Temptation
Contemplative Quatrains80 total reviews
Comment from Peter@Poole
What a stirring poem, Brooke. Raging waters are invariably dangerous, so be careful how you negotiate them. My favourite line was the one about swells being set in motion. Peter
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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What a stirring poem, Brooke. Raging waters are invariably dangerous, so be careful how you negotiate them. My favourite line was the one about swells being set in motion. Peter
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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No need to worry, Peter - I don't really crave dangerous waters - a tiny, tame little adventure would do quite well! LOL Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Love the imagery in this, Brooke. How well you have captured the essence of your personality in this wonderful metaphor! I like to think it could also describe me. :)
John
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Love the imagery in this, Brooke. How well you have captured the essence of your personality in this wonderful metaphor! I like to think it could also describe me. :)
John
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thank you, John - I'm so glad you connected with this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi there adewpearl - I so agree .. give me a storm every now and then too! I am afraid I am one of those people that if things are too peaceful, too long, I actually create the storm. LOL. My father once said that the only time he worries about me is when I don't have a problem to solve! I'll never forget that. I suppose he thought I was too troublesome when I was bored. I was a bit of a live-wire in his life, but its funny, as we have both got older, I am his biggest joy! Thanks for this little Quantrain .. I like it when your poetry evokes my memories! Marion.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Hi there adewpearl - I so agree .. give me a storm every now and then too! I am afraid I am one of those people that if things are too peaceful, too long, I actually create the storm. LOL. My father once said that the only time he worries about me is when I don't have a problem to solve! I'll never forget that. I suppose he thought I was too troublesome when I was bored. I was a bit of a live-wire in his life, but its funny, as we have both got older, I am his biggest joy! Thanks for this little Quantrain .. I like it when your poetry evokes my memories! Marion.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Marion, thank you. I am not surprised one little that you are his biggest joy, my friend! I'm so glad I connected with your memories :-) Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
LOL. I find myself longing for the Doldrums at present! It's 'all go' here at my house. One lad in bits because his girlfriend of 3 years just dumped him; another in bits because he has to go back to hated school; the car is on the blink and will cost a fortune to repair ... ah, me!
Great poem, Brooke. Very much in the Masefield ilk. Didn't he write "Oh, I must go down to the sea again..?" I love the movement you've caught in the lines and great picture too.
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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LOL. I find myself longing for the Doldrums at present! It's 'all go' here at my house. One lad in bits because his girlfriend of 3 years just dumped him; another in bits because he has to go back to hated school; the car is on the blink and will cost a fortune to repair ... ah, me!
Great poem, Brooke. Very much in the Masefield ilk. Didn't he write "Oh, I must go down to the sea again..?" I love the movement you've caught in the lines and great picture too.
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Yes, when my children were in their teens and living at home, I was never longing for more excitement, but with them gone and far away, I could use the adventure - keep hanging in there, Kat - eventually they do settle down. :-) Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, I haven't been on Fanstory in a while because of my brother and sister's illness. I finally have a day to myself so here I am. Your poem clearly portrays that you life is pretty calm right now. Be thankful because that one squall can turn your whole life upside down. I have felt as you describe with the normalcy of life but you don't want the kind of excitement that I am experiencing.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Brooke, I haven't been on Fanstory in a while because of my brother and sister's illness. I finally have a day to myself so here I am. Your poem clearly portrays that you life is pretty calm right now. Be thankful because that one squall can turn your whole life upside down. I have felt as you describe with the normalcy of life but you don't want the kind of excitement that I am experiencing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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No, Mary Jayne, I do not envy you that type of excitement or squall at all. I am certain your brother and sister appreciate your loving care so much. I am just hoping for a bit of travel or adventure. You and your family are in my thoughts and prayers. Brooke :-)
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Thanks for you prayers, Brooke. I know what you mean about needing some travel because I am dying to escape somewhere new and exotic. When they get better, I need a traveling vacation to rest my soul! Mary Jayne
Comment from Fleedleflump
Yep, sometimes the extremities have their appeal. Of course, when we find ourselves in intense situations, suddenly that serence, occasionally boring existence seems far away and deeply desirable :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Yep, sometimes the extremities have their appeal. Of course, when we find ourselves in intense situations, suddenly that serence, occasionally boring existence seems far away and deeply desirable :-)
Mike
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Oh, yeah, I know - there have been many times in my life I've longed for serenity, Mike, but I sure could use a good adventure right now! LOL Heck, I could use a few days at Disneyworld - anything!!! LOL Thanks, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from NadineM
Brooke,
I like this poem. It's almost sing-songy.
