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Comment from LiveLoveDie
I found this poem utterly heart-wrenching...
Although I have never given birth to a stillborn child, it touched me deeply. It had me in tears.
And I honestly didn't know that we had a Stillbirth Rememberance Day, but I'm glad I know now.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
As with your other writings, I enjoyed this a lot.
Take care.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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I found this poem utterly heart-wrenching...
Although I have never given birth to a stillborn child, it touched me deeply. It had me in tears.
And I honestly didn't know that we had a Stillbirth Rememberance Day, but I'm glad I know now.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
As with your other writings, I enjoyed this a lot.
Take care.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thank you, my friend - I am honored you bothered to review an old poem from my portfolio that is no longer promoted :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an exceptional poem, but Fanstory won't let me give a six-star review. Very short, to the point, and with beautiful imagery of a field of daisies.
Fortunately, both my wife's pregnancies were successfully delivered, so we didn't experience that heartbreak.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
This is an exceptional poem, but Fanstory won't let me give a six-star review. Very short, to the point, and with beautiful imagery of a field of daisies.
Fortunately, both my wife's pregnancies were successfully delivered, so we didn't experience that heartbreak.
Dave
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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My pregnancies were successful too, but my firstborn was induced when he was over 3 weeks late and I failed a non-stress test - in doing research for this poem I discovered late-term babies are a big cause of stillbirths - had I lived years ago or in some little podunk town without a major up-to-date hospital, I could well have lost him to this horror. Thanks so much, Dave :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, did I learn a lot from your notes. I did not know about Stillbirth Remembrance day, nor the high number of such births nor the Celtic legend about the daisies. Your dedication was very kind as well, for those who have suffered this unimaginable loss. (I don't know how you are going to keep up with your responses to the reviews--there were already 98 views when I stopped to read your poem.) Your first stanza is quite innocuous, which lends even more power to the second with its deep pathos. The fact that you wrote the poem with rhymes is amazing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Wow, did I learn a lot from your notes. I did not know about Stillbirth Remembrance day, nor the high number of such births nor the Celtic legend about the daisies. Your dedication was very kind as well, for those who have suffered this unimaginable loss. (I don't know how you are going to keep up with your responses to the reviews--there were already 98 views when I stopped to read your poem.) Your first stanza is quite innocuous, which lends even more power to the second with its deep pathos. The fact that you wrote the poem with rhymes is amazing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Joan - I am working through review responses right now - I appreciate all your thoughtful comments. I did not know about the remembrance day either until I started researching the day. The part about the daisies is a bit eerie. Before church I read about remembrance day and could not come up with a hook for the poem. When I got home I decided to abandon that idea and do a flower poem so chose daisies randomly and looked up daisy legends. And there was that legend - it nearly floored me. Brooke
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Whoa, do-do-do-do!! I think your muses must be working overtime. I have a special liking for the coincidence, but this one is truly eerie. Maybe it can be the subject of another poem! -Joan
Comment from Nicnac
Brooke,
You know how I love daisies - well, I had never heard of that legend! What a beautiful way to offer cheer to those who have experienced such a devastating loss.
I will never forget this poem.
What a rare treasure.
This beautiful legend and your heartfelt tribute has given a bittersweet task to these lovely flowers.
Lovely!
(stupid 'only 2 sixers per 30 day rule' comes into play here...)
Nic
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
You know how I love daisies - well, I had never heard of that legend! What a beautiful way to offer cheer to those who have experienced such a devastating loss.
I will never forget this poem.
What a rare treasure.
This beautiful legend and your heartfelt tribute has given a bittersweet task to these lovely flowers.
Lovely!
(stupid 'only 2 sixers per 30 day rule' comes into play here...)
Nic
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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That rule sinks me all the time! LOL I appreciate your generous impulse nonetheless, Nic! :-) So glad you found the meaning in this :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
I had not heard of this observance before. Thank you for sharing it with us. Your poem is simply lovely and the thought that daisies grow, each one for the spirit of a child that died before for it drew breath, is also comforting. My heart goes out to anyone who have suffered this kind of loss.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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I had not heard of this observance before. Thank you for sharing it with us. Your poem is simply lovely and the thought that daisies grow, each one for the spirit of a child that died before for it drew breath, is also comforting. My heart goes out to anyone who have suffered this kind of loss.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Rose, I had not heard of it either until researching that date. Thank you for your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Not a myth I'm familiar with, and I'm always eager to learn more.
