The Minute Poem
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Comment from ArtGal
I love dragonflies and wrote about one. The constant glow through the wings from the sun and daylight gives them their beauty. You would be so good at Haiku and Senruy's. Have you tried this form? I enjoyed this so much.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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I love dragonflies and wrote about one. The constant glow through the wings from the sun and daylight gives them their beauty. You would be so good at Haiku and Senruy's. Have you tried this form? I enjoyed this so much.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Art Gal - I have only done one senryu but a bunch of haiku - I find the short forms really difficult :-) Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
I really enjoyed this poem and what a marvelous photograph to view. Butterflies have that cuteness factor, but a dragonfly has a mystique that will have a child follow it with wonderment.
I enjoyed this well written poem, the verse is wonderful. I hope to have the fingers to write as I am going to be photographing a Chesapeake blue crab today for a still life set up.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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I really enjoyed this poem and what a marvelous photograph to view. Butterflies have that cuteness factor, but a dragonfly has a mystique that will have a child follow it with wonderment.
I enjoyed this well written poem, the verse is wonderful. I hope to have the fingers to write as I am going to be photographing a Chesapeake blue crab today for a still life set up.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Mike, and good Saturday morning :-) Photographing blue crabs - sounds like fun!! Brooke
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Well a dozen will be steamed, but I am afraid the live one I have to lasso won't be too tickling for me to accomplish.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You know, Brooke, I have suffered the week from hell this week and have been unable to do any reading and reviewing (nor writing).
This gorgeous minute poem really lifted my spirits this morning when I sat down to catch up. I feel light and ready to take on whatever the world throws at me. Your talent always makes me feel good, but today, I feel particularly blessed by you!
Not at all surprised you won the contest with this.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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You know, Brooke, I have suffered the week from hell this week and have been unable to do any reading and reviewing (nor writing).
This gorgeous minute poem really lifted my spirits this morning when I sat down to catch up. I feel light and ready to take on whatever the world throws at me. Your talent always makes me feel good, but today, I feel particularly blessed by you!
Not at all surprised you won the contest with this.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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I am so sorry to hear about the week from hell, my friend, but delighted to hear you are feeling so much better. That I hoped lift your spirits will keep me smiling the rest of the day :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely description of one of nature's creatures.You have captured well the rhyme and syllable count and I'm not surprised this is a winning poem. Your setting is lovely.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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A lovely description of one of nature's creatures.You have captured well the rhyme and syllable count and I'm not surprised this is a winning poem. Your setting is lovely.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Pearl, and I'm so sorry for the terribly delayed response to your thoughtful review. Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is beautifully written with very good usage of strong words sorry for late review but I have had some bad news reviewing to take my mind off things this is a worthy contest winner regards Fuller
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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This is beautifully written with very good usage of strong words sorry for late review but I have had some bad news reviewing to take my mind off things this is a worthy contest winner regards Fuller
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Fuller, for this positive review. I am so sorry you have had bad news. Brooke
Comment from amada
congratulations Brooke in winning the first prize. Very well deserved. I like the tone, sweet, adoring and melancholic. A delight to the ears.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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congratulations Brooke in winning the first prize. Very well deserved. I like the tone, sweet, adoring and melancholic. A delight to the ears.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Amada, for your congratulations and your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Hearty congratulations on your contest win! I loved the artwork and the poem was special. Stained glass wings. They are so beautiful in flight or just hovering above the waterways. Thanks for sharing your delightful poem.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Hearty congratulations on your contest win! I loved the artwork and the poem was special. Stained glass wings. They are so beautiful in flight or just hovering above the waterways. Thanks for sharing your delightful poem.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Kay - it was a most inspirational topic :-) Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
I've read many poems on the beauty of a dragonfly, but this is most unique!
This polite, unselfish creature doesn't crave the spotlight, but it reflects the suns illuminating beauty. :)
Lovely! Stunning.
Nic
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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I've read many poems on the beauty of a dragonfly, but this is most unique!
This polite, unselfish creature doesn't crave the spotlight, but it reflects the suns illuminating beauty. :)
Lovely! Stunning.
Nic
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Nic - I'm so glad you like the focus of this one - I always try to find some focus like that. Brooke :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
What a delightful poem! I liked it and have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the image you chose was good and I felt you captured the spirit of the dragonfly with your verse.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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What a delightful poem! I liked it and have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the image you chose was good and I felt you captured the spirit of the dragonfly with your verse.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you, mountainwriter - I am so pleased you enjoyed this so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tati
First, I have to find the meaning of the word /unimpeded/, before admiring the rhymes and rhythm, and your choice of words of the first stanza.
Light unimpeded through your wings,
what joy this brings,
a sheer delight,
pellucid flight.
Then, to my joy I found the attractive alliterations in the second stanza:
You don't block out one /brilliant beam/
of /sun supreme/,
but /scintillate
as sun's soul/ mate.
No need have you to steal the show
from star aglow,
but so polite,
let through its light.
This is deep thought, Brooke, yet lovely. I really loved it. Good luck in the contest, tati (September 18, 2009)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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First, I have to find the meaning of the word /unimpeded/, before admiring the rhymes and rhythm, and your choice of words of the first stanza.
Light unimpeded through your wings,
what joy this brings,
a sheer delight,
pellucid flight.
Then, to my joy I found the attractive alliterations in the second stanza:
You don't block out one /brilliant beam/
of /sun supreme/,
but /scintillate
as sun's soul/ mate.
No need have you to steal the show
from star aglow,
but so polite,
let through its light.
This is deep thought, Brooke, yet lovely. I really loved it. Good luck in the contest, tati (September 18, 2009)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you so much, Tati - I so appreciate your good wishes in the contest and all your thoughtful attention to the details of this poem. :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. It's my pleasure. Honestly, it's always difficult to review your writings, Brooke. No spags, no errors ... Thank you for sharing, tati.
PS I will send you an email later this day.
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I'll look for your PM tomorrow morning :-) And like I said, I'd get hardly any reviews from anyone at all if they had to be about SPAG issues because I'm obsessive about not making technical errors. I love to hear from you - don't make me have to start making mistakes just so I can! LOL
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I feel enriched, thanks to your poem. New words, new metaphors, new alliterations, new style of writing. They helped me to develop my vocabulary and imagination. Two things I really need to be a 'no spag and no errors writer'. LOL. But since in my the Indonesian language we don't have tenses, maybe this obstacle would be the biggest hindrance for me until the day I die (LOL again.)
PS I will send an email, not pm, Brooke
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no tenses,that is really so different - how do you indicate time???
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By mentioning the time (last year, this morning, tomorrow, etc). The verbs do not change. Want an example?
Everyday I /write/ poems. (Setiap hari saya /menulis/ puisi)
Yesterday I /wrote/ poems. (Kemarin saya /menulis/ puisi)
She watched me when I was writing poems. (Dia mengawasi saya ketika saya sedang /menulis/ puisi).
So easy compared to your mother language, Brooke.
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Wow, I know a lot of school kids who would love to switch over to your method - not to mention all the writers of prose on this site to whom I point out tense shift errors! :-)
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Ha ha ... I think you have to start learning the Indonesian language. The Indonesian government would love to hear this, I'm sure, and willingly to appoint me as the Indonesian Language attache in your country ... What a dream.