(My bonnie lies over the ocean... is the tune it read similar to)
I understand that feeling of something screaming inside of you to throw caution to the wind and say "hey, adventure and even danger, take me!! Let me live on the edge today. If I like it, maybe we'll do it again tomorrow!".. haha...
Thanks for sharing this with me. Hoping you found the fun and adventure you were seeking!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
I like this poem. It's almost sing-songy.
(My bonnie lies over the ocean... is the tune it read similar to)
I understand that feeling of something screaming inside of you to throw caution to the wind and say "hey, adventure and even danger, take me!! Let me live on the edge today. If I like it, maybe we'll do it again tomorrow!".. haha...
Thanks for sharing this with me. Hoping you found the fun and adventure you were seeking!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Yep, you get the spirit of the poem completely, Nadine - thank you!!! :-) Brooke
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So did you find something exciting and new to fill that void?...Nadine
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Nope, only wrote the poem a few days ago and nothing new and exciting has happened since! LOL
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Good luck! It might help if you knew what you were missing specifically to know what to go looking for... Might make it happen sooner! Take care....Nadine
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it's definitely wanderlust :-)
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where are you wanting to be and why? And then the next logical question is why aren't you there?........Nadine
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It's not complicated - I would like to be anywhere that is pretty - the ocean, the mountains, the desert, anyplace different from my boring suburbs. And why am I not there? I can't afford it! LOL
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I hear ya! Wish I had the resources to travel or even move! You're not alone there! Have a good day...making the most of it and appreciating the blessings we do have!...Nadine
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Here, let me send you somewhere beautiful....
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rLQzdlpUinc
Copy and paste this and sit back and enjoy the trip!! Let me know what you think!..........Nadine
Comment from Joan E.
In response to the question in your notes, yes, indeed, I have; I even wrote a poem about the feeling. (I'll have to find it in my computer and see what I think of it a few months after I originally penned it.)
I enjoyed your layers of alliteration mimicking the waves' metaphor. I could easily visualize the "white waters" beckoning. I kept gazing back at the picture you chose allowing myself to be transported. Thank you for sharing your mesmerizing work.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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In response to the question in your notes, yes, indeed, I have; I even wrote a poem about the feeling. (I'll have to find it in my computer and see what I think of it a few months after I originally penned it.)
I enjoyed your layers of alliteration mimicking the waves' metaphor. I could easily visualize the "white waters" beckoning. I kept gazing back at the picture you chose allowing myself to be transported. Thank you for sharing your mesmerizing work.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thanks so much, Joan - if I had half as many adventures as you do, I could stop wishing!!! :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
A lovely looking piece
A beautiful poem that gets the heart pumping faster as you read due to the context
Promotes excitement and an unknown thrill underlying
I am not sure if I read it smoothly enough;- but by all means, just simply disregard this comment if I have mistaken as I am a real novice at this, I thought the second last line was very long to read in comparison to the rest.
I really do like this poem
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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A lovely looking piece
A beautiful poem that gets the heart pumping faster as you read due to the context
Promotes excitement and an unknown thrill underlying
I am not sure if I read it smoothly enough;- but by all means, just simply disregard this comment if I have mistaken as I am a real novice at this, I thought the second last line was very long to read in comparison to the rest.
I really do like this poem
have a smiley day
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Smiley, for your positive comments. The poem maintains an 8/7/8/7 syllable structure throughout :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an excellent poem, although lately, I've had enough excitement for a while. I often felt like that when I was young.
I couldn't find anything to criticize about this poem.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
This is an excellent poem, although lately, I've had enough excitement for a while. I often felt like that when I was young.
I couldn't find anything to criticize about this poem.
Dave
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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When I was young I had plenty of excitement, not so much now LOL I don't really need to sail in a squall though - I'd take Disney's Pirates of the Caribbean ride if it came with a trip to Florida LOL Thanks, Dave :-) Brooke
