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Comment from Helen Tan
I found this poem thought provoking and enjoyed it. I think I do TOO much of this even without looking into a mirror! =D
In Mirror's Glare
I like the title, a reflection of your life. The fact that 'glare" is used indicates strict scrutiny, not a cursory glance but an in depth study of your acts and thoughts.
While each of us our secrets keep
in hidden recess dark and deep,
may mine be seen first, if I dare,
in mirror's glare.
It's always easy to talk about other people's faults, sins when we don't place ourselves in their position or when we deny the fact that we are not perfect ourselves. In a way it makes us feel better that others have faults, it makes our imperfections acceptable. That is until we really reflect, scrutinise ourselves in a mirror's glare.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2009
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I found this poem thought provoking and enjoyed it. I think I do TOO much of this even without looking into a mirror! =D
In Mirror's Glare
I like the title, a reflection of your life. The fact that 'glare" is used indicates strict scrutiny, not a cursory glance but an in depth study of your acts and thoughts.
While each of us our secrets keep
in hidden recess dark and deep,
may mine be seen first, if I dare,
in mirror's glare.
It's always easy to talk about other people's faults, sins when we don't place ourselves in their position or when we deny the fact that we are not perfect ourselves. In a way it makes us feel better that others have faults, it makes our imperfections acceptable. That is until we really reflect, scrutinise ourselves in a mirror's glare.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2009
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Helen, as always, you understand my points precisely - it always feels so good to hear from you and know I've been heard :-) Brooke
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Absolutely fabulous Brooke, there is a saying "Before you point a finger, beware there are two pointing back at you".
I feel we all have our fualts, and the mirror's glare sums this up with true perfection.
Kind regards
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Absolutely fabulous Brooke, there is a saying "Before you point a finger, beware there are two pointing back at you".
I feel we all have our fualts, and the mirror's glare sums this up with true perfection.
Kind regards
Steve
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Steve, thank you - your readings are always spot on :-) Brooke
Comment from aviddbrut
great job brooke. sort of the ol' 'pull the log out of your own eye, before trying to remove the splinter from another's...' great rhyme and rhythm to this. the phrase, the mirror's glare is great. could be taken two ways and I am sure that is what you were aiming for. bullseye.
david
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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great job brooke. sort of the ol' 'pull the log out of your own eye, before trying to remove the splinter from another's...' great rhyme and rhythm to this. the phrase, the mirror's glare is great. could be taken two ways and I am sure that is what you were aiming for. bullseye.
david
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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David, thank you - yes, I was inspired by Sunday's sermon and wrote most of this on the back of the church bulletin while the service was still going on. I'm sure I earned a Presbyterian demerit or two! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Jones
Lovely. The words are stunning. So much truth..we all live in glass houses. I like the length of the verse.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Lovely. The words are stunning. So much truth..we all live in glass houses. I like the length of the verse.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Rose - glad you got the meaning from this one :-) Brooke
Comment from J.Tate
Once again you have skillfully woven together a poem with such an array of emotions. The message is clear and the words chosen carefully. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Once again you have skillfully woven together a poem with such an array of emotions. The message is clear and the words chosen carefully. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Thank you, J.Tate, for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Mischief's Momma
Amen to that wish!
I certainly hope it is I that spot my most grievous flaws before others are victim to them.
Very thought provoking Brooke, and a great Biblical base too :)
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Amen to that wish!
I certainly hope it is I that spot my most grievous flaws before others are victim to them.
Very thought provoking Brooke, and a great Biblical base too :)
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Sharon, for your insightful comments - I wrote most of this on the back of the church bulletin before the sermon that inspired it was over. Brooke
Comment from elainec4
adewpearl,
What a valuable lesson "In Mirror's Glare" presents. It does make one think and reflect on a common failing we display. I particularly enjoyed the final stanza which is specific and emphasizes your message. elaine
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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adewpearl,
What a valuable lesson "In Mirror's Glare" presents. It does make one think and reflect on a common failing we display. I particularly enjoyed the final stanza which is specific and emphasizes your message. elaine
Comment Written 01-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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Elaine, thank you for finding the meaning in this :-) Brooke
Comment from dportwood
Brooke,
How true! Perhaps we never see ourselves as others see us, but wretched is the man who can not face himself for remembering his dastardly deeds in interactions with his fellows. Nicely thought out and expressed in this rondeau.
Duane
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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Brooke,
How true! Perhaps we never see ourselves as others see us, but wretched is the man who can not face himself for remembering his dastardly deeds in interactions with his fellows. Nicely thought out and expressed in this rondeau.
Duane
Comment Written 01-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Duane - and yes, you are so right :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
More often than not, the person in the mirror is our greatest critique. The man in the mirror can be tolerant of our mistakes, forgiving of our sins, but quick to criticize the wrongs we cannot right. Thankfully friends and family rise to the occassion when we need a little pick up or a good dose of "I told you so" very well said and a nice reflective piece. mstad55
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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More often than not, the person in the mirror is our greatest critique. The man in the mirror can be tolerant of our mistakes, forgiving of our sins, but quick to criticize the wrongs we cannot right. Thankfully friends and family rise to the occassion when we need a little pick up or a good dose of "I told you so" very well said and a nice reflective piece. mstad55
Comment Written 01-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Mike - glad you found meaning in this one :-) Brooke
Comment from fayesh
I think this was a nicely written rondeau expressing the theme of "let he without sin, cast the first stone." I like that, although your A lines in the first stanza were not an exact rhyme with the A lines in the second and third stanza, they were not noticeable because you stayed with an assonance rhyme pattern.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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I think this was a nicely written rondeau expressing the theme of "let he without sin, cast the first stone." I like that, although your A lines in the first stanza were not an exact rhyme with the A lines in the second and third stanza, they were not noticeable because you stayed with an assonance rhyme pattern.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2009
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Faye, thank you - yes, I'm a big fan of near rhyme :-) Brooke
