rondels and rondeaus
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Comment from dtimes3
Excellent and well written. I love the flow and the tone. The message is well chosen and needed. I really love these poems that are told with human emotion and I clearly see that you are growing into the messages along with the form.
Thanks you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2009
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Excellent and well written. I love the flow and the tone. The message is well chosen and needed. I really love these poems that are told with human emotion and I clearly see that you are growing into the messages along with the form.
Thanks you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2009
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I appreciate your kind visits and comments today - a great deal! Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Been there, done that. And you have written truly, Brooke. I agree, I've always got a word or two to say to these people because they didn't ask for the position they have sunk to.
A wonderful write and I'm gald you did a rondeau...bugger the rules, they're there to be broken if you ask me.
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Been there, done that. And you have written truly, Brooke. I agree, I've always got a word or two to say to these people because they didn't ask for the position they have sunk to.
A wonderful write and I'm gald you did a rondeau...bugger the rules, they're there to be broken if you ask me.
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
Comment Written 27-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Kat, thanks so much - you're so right - what effort is it to say hello and smile at a person? Brooke
Comment from DeboraDyess
I'm glad you wrote it this way. I think it's a very effective poem, truly conveying the feeling of lonliness, even in a crowd. Well done. I think you'd have won if it was a contest piece. Blessings, Deb
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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I'm glad you wrote it this way. I think it's a very effective poem, truly conveying the feeling of lonliness, even in a crowd. Well done. I think you'd have won if it was a contest piece. Blessings, Deb
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Deb - having it well received by thoughtful readers is just as good as any contest win :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke how true and how sad to know that this is so true about homeless people I know one thing we here in Vermont try not to let this sad situation happen
I'm glad you picked the rondeau form it makes your picture of these people stand out
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2009
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Hello Brooke how true and how sad to know that this is so true about homeless people I know one thing we here in Vermont try not to let this sad situation happen
I'm glad you picked the rondeau form it makes your picture of these people stand out
Gert
Comment Written 25-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Gert - I love the rondeau form. You are, as always, most thoughtful. Brooke :-)
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You are welcome all the way from hot and sunny FL
Gert
Comment from allinmyhead
India has its 'untouchables', we have our 'invisibles'. One set is labeled by birth and karma, the other by circumstance.
You show both sides to the our homeless story in this poem. The loneliness of being unloved and too often invisible, and the need to hide whatever shame and sins might have caused the individual's alienation from those who once loved them (not in everyone's case). I always wonder what each person's story might be as I hand them the dollar or foodstuffs or address/phone for the shelter.
Everyone deserves a little dignity.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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India has its 'untouchables', we have our 'invisibles'. One set is labeled by birth and karma, the other by circumstance.
You show both sides to the our homeless story in this poem. The loneliness of being unloved and too often invisible, and the need to hide whatever shame and sins might have caused the individual's alienation from those who once loved them (not in everyone's case). I always wonder what each person's story might be as I hand them the dollar or foodstuffs or address/phone for the shelter.
Everyone deserves a little dignity.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Your comments are insightful and welcome - thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I really love the writer's love, and her kind and wonderful caring way. This writer always shows compassion when she writes, and I love her wonderful words that she writes.
The picture was very telling, and I have nursed people within my career like this, and they need love and understanding,food and drink.
The writers words tell of this woman's crying, that falls on deaf ears.
I loved the love and caring words the writer has written, also telling of this lady in the picture.
Honeytree
Wonderful writing.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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I really love the writer's love, and her kind and wonderful caring way. This writer always shows compassion when she writes, and I love her wonderful words that she writes.
The picture was very telling, and I have nursed people within my career like this, and they need love and understanding,food and drink.
The writers words tell of this woman's crying, that falls on deaf ears.
I loved the love and caring words the writer has written, also telling of this lady in the picture.
Honeytree
Wonderful writing.
Honeytree
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Annie, for your thoughtful review and for the life of caring you've led. :-) Brooke
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Thank you Brooke for your reply. I really mean what I have replied to you.I feel it is wonderful to know how loving and kind you are towards others. I always pick this up with all of the writing, I have read of yours. I feel that kindness is the way of love towards others, and it is great when you have such wonderful ways about you and I am lucky to read them.
Annie
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
"For I say unto you, as you do unto the least of these, so you have done unto me."
Jesus Christ (as paraphrased by Nescher Pycher)
It's awful that it even needs to be said, I think.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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"For I say unto you, as you do unto the least of these, so you have done unto me."
Jesus Christ (as paraphrased by Nescher Pycher)
It's awful that it even needs to be said, I think.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Yeah, it is awful, but you'd be surprised that even on this site I've had responses to other poems on homelessness that make it apparent just how much it needs to be said! Thanks, Nescher Brooke :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, this poem is written beautifully and is a total statement about the homeless and downtrodden people in this world. I always try to look at them and smile and give them money when I can. I think most homeless people either have had really terrible times or they are mentally ill. I have sympathy for them because no one chooses this position to be in.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Brooke, this poem is written beautifully and is a total statement about the homeless and downtrodden people in this world. I always try to look at them and smile and give them money when I can. I think most homeless people either have had really terrible times or they are mentally ill. I have sympathy for them because no one chooses this position to be in.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Yes, there is a great deal of mental illness among this community. Thank you, Mary Jayne. Brooke
Comment from jmyron
Don't have to be homeless to experience 'having been beaten down in defeat and self recrimination.' Well written, with a sad but true storyline. If it doesn't tell the whole story, well there are always other poems...
John
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Don't have to be homeless to experience 'having been beaten down in defeat and self recrimination.' Well written, with a sad but true storyline. If it doesn't tell the whole story, well there are always other poems...
John
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you, John, and yes, it is difficult to cover all there is to say about pretty much anything in one poem! Brooke :-)
Comment from Ann Karr
It's a poignant poem (isn't that the point?), and the best part is simply that it's true.
Oh, wait. That's also the worst part of it.
I don't see anything wrong with the poem--only what it's about, what it entails.
People can hardly love if they do not know what love is.
Thanks for another one worth reading!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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It's a poignant poem (isn't that the point?), and the best part is simply that it's true.
Oh, wait. That's also the worst part of it.
I don't see anything wrong with the poem--only what it's about, what it entails.
People can hardly love if they do not know what love is.
Thanks for another one worth reading!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2009
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Ann, thank you for your most insightful and thoughtful comments. Brooke :-)
