The Rictameter
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "October Oaks"rictameter poetry
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Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A nice way to start my day reading one of your poems especially such a colorful one. Well, we are in spring you in autumn both lovely seasons.
By the way my 'Spring Concert' went really well with $500 going to our choosen charity. I'll be posting a poem and picture on in the near future.Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Hi Brooke A nice way to start my day reading one of your poems especially such a colorful one. Well, we are in spring you in autumn both lovely seasons.
By the way my 'Spring Concert' went really well with $500 going to our choosen charity. I'll be posting a poem and picture on in the near future.Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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That is fantastic, Gaye - and to be able to raise money while making all those children and their parents happy and proud at the same time - I can't wait to read your poem about it!!! Thank you. Brooke :-)
Comment from Aussie
A beautiful photo to compliment your vivid description of autumn. I liked your poem very much. US certainly has some georgous trees and sumptuous colours when they turn in the seasons. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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A beautiful photo to compliment your vivid description of autumn. I liked your poem very much. US certainly has some georgous trees and sumptuous colours when they turn in the seasons. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Kay - I could live in a place where it is warm all year round with joy, but I would miss the couple weeks of fall peak color :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
I love fall and I love your poem. I liked the use of the word "coruscating". I've only one suggestion and that is with the ending of the poem being with a preposition. An alternative might be:
to make the brightest sight
I've ever looked [[upon which I've ever]]
upon. [[looked[[
Thank you for sharing your poem.
M
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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I love fall and I love your poem. I liked the use of the word "coruscating". I've only one suggestion and that is with the ending of the poem being with a preposition. An alternative might be:
to make the brightest sight
I've ever looked [[upon which I've ever]]
upon. [[looked[[
Thank you for sharing your poem.
M
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Thank you, M. One of the rules of the rictameter is that the poem must begin with the same two syllable word as the poem began. I have written 6 now in a series where I begin and end with a preposition. All apologies to those who don't like that whole ending with a preposition thing ;-) I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
Comment from Queenise
adewpearl,
Another good poem. As a matter of fact it is a great one. The flow is great. The picture is wonderful and bright as is your poem. I love October and November. The cool times of the year. Great imagery. Would recommend. Peace and LOL. Queenise
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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adewpearl,
Another good poem. As a matter of fact it is a great one. The flow is great. The picture is wonderful and bright as is your poem. I love October and November. The cool times of the year. Great imagery. Would recommend. Peace and LOL. Queenise
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Queenise, thank you!! I'm so glad you enjoy this poem - we are both fans of fall :-) Brooke
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Yes friend. I enjoyed writing it tremendously. Bless you. Queenise
Comment from ragaro
I will try to dream about your oaks and into write one day something like this. I really really like this poem
Congrats.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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I will try to dream about your oaks and into write one day something like this. I really really like this poem
Congrats.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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ragaro, thank you - I am touched by your lovely comments, Brooke :-)
Comment from Nicnac
Wow!
Beautiful, Brooke. :)
I love the alliteration sparkling throughout your colorful rictameter. I adore autumn - the beautiful colors, the soothing breezes, new smells... ahhh... I'm in love with this poem.
Nic
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Wow!
Beautiful, Brooke. :)
I love the alliteration sparkling throughout your colorful rictameter. I adore autumn - the beautiful colors, the soothing breezes, new smells... ahhh... I'm in love with this poem.
Nic
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Nic. I could have guessed you'd be a huge fan of autumn leaves :-) Brooke
Comment from marinepoet87
WOW, great imagery used here in such short and succinct lines. You have explained autumn's fire exquisitely in such a short verse, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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WOW, great imagery used here in such short and succinct lines. You have explained autumn's fire exquisitely in such a short verse, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you, my friend - I so appreciate your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from jack silver
yes I would agree with that. It is around October in New Zealand and already the trees are blossoming and leaves beginning spring out in all their bright colours. I enjoyed reading.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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yes I would agree with that. It is around October in New Zealand and already the trees are blossoming and leaves beginning spring out in all their bright colours. I enjoyed reading.
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Jack
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Jack - happy tree viewing in beautiful New Zealand :-) Brooke
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I will enjoy it
Comment from jmyron
This is a good poem Brooke. The imagery of the leaves turning color against the darkening sky... Oaks are one of my favorite trees, next to cedar.
John
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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This is a good poem Brooke. The imagery of the leaves turning color against the darkening sky... Oaks are one of my favorite trees, next to cedar.
John
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thank you, John. Cedars are beautiful, too - Brooke :-)
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Brooke, you are really taking a liking to peotic form and have become quite nasterful at it. This one reads well, full off imagery and comparison, and all sorts of inqgenious techniques that make the poem come to life. Very well done, Poetess.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Brooke, you are really taking a liking to peotic form and have become quite nasterful at it. This one reads well, full off imagery and comparison, and all sorts of inqgenious techniques that make the poem come to life. Very well done, Poetess.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Steven - yes, love the forms :-) Brooke
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It is an addictive form, isn't it :) hugs~
~ Steven
