Comment from allinmyhead

Excellent

Maybe you should write hymns ! Seriously. This poem is as lovely as the accompanying photograph.
Great line: "when death is dealt such sweet defeat..."
Looking out at my desert-parched roses, both they are I are ready for a "refreshed domain".

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009

Thank you, my friend - I have actually thought from time to time about writing hymns :-) I'm glad you like this one and appreciate your reviewing a poem no longer promoted :-) Brooke

Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

What a lovely kyrielle, Brooke! Your meter and rhymes are perfect, and your message of the healing rain is excellent. Very nicely done.
Sally

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Thank you, Sally. I have been having fun with the repeating forms the past few days :-) Brooke

Comment from Begin Again

Exceptional

Brooke

This morning, I was feeling a bit off..not truly depressed, just not myself. Then, I decided to read some poems....

The minute I turned to yours ...well the raindrops on the rose were so beautiful, stunning in fact. I smiled.

Then I read your words...how uplifting can you get. I hope that doesn't sound corny..but that's exactly how I felt. I reread it again and ....well

I'll just thank you for the lovely poem and reminding me I should rejoice with the blessings I have. Thank you.

Carol

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Carol, thank you so so much for your generosity, and even more so for sharing with me the way this poem was able to lift your spirits. Nothing means more to me than knowing something I wrote connected with a person in that way. It doesn't sound corny at all - it is lovely and touching. Brooke :-)

Comment from Charles Keith

Excellent

Mornin' Brooke,

A kyrielle huh? well it is very nice , it reads a little like the words on a hymn to me tho'

Maybe a hymn to rain LOL

Best to you
Keith

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Thanks, Keith - yes, it pretty much is a hymn to rain :-) Since the kyrielle comes from the kyrie eleison in the church service, I think the musicality of it is a great benefit :-) Brooke

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Inspiring imagery wrapped in singing verse inside beautiful rhyme and glorified by the smoothest rhythm in Christendom. No particular favourite line - they are all so lovely.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

the smoothest rhythm in Christendom - now THAT I like - thank you, dear friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Rabianabian

Exceptional

Oh, wow, this was so wonderful. I love the rain too--the silver drops, the sweet, wet scent, the peaceful patter... I could write a million poems about the rain. I enjoyed this so much!!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

Mary, thank you!! I'm thrilled you like this so much :-) I hope you do write a poem about the rain and post it so I can enjoy it :-) Brooke

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Lovcely! Superb rhyming and well cadenced melodic flow. Love the photo!
Third stanza is my favorite...delightful work, as usual/

Just arrived in USA last night.
Back soon.

Love, rd

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

Thank you, Rama Devi - I hope you're having a wonderful visit to your home country! Enjoy!! :-) Brooke

Comment from Peter@Poole

Excellent

When, Brooke, you write 'en kyrielle',
you make words flow like honey sweet;
pure phrasing sounds quite like a bell
with breathless images replete.

You go on from strength to strength. Peter

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

Peter, thank you. I am moved by your lovely comments :-) Brooke

reply by Peter@Poole on 12-Aug-2009

My comments don't just arise from nowhere; I have to be stirred and you certainly do that.

Comment from Mariea

Excellent

Another well written piece. Your choice of photo compliments the poem beautifully.

Flow - good fluid movement
Structure - well constructed and developed
Rhyme - consistent throughout
Rhythm - nice easy flow

Regards Mia

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

Mia, thank you for your attention to the various aspects of my poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

I lift my voice in glad refrain - Me too, my friend.

This is absolutely lovely,
the choice of words, the
rhythm and rhyme -- and such
a beautiful picture to accompany
the words - all in all, just perfect,
and deserving a six, but alas - I
have none.

Thank you for making me smile, Brooke.
Margaret

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009

Thank you, Margaret - I appreciate the wish of a six and feel honored :-) Brooke