The Ottava Rima
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Comment from Steve Pantazis
I took a few days off, but I'm back!
This piece has an interesting cadence. It's jam-packed with goodies. I was surprised to see you mention "raccoon" a second time. I reckon that's by design. Overall, this is another unique poem and a nice addition to your collection.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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I took a few days off, but I'm back!
This piece has an interesting cadence. It's jam-packed with goodies. I was surprised to see you mention "raccoon" a second time. I reckon that's by design. Overall, this is another unique poem and a nice addition to your collection.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Yes, it's by design :-) Thank you, Pantazis. Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Co-lor-ful!!
Be-u-ti-ful!!
What a scene - full of fairies, swans, tadpoles, racoons and fall colors. It doesn't get any better than this! (I know, I'm using too many exclamation points. haha)
All of your poetry is beautiful, Brooke, but this is up in the top masterpieces. :))) Well deserving of a six (blasted rules) Six stars or not - just know that I think this is magnificent.
I Love the alliterative s, m, r and c. :)
Motley is a great word.
Fabulous mental images are dancing in my head.
I really like this form.
Nic
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Co-lor-ful!!
Be-u-ti-ful!!
What a scene - full of fairies, swans, tadpoles, racoons and fall colors. It doesn't get any better than this! (I know, I'm using too many exclamation points. haha)
All of your poetry is beautiful, Brooke, but this is up in the top masterpieces. :))) Well deserving of a six (blasted rules) Six stars or not - just know that I think this is magnificent.
I Love the alliterative s, m, r and c. :)
Motley is a great word.
Fabulous mental images are dancing in my head.
I really like this form.
Nic
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Nic, you are a sweetheart!!! Thank you. Brooke :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, as always another fine poem. The octtava poem is one that I had never heard of so thank you for your author notes. Your poem has great rhythm and rhyme and much color.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Brooke, as always another fine poem. The octtava poem is one that I had never heard of so thank you for your author notes. Your poem has great rhythm and rhyme and much color.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Mary Jayne, thank you. I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well written again a quality written write that reads very well I enjoyed you have mastered the form well regards Fuller
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Very well written again a quality written write that reads very well I enjoyed you have mastered the form well regards Fuller
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Fuller, thank you. Glad you like this use of the form. Brooke :-)
Comment from grassroots08
You have captured great detail in this piece. The picture you chose goes well with your writing. I enjoyed each line you skillfully painted here. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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You have captured great detail in this piece. The picture you chose goes well with your writing. I enjoyed each line you skillfully painted here. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Don - so pleased you enjoyed this one :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I loved the art work, and the writers imagination, that the writer shares with us here, and always has shared with us.
Reading these words brought me back to when I was a child, and I loved the fairies and still do. I felt the words were gentle and flowing. I loved everything about this poem.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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I loved the art work, and the writers imagination, that the writer shares with us here, and always has shared with us.
Reading these words brought me back to when I was a child, and I loved the fairies and still do. I felt the words were gentle and flowing. I loved everything about this poem.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Annie - I always appreciate hearing from you :-) Glad it connects with your childhood memories! Brooke
Comment from sunny39
This poem is fantastic. Not only is it perfect ottava rima, but the words paint a beautiful picture of Autumn. Your use of the natural (tadpoles, raccoons) and the supernatural (fairies) blend together in harmony. The ending assures me that even though all might appear to die in winter, it is just a cycle in the rebirth of nature.
Wonderful!
Sunny
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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This poem is fantastic. Not only is it perfect ottava rima, but the words paint a beautiful picture of Autumn. Your use of the natural (tadpoles, raccoons) and the supernatural (fairies) blend together in harmony. The ending assures me that even though all might appear to die in winter, it is just a cycle in the rebirth of nature.
Wonderful!
Sunny
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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I so appreciate your lovely and generous review, Sunny - I thank you for your encouragement and graciousness :-) Brooke
Comment from jdrhye
Very lovely poem of seasons change from summer to fall. I have to admit I am a summer person and dread the fall and winter but your poem is lovely and true and puts it all back into perspective. Thank you for reminding me that rebirth is a beautiful metamorphasis.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Very lovely poem of seasons change from summer to fall. I have to admit I am a summer person and dread the fall and winter but your poem is lovely and true and puts it all back into perspective. Thank you for reminding me that rebirth is a beautiful metamorphasis.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thank you for the review - since it is a four and your only comments are positive, could you please clarify what it is that you found lacking and in need of revision? Brooke
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Sorry again guess I got ahead of myself will change to a 5 which was the intention.
Comment from flygirl254
Very nice poem. The construction is spot on, with the iambic pentameter holding and flowing neatly throughout the work. I especially like the rhyme scheme of abababcc in each stanza. Very well done. The poem evokes very pleasant feelings of hope and beauty as we look forward to Autumn, my favorite season. Great job! - if this is a repeat review, my apologies, I was thrown off-line and wanted to make sure you received my thoughts. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Very nice poem. The construction is spot on, with the iambic pentameter holding and flowing neatly throughout the work. I especially like the rhyme scheme of abababcc in each stanza. Very well done. The poem evokes very pleasant feelings of hope and beauty as we look forward to Autumn, my favorite season. Great job! - if this is a repeat review, my apologies, I was thrown off-line and wanted to make sure you received my thoughts. :-)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thanks so much, flygirl - yesterday I had six duplicate reviews from one person - but I think I only got one from you :-) Brooke
Comment from Laidy
i thought this was a different poem then most of my readings. you have very great ideas that were flowed from this page. great job
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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i thought this was a different poem then most of my readings. you have very great ideas that were flowed from this page. great job
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Laidy :-) Brooke
