Requiescat in Pace
a satiric limerick80 total reviews
Comment from Lady & Louis
But Brooke, the States has the greatest healthcare system in the world! The GOP says so! All the others are evil socialist plots, aren't they? All that stuff about keeping the unworthy (ie poor) alive by daring to spend rich people's money? Tsk, tsk.
Louise :D
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2009
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But Brooke, the States has the greatest healthcare system in the world! The GOP says so! All the others are evil socialist plots, aren't they? All that stuff about keeping the unworthy (ie poor) alive by daring to spend rich people's money? Tsk, tsk.
Louise :D
Comment Written 28-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2009
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Yeah, I've read all that drivel about evil socialism - all I know is that the only doctors around here who want to treat me are the volunteer docs at the free clinic, God bless them.
And guess who most of my fellow patients are in this suburban clinic? Beggars who live on the streets? Nope. People who have jobs that don't include insurance - the truly poor get medicare. It's people who earn enough to pay the bills but not enough to have $120 left over to visit a doctor for an ear infection who have nowhere to go if there isn't a free clinic around. Thanks, my friend. Brooke
Comment from skye
It is a sad sad commentary on the state of our nation when our citizens lose out on health care to bombs and dictators, leaders who have great insurance, and idiots.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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It is a sad sad commentary on the state of our nation when our citizens lose out on health care to bombs and dictators, leaders who have great insurance, and idiots.
Very well done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Skye, for a most insightful review :-) Brooke
Comment from gustafsonne
This limerick sounds nice but it is not really funny. The second line is phrased weird. I think "and to the docs he went appealing." makes more sense. Also someone without a job usually does not have health insurance(if he did have insurance in the u.s. it would be from the government and then he would be seen)and people with insurance are almost always treated. Merci.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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This limerick sounds nice but it is not really funny. The second line is phrased weird. I think "and to the docs he went appealing." makes more sense. Also someone without a job usually does not have health insurance(if he did have insurance in the u.s. it would be from the government and then he would be seen)and people with insurance are almost always treated. Merci.
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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It is true - that is why he doesn't have insurance in the poem - it states that without reassurance the man had insurance, he was turned away - he was turned away because he could NOT assure them he had insurance. I thank you for reviewing. Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
This was excellent. I loved the irony about the insurance problem we have in our country. Great limerick form with the property rythmn necessary. Terrific job.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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This was excellent. I loved the irony about the insurance problem we have in our country. Great limerick form with the property rythmn necessary. Terrific job.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thanks, Diane - glad the rhythm worked for you, and the satire :-) Brooke
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I reread the other one and updated the review.
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thanks, Diane :-)
Comment from Amfunny
Aha...stealing my ideas, huh? LOL. Nice. I knew when Tony and I started you on the limerick road that you would not be able to resist. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Aha...stealing my ideas, huh? LOL. Nice. I knew when Tony and I started you on the limerick road that you would not be able to resist. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thanks, Norma Jean - you are my muse :-) Brooke
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roflmao... somehow I doubt that. LOL... but thanks.
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well, I won't be writing any gory horror stories, that is true - but you're a comic inspiration :-)
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Never say NEVER.
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Another great satire. One point of confusion: "the man had insurance". Don't you mean "the man had no insurance"? That would make sense in the context of your piece.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Another great satire. One point of confusion: "the man had insurance". Don't you mean "the man had no insurance"? That would make sense in the context of your piece.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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No, the two lines are read together - without reassurance the man had insurance - meaning, he had no insurance :-) thanks, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Chalice
This is a clever piece. I like limeriks and this one has that smooth ring to it. Nothing to discuss on the down side, I think this is good stuff.
Thanks for sharing your process with me.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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This is a clever piece. I like limeriks and this one has that smooth ring to it. Nothing to discuss on the down side, I think this is good stuff.
Thanks for sharing your process with me.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thanks, Chalice - I appreciate your positive comments!! Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
That is so true. The great thing is faith can heal all. I have a feeling you were necessarly discussing physical wounds, were you? But then again, many time our poor are turned away if they have no insurance. Maybe you're discussing ALL healling. I messed up again, but I caught it.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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That is so true. The great thing is faith can heal all. I have a feeling you were necessarly discussing physical wounds, were you? But then again, many time our poor are turned away if they have no insurance. Maybe you're discussing ALL healling. I messed up again, but I caught it.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Barbara. This one is about need for medical care, yes, and the problems our medical system has in delivering access to all people regardless of their means to pay :-) Brooke
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I wish the government would quit fighting over it and actually do something.
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Yes, that would be a most excellent thing - I think they need to put us in charge for a week!!!!
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We don't need a week, we could probably solve the health problem in day and end the war before dinner. Right?
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I like your spunk!!
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I only speak the truth. I'm pretty sure we would have to fix the dinner too.
Comment from Mastery
Good humorous, (as it should be) limerick,Brooke. The artwork is perfect for this little ditty too. I take it you are aware that there is a current contest ongoing for limericks? Take care, Bob
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Good humorous, (as it should be) limerick,Brooke. The artwork is perfect for this little ditty too. I take it you are aware that there is a current contest ongoing for limericks? Take care, Bob
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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There was a limerick contest yesterday that I won - is that the one you're referring to or has a new one started that I don't know about? Thanks so much, Bob :-) Brooke
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Yikes! Color me stupid and late too! LOL...Bob (There is no more I know of, no. Bob
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oh, I hope you had not signed up for it! I won with a pretty darned funny poem LOL :-)
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What in the world do you mean, Brooke? LOL...I am not nearly the poet you are, Brooke...No problem...I know my place. Bob
Comment from NightWriter
"Requiescat in Pacem" is another touching satiric limerick. Perfectly written with smooth rhythm and perfect rhyming throughout.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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"Requiescat in Pacem" is another touching satiric limerick. Perfectly written with smooth rhythm and perfect rhyming throughout.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Thank you, my friend - it is good to hear from you - I hope this means there is a Stan chapter when I look! Brooke :-)
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Thank you Brooke! I was out of town for a few days, then my PC crashed and the internet problems. Slowly, we're getting there, LOL.
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Excuses excuses - you above all people should know how women need Stan - just look at the female characters you created!!! I need Stan, my friend, and I need him soon LOL
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LOL! Thank you for such positive encouragement. I appreciate this so much. The next chapter is already baking in the oven. :)
