Comment from RDROOKIE81

Excellent

That was a great illustration. You are brave to take on such a tough format. Good for you. This is an excellent poem, and was easy to be swept into the sea.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Thank you for your encouraging comments :-) Brooke

Comment from Jarlsbane

Excellent

This is great... you've done a marvelous job with the form... I have been playing with one on and off for three days now and can't make it work so that I like it enough to post it...

the imagery and activity in this piece gives the reader a thoughtful look at a beautiful scene. There is nothing pick at in this one! Great Job Brooke!

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Did Jo Lynn dare you to do yours too? Do I get a prize for posting first? LOL Thank you, Michael :-) Brooke

reply by Jarlsbane on 26-Sep-2009

No... i saw you had done one and I thought I would try my hand to take a break from the free verse I've been doing lately... i'm struggling lol

Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea

Excellent

There you go again, Brooke! LOL! Loved it! I am a fairy fan anyway, as I had friends that were fairies as a child in the hills of Eastern Kentucky. (I promise!) Great work!

Penny

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Thanks, Penny, and good morning :-) And you don't need to convince me you had fairy friends :-) Brooke

reply by Kentucky Sweet Pea on 26-Sep-2009

lol! i didn't think i would have to! ;)

Comment from filmoreodragon

Excellent

What a beautiful form well executed with a wonderful content. I agree with Miranda. The story and nature topics are my favorite as well. Thanks for another gem.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009

Thank you. :-) Miranda will be glad to know you're on her side :-) Brooke

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is wonderful and enchanting. You make the sea magical and I love the fairy terns, they add to the story. Thanks for introducing me to this form of poetry.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thank you - so glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke

Comment from dtimes3

Excellent

Nicely written and an enjoyable read. Work in this form for awhile and you won't have any trouble slipping into a villanelle ;)

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thanks - oh, the dreaded villanelle :-) Brooke

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

I like this poem. It is a pleasant read and offers good imagery with the use of words. The use of the language is strong and meaningful, particularly while working with the chosen form. I've no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing your poem.
M

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thank you, Mountainwriter. So glad you enjoyed this :-) Brooke

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

You certainly succeeded in all your "poetic" goals with this poem. It's wonderfully readable! A pleasure from beginning to end. Thanks. ann

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thanks, Ann - I'm so pleased at your response :-) Brooke

Comment from Deejharrington

Excellent

A beautiful expression of a poetic form that I could not even begin to contemplate or try to write. I love reading them, so that's the best part.
deb

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thank you, Deb - I am honored :-) Brooke

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

I love the idea of living above the fray, like your fairy tern. Takes lots of practice to stay there, though. Your little poem is a good reminder that a change of perspective is sometimes required. Good thinking, Brooke. Thanks for the reminder.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009

Thanks, Adrienne :-) So glad you enjoyed. Brooke