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The Rictameter

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rictameter poetry

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Comment from Gaye Hemsley
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Hi Brooke As soon as I opened you listing the picture gave one the sense of Autumn coolness, and then I read your poem and it showed it even more, I really enjoyed the rhyming your bought into it. Cheers Gaye

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thank you, Gaye - it is always great to hear from you as your comments are always so lovely. Brooke :-)
Comment from Rvaltaysesd
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I like this kind of poems written by you, are beautiful and I enjoy reading them very, very good poem, greetings Rvaltaysesd

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thank you, Rvaltaysesd, for this thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
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I read the poem before I read the author notes and upon completion of the reading I said to myself - this really has a Frostian feel to it. I have not visited that area but I have come to very much trust your sense of nature and your ability bring out its best in a concise and honest manner that always makes the reader a part of the picture in the background of the details that he doesn't always see himself.

Well done and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thank you, what thoughtful comments - New England is gorgeous! Brooke :-)
Comment from Fleedleflump
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I love your use of soft, flowing language in this one, Brooke, especially in your comparison of the playful birch to the staunch redwoods. Is 'toward' intended as a single syllable? I only ask because I tripped up on it while reading; you know I hate to nit-pick :-/

Mike

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Yes, not only do people around her say toward, but before I used it I made sure the dictionaries give it a one syllable pronunciation :-) You Brits just talk funny, as Ray acknowledges!! LOL Actually, I'm a sucker for Brit accents - I could fall in love with an Englishman just from hearing him ask directions. LOL Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from jmyron
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Brooke, I do love your descriptions of nature and your putting yourself in the narrative. Another winner, and again, Write On.

John

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Thanks so much, John, for another most gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from prodigal
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Hi Brooke. I'm not sure what to make of this one. It seems to have a few twists and turns in the poem. Rather than your usual style of picking out a central theme and exploring it this one feels different.

It's almost as if I am drawn into the poem and forced to follow the narrative path as it takes its twist and turns. It would be interesting to see this style carried out further and see if it has the same effect. Different, but still very good. - Sam

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
    I thought this one had a central theme - oops if it didn't come through. Thanks, Sam :-) Brooke
Comment from fictionwriter
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We had a weeping birch tree in our yard for many years. I loved the white bark highlighted by the green boughs. I love your poem. Great job

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
    I appreciate your kind visits and reviews, Joy :-) Brooke
Comment from joan marie
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Ah, I remember those trees well. We would climb to the top, as children, and let the suppleness of the tree gently take us to the ground. Great read. joan marie

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
    Thanks, Joan Marie - you are most kind :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
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See, your author notes are often as lovely as your poetry. Just different forms. What a stunning poem, Brooke. I love Birches too. I like the word 'wend' and this line-undulating toward the skies,

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
    Thank you - I feel so bad that there was such a delay in my past couple of responses!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Steve Pantazis
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For all your wonderful rictameters, you deserve a six. You've really got the process down. This one contains some beautiful word choices--sinuous, wend, undulating--that pull the imagery together in a tight group that form a stark scene in my mind. Well done!

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2009
    Thank you, Pantazis - I've really gotten into this form - much to the consternation of my daughter who likes it when her mother writes rhyming quatrains! LOL She also is not a fan of my cinquains. LOL Brooke