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Comment from rama devi
This is very amusing. At first I thought you used the word first too many times, but on second read I find it works. I speeds up the pace and leads to the climax- very cute.
A strong entry. I think this will garner votes because it is so sweet and innocent.
Warmly,
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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This is very amusing. At first I thought you used the word first too many times, but on second read I find it works. I speeds up the pace and leads to the climax- very cute.
A strong entry. I think this will garner votes because it is so sweet and innocent.
Warmly,
rd
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you rama devi for your feedback. I also thought it had the word 'first' too many times, but it suited the story. Appreciate your comments.