A sad piece, but with an ending that felt a bit like a hug.
Good stuff, Brooke.
:0)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Not a myth I'm familiar with, and I'm always eager to learn more.
A sad piece, but with an ending that felt a bit like a hug.
Good stuff, Brooke.
:0)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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OMG - Nescher is thinking of hugs - you are in Daddy mode overdrive, my friend :-) So, when do I get to read the warm and fuzzy poems or stories about your bundle of joy?? :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i didn't even know there was such a day. thank you for telling me. one of the gravest memories of my time as an ob nurse was when i helped a woman who was having a stillbirth. the baby had been dead for several weeks and they were trying to get it to leave. sigh.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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brooke,
i didn't even know there was such a day. thank you for telling me. one of the gravest memories of my time as an ob nurse was when i helped a woman who was having a stillbirth. the baby had been dead for several weeks and they were trying to get it to leave. sigh.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 08-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Barbara. How horrible that experience must have been for you and all involved. Brooke
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brooke,
she was very calm about it. the male nurse carrying for her (they had her in icu which was next door to my department.) and i weren't. that probably changed once the baby was delivered and reality set in. i didn't see her after that day.
i just felt the pain.
love,
barbara
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
What a perfect message in observance of the day you indicate here. You do such great studies and when you share them with us...we truly appreciate it!
Dave
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2009
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What a perfect message in observance of the day you indicate here. You do such great studies and when you share them with us...we truly appreciate it!
Dave
Comment Written 08-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Dave, for a most generous and gracious review :-) I'm honored by your kind comments and rating. Brooke
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I hope you noticed. I didn't use one comma!
Dave
Comment from Steve Pantazis
My, oh my, my, that was profound! You have a talent with taking a particular subject and finding a connection to something seemingly unrelated (in this case daisies and still births). But it's that connection that makes this piece soar. Great work.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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My, oh my, my, that was profound! You have a talent with taking a particular subject and finding a connection to something seemingly unrelated (in this case daisies and still births). But it's that connection that makes this piece soar. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Pantazis - I am most honored by your response. Brooke :-)
Comment from LauraKatherine
I had no idea there was a Stillbirth Remembrance day. I've known parents that have endured this, some who knew while the mom was still pregnant that their baby was going to die. Heartwrenching. The legend is beautiful--daisies as a symbol of innocence and hope in the midst of heartache. I just read another poem about a flower offering hope and courage to someone in hard times, and here the flower offers cheer and comfort for those who mourn.
As always, this is excellent work. I appreciated how the 2nd stanza opens with death and then ends with birth (along with the idea of life). And I like the idea of God claiming the child at birth, and giving it "life" through the daisy.
listen for a baby's laugh (is there anything quite like a baby's laugh?)
God, who claimed that child at birth (lovely)
Excellent, touching poem, Brooke. I feel for those who have been through this, and I hope this offers some hope and comfort to them. LK
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2009
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I had no idea there was a Stillbirth Remembrance day. I've known parents that have endured this, some who knew while the mom was still pregnant that their baby was going to die. Heartwrenching. The legend is beautiful--daisies as a symbol of innocence and hope in the midst of heartache. I just read another poem about a flower offering hope and courage to someone in hard times, and here the flower offers cheer and comfort for those who mourn.
As always, this is excellent work. I appreciated how the 2nd stanza opens with death and then ends with birth (along with the idea of life). And I like the idea of God claiming the child at birth, and giving it "life" through the daisy.
listen for a baby's laugh (is there anything quite like a baby's laugh?)
God, who claimed that child at birth (lovely)
Excellent, touching poem, Brooke. I feel for those who have been through this, and I hope this offers some hope and comfort to them. LK
Comment Written 08-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2009
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Thank you, LauraKatherine - your comments are, as always, attentive to detail and sensitive to what I have to say. Brooke :-)
