Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "We Pray for Peace"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
77 total reviews
Comment from Kym Jade
This is profound and so true.We seek peace for ourselves and long for world peace as well. Yet, even with all the wishing and trying it is still yet to happen.
Bless you
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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This is profound and so true.We seek peace for ourselves and long for world peace as well. Yet, even with all the wishing and trying it is still yet to happen.
Bless you
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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And it is yet to happen because too many people only ask for it but fail to do anything proactive about it! Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
My goodness! How beautifully you combine idea and words to produce such a flower as this is. There really must be a way of getting your poetry noticed beyond the bounds of FS. Have you submitted to local newspapers or magazines? Would your church publish a spiritual poem in its bulletin? Peter
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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My goodness! How beautifully you combine idea and words to produce such a flower as this is. There really must be a way of getting your poetry noticed beyond the bounds of FS. Have you submitted to local newspapers or magazines? Would your church publish a spiritual poem in its bulletin? Peter
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Peter - I know I need to spend more time with the publication efforts. I hope you read the rondeaus I've written in the past three days - I am most proud of them. Brooke :-)
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Another perfect poem, mastering the style. Another powerful message for all your readers to be enriched by. I enjoyed as always, Loyd
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Another perfect poem, mastering the style. Another powerful message for all your readers to be enriched by. I enjoyed as always, Loyd
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Loyd, thank you. Your comments are a great way to start my morning :-) Brooke
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Have a great day to go with your morning!
Comment from Razz
Beautifully written. Wonderful pace and flow. Rhyme was exactly on time.
Beautiful to look at too.
I liked this:
..."a place for hate within our lives."
It is either love or hate that fills a void.
Thank you
Razz
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Beautifully written. Wonderful pace and flow. Rhyme was exactly on time.
Beautiful to look at too.
I liked this:
..."a place for hate within our lives."
It is either love or hate that fills a void.
Thank you
Razz
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Razz - I appreciate your kind and gracious review : -) Brooke
Comment from dportwood
Brooke,
We, as individuals, can be instrumental in influencing our own lives and those of people close to us. But, through the ages, such emotions as anger, fear, envy, and greed replace peace with turmoil. Can this situation ever be turned around? Herein lies the need for prayer.
I think your triolet is just fine as modified, and would be just fine if not modified. Thanks for posting.
Duane
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Brooke,
We, as individuals, can be instrumental in influencing our own lives and those of people close to us. But, through the ages, such emotions as anger, fear, envy, and greed replace peace with turmoil. Can this situation ever be turned around? Herein lies the need for prayer.
I think your triolet is just fine as modified, and would be just fine if not modified. Thanks for posting.
Duane
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Duane, thank you. Your insights are most welcomed :-) Brooke
Comment from TillMcCauley
First of all I love the subject matter of your poem. Second it was a wonderful Triolet. I really enjoy these types of poems and think those who can pen them are amazing. You did an amazing job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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First of all I love the subject matter of your poem. Second it was a wonderful Triolet. I really enjoy these types of poems and think those who can pen them are amazing. You did an amazing job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Till. I appreciate your encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Begin Again
Brooke
Thank you for reminding us that peace must first begin within our own hearts...If we can not find love and understanding, how can we possibly expect to find it in the world.
Well done! I loved your poem.
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Brooke
Thank you for reminding us that peace must first begin within our own hearts...If we can not find love and understanding, how can we possibly expect to find it in the world.
Well done! I loved your poem.
Carol
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Carol, thank you. Your read of my poem is exactly as I intended. Brooke :-)
Comment from joan marie
This is so true. We pray for peace in other places, not within ourselves. How different it would be if we each prayed and received an inner peace. There would be no reason to pray for peace anywhere else. joan marie
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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This is so true. We pray for peace in other places, not within ourselves. How different it would be if we each prayed and received an inner peace. There would be no reason to pray for peace anywhere else. joan marie
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Joan Marie, thank you. You're right, in a world filled with people with inner peace, we wouldn't have people fighting each other at all! Brooke :-)
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
"We pray for peace but don't prepare
a place for peace within our lives,"
Oh, how so unfortunately true. This poem is quite philosophical in tone and has a very nice flow and construction to it.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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"We pray for peace but don't prepare
a place for peace within our lives,"
Oh, how so unfortunately true. This poem is quite philosophical in tone and has a very nice flow and construction to it.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Steven, thank you so much, and good morning :-) Brooke
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Brooke:
And a good morning to you.
~ Steven
Comment from Deejharrington
I never thought of it quite this way. But its very true. Many of us give "lip service" to peace in the world and it the next breath talk with hate about "those people" Its as if we could "get rid" of the terrorist or the whoever, then we could have peace. Not seeing that the peace begins and ends with you and me.
deb
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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I never thought of it quite this way. But its very true. Many of us give "lip service" to peace in the world and it the next breath talk with hate about "those people" Its as if we could "get rid" of the terrorist or the whoever, then we could have peace. Not seeing that the peace begins and ends with you and me.
deb
Comment Written 13-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009
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Thanks, Deb. Lip service is a great way to put it! Brooke :-)
