A Blue Jay Perched Upon a Bough
a story in four quatrains86 total reviews
Comment from RDROOKIE81
Nice poem, it has good flow, and is easy to like. I can see why it has such a good rating. You have some nice descriptive words as well
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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Nice poem, it has good flow, and is easy to like. I can see why it has such a good rating. You have some nice descriptive words as well
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your thoughtful response :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
Ah, the joys of a sunny day. We especially appreciate them here after all the horrid floods we've been through. Fortunately, Dalton was not that hard hit - our newspaper said that flooding was restricted to "the usual places" - but nearby counties were hit very hard, with a few fatalities.
I really appreciated this poem, which is perfect in every way. That sounds like a contented blue jay.
Dave
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
Ah, the joys of a sunny day. We especially appreciate them here after all the horrid floods we've been through. Fortunately, Dalton was not that hard hit - our newspaper said that flooding was restricted to "the usual places" - but nearby counties were hit very hard, with a few fatalities.
I really appreciated this poem, which is perfect in every way. That sounds like a contented blue jay.
Dave
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Sorry about all the flooding - I do hope you have a lovely October to make up for it, Dave. Brooke :-)
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Brooke,
Thanks so much for your sympathetic note. Actually, with all the rain we've gotten this year after several years of drought, I'm expecting a beautiful color season.
Dave
Comment from dportwood
Very often, animals just stand and absorb the rays, content to be inzctive as their bodies respond to the warmth. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Duane
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Very often, animals just stand and absorb the rays, content to be inzctive as their bodies respond to the warmth. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Duane
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Duane - I appreciate your good wishes - I hope your reviews mean you're going to post soon! :-) Brooke
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Desr Brooke,
This is charming and a lovely read, I could almost feel the Sun myself. I love the way you bring the senses of Food and warmth. You poem as always flows with perfection, with strong imagrey.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Desr Brooke,
This is charming and a lovely read, I could almost feel the Sun myself. I love the way you bring the senses of Food and warmth. You poem as always flows with perfection, with strong imagrey.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Steve, thank you. I am honored by your generous reception of this poem!! Brooke :-)
Comment from jdrhye
Lovely, the flow gives way to the content of your words and the action of the bird, and then his basking in the sun. Once again I am now being didactic but the visuals of your words are stunning and wonderful to be able to illicit the 5 senses of your reader is ingenious!!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Lovely, the flow gives way to the content of your words and the action of the bird, and then his basking in the sun. Once again I am now being didactic but the visuals of your words are stunning and wonderful to be able to illicit the 5 senses of your reader is ingenious!!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you, dear friend - You really are most kind :-) Brooke
Comment from rosaliedem
A lovely poem about a Robin enjoying his "day in the sun" I love birds as i have two parakeets, they are a joy.I wish You luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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A lovely poem about a Robin enjoying his "day in the sun" I love birds as i have two parakeets, they are a joy.I wish You luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you, rosalie :-) I appreciate your kind wishes. Brooke
Comment from teafor2
adewpearl--A smooth flowing sonorous nar-
ration showcasing "A Blue Jay Perched Upon
a Bough," partaking of delectable "...ber-
ries plump and sweet..." and basking in
"...the comfort Father Sun had sent." This
is quite a personable melodious write. Good
luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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adewpearl--A smooth flowing sonorous nar-
ration showcasing "A Blue Jay Perched Upon
a Bough," partaking of delectable "...ber-
ries plump and sweet..." and basking in
"...the comfort Father Sun had sent." This
is quite a personable melodious write. Good
luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you - it is good to see you!! :-) Brooke
Comment from Xylok
What a great poem brooke. you honor the simplest of things as though they are worth much more, and this poem constitutes a shining example of meter and rhythm. and so he lingered, purpose gone...probably my favorite line right there. sometimes your pictures are so good for the words that i wonder if the pictures themselves don't inspire you. a highly entertaining read.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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What a great poem brooke. you honor the simplest of things as though they are worth much more, and this poem constitutes a shining example of meter and rhythm. and so he lingered, purpose gone...probably my favorite line right there. sometimes your pictures are so good for the words that i wonder if the pictures themselves don't inspire you. a highly entertaining read.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, my friend - you are kind in your comments - usually my poems come first and then the picture, but this is indeed, a poem inspired by the picture :-) Brooke
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well you did a heck of a job with it. I look forward to more of your posts as always :)
as for kind comments; i figure one ought to have praise in the bank before withdrawling criticism and there isn't a poem on this site that doesn't have something good within it. the negative/constructive criticism i would have for struggling writers would maybe overwhelm them, and the criticism/advice i would have for someone like you would merely amount to a difference in opinion so in either case i tend to avoid doing too much nit-picking. It i few and far between that might be found individuals who are so interested in improving their writing style that they openly welcome diatribes or longwinded, supported arguments which aim to suggest one's poetry is at best mediocre. the irony of course being that were they more susceptible to critique invariably they would grow as a consequence. So i tend only to comment on poems that i really liked when i read it, or poems that have clear grammar or punctuation or mechanical or technical errors because helping someone to recognize they have a typo seems obligatory at minimum to me given the nature of the site. im sure you hear praise praise praise and not too often negative criticism, but that is because your poetry is as good as it is. i like to go down to the very bottom of the rankings and find the ones who according to the hierarchy are struggling and compare their poetry to you guys at the top and then see if there are clear differences in style or concept or whatever, and doing so positions me to compare and contrast the merits for those who are struggling to meet with the kind of success or to offer the impact they would like to. at any rate, out for now, off to ethics class (which is a blast :)
Comment from BJean
Hi Brooke, this poem reminds me of when I was little and would always go out first thing in summer and sit on the concrete porch, close my arms and just bask in the sun.
Love to do that now, too, in more ways than one-bask in the Son. Lovely poem and impeccable rhyme. Jean
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Hi Brooke, this poem reminds me of when I was little and would always go out first thing in summer and sit on the concrete porch, close my arms and just bask in the sun.
Love to do that now, too, in more ways than one-bask in the Son. Lovely poem and impeccable rhyme. Jean
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Jean, thanks so much :-) What thoughtful comments :-) Glad this connected with you on a personal level. Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
I can feel the warmth of Father Sun emanating from this poem. :)
This is beautiful, Brooke.
I've felt just as this precious Blue Jay - realizing that sometimes we just have to linger a bit to realize there are more blessings than first meets the eye.
No suggestions (as usual - haha). Splendid!
Nic
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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I can feel the warmth of Father Sun emanating from this poem. :)
This is beautiful, Brooke.
I've felt just as this precious Blue Jay - realizing that sometimes we just have to linger a bit to realize there are more blessings than first meets the eye.
No suggestions (as usual - haha). Splendid!
Nic
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Nic - I figured with you I was preaching to the choir :-) Brooke
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Preach on, Sister! ;)
