. I am taking a breaking from my favorite poetry for a while.
But I will definitely try Ottava Rima as soon as I am back.
Y.
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Gees, I am groggy this morning. I meant, I am taking a BREAK from poetry for a while, until I finish the chapters; that would be a week or so.
^_^
Comment from Maurice WA Johnson
As you can imagin, Brooke, this piece spoke to me at an intensly personal level. Speaking as it does, to my current condition and limits. But I have come to realise that, while I'm limited physicaly, and perhaps emotionaly, my imagination remains free to soar beyond all boundaries. I might even suggest that my imagination roams free-er(?) because of these other limits.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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As you can imagin, Brooke, this piece spoke to me at an intensly personal level. Speaking as it does, to my current condition and limits. But I have come to realise that, while I'm limited physicaly, and perhaps emotionaly, my imagination remains free to soar beyond all boundaries. I might even suggest that my imagination roams free-er(?) because of these other limits.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Maurice - all sorts of things limit even the most physically able of people - fear of the unknown, self-doubt, or just contentment with already being a big fish in a small pond. I truly appreciate your thoughtful comments about how you connect with this poem. Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
A very well crafted ottava rima. You kept
within the "boundaries" of this structure -
rhyme and meter perfectly executed - while opening
our minds to possibilities of breaking out of the
confines of the familiar. Very provacative.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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A very well crafted ottava rima. You kept
within the "boundaries" of this structure -
rhyme and meter perfectly executed - while opening
our minds to possibilities of breaking out of the
confines of the familiar. Very provacative.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Nancyjam. I appreciate your observations on the form and the content of my poem. Brooke
Comment from Plotosaurus
A fine example of the ottava rima form. The artwork goes well with your poem. One small suggestion. You might consider changing the pronoun in the last line to her instead of his. It would make the subject matter more personal. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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A fine example of the ottava rima form. The artwork goes well with your poem. One small suggestion. You might consider changing the pronoun in the last line to her instead of his. It would make the subject matter more personal. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Photosaurus for your thoughtful review. It may be showing my age, but in my mind's eye, when I visualize a vagabond, it is a guy I am picturing. :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
This poem is one that all Agoraphobics should paste on their wall. So many cannot venture far from their homes, or streets with which thay are familiar. I have known a few such people, and with much work on their part, and that of their friends and family, they were able to break free of the barriers that this affliction brings. Great words of inspiration, Brooke. The only way to beat Agoraphobia is to keep pushing your boundaries.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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This poem is one that all Agoraphobics should paste on their wall. So many cannot venture far from their homes, or streets with which thay are familiar. I have known a few such people, and with much work on their part, and that of their friends and family, they were able to break free of the barriers that this affliction brings. Great words of inspiration, Brooke. The only way to beat Agoraphobia is to keep pushing your boundaries.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Rose. I had not even thought of agoraphobia when writing this, but you're right, it sure applies to them! Brooke
Comment from samuelbrody
Brooke... Hello. In the poem, you have captured the essence of one becoming a 'world view' person. Through verse you have crafted a piece which has all the protocols done well... Rhyme, rhythm, flow, word usage and depth of meaning. In a sense, it is a statement of freedom; freedom to look beyond oneself to take in the vastness of the world in which we live. Well done. Michael.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Brooke... Hello. In the poem, you have captured the essence of one becoming a 'world view' person. Through verse you have crafted a piece which has all the protocols done well... Rhyme, rhythm, flow, word usage and depth of meaning. In a sense, it is a statement of freedom; freedom to look beyond oneself to take in the vastness of the world in which we live. Well done. Michael.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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Michael, thank you. I truly appreciate your looking at the craft of the poem as well as the message :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wonder if you took a poll.
Would you rather be a big fish in a small pond or a little fish in a big pond?
How the poll would come out. Interesting thought. I see advantages to both. Can I be a medium fish in a medium pond?
Great poem
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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I wonder if you took a poll.
Would you rather be a big fish in a small pond or a little fish in a big pond?
How the poll would come out. Interesting thought. I see advantages to both. Can I be a medium fish in a medium pond?
Great poem
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2009
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The people who delight me the most are the big fish in small ponds who don't seem to grasp the small pond part, the ones full of themselves because they've been elected president of the local PTA types. LOL Thanks so much, Barbara. Brooke :-)
