Comment from ArtGal

Excellent

Great Cinquain, expressing what has to be done first before release comes, so well done with few words, it says so much, I really enjoyed!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009

Thank you, Art Gal - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

this is a very short piece of poetic thoughts that have some real truth behind them.This was just a delight to have written a review for... John

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009

Thank you, John, for reviewing my cinquain :-) Brooke

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

You follow all the different styles of poetry writing so easily and excellently
This is one piece where I must say the the topic/content is the most basic piece of truth that there must be written
your depth of writing attaches to the reader and leaves an imprint that will stay with that person
Have a smiley day

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009

Thank you, smileycloud for a most perceptive review :-) Brooke

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

A very thought provoking work my friend and oh so true all uncertainness must be ironed out first to pave the way well done regards Fuller

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009

Thanks, Fuller - as always, I appreciate your comments and visits :-) Brooke

Comment from BPL76

Excellent

Thoughtful.
Your point of view is wonderful
It flows well
I am impressed with this line of thinking
Good Job
Well worth the read

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009

Thank you - your thoughtful comments are most appreciated! Brooke :-)

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

Brooke,
You are amazing.
Your poetry is so beautiful.
Do you EVER have an 'off' day? lol There are some days that I just can't write a thing. haha

You've written a very insightful piece.
Lovely message.
Nic

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009

Thank you, Nic. I have lots of off days - I just hide them well. LOL Brooke

Comment from jeslaf

Excellent

Well isn't this just the neatest little proverb tied up with a bow? Love the rhyme, the didactic tone, the universal accessibility/application. Well done. :)

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Thank you - I'm so glad this works for you :-) Brooke

Comment from BJean

Excellent

This is a very nice and meaningful cinquain.
For sure,
there can be peace with mistrust. Says alot with
few words. Jean

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Jean, thank you for your positive words. Brooke

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hey brooke,

How very true! Ya can't offer peace to an enemy until you feel confident that enemy will no longer harm you, one way or the other.

Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Thank you for your perceptive read, Deb :-) Brooke

Comment from MariJo

Excellent

This certainly applies to our political situation in today's world. An excellent choice of words to communicate the message & well crafted cinquain. Food for thought. I hesitate to suggest a change from someone less experienced but will stick my neck out---
would reversing the two words "first" & "must" make it read better?

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

must first find doesn't scan as iambic meter to me - it breaks that rhythm the way I read it naturally. Thank you, MariJo for your most thoughtful review!! Brooke :-)

reply by MariJo on 26-Sep-2009

Thanks for the help. I am still struggling to learn how to scan meter.