The Lull before the Storm
a reflective nonet87 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This is an excellent poem showing the feeling of ordinary people. I have been to 'Peace Park' in Hiroshima, a very moving experience. I had intended to post my little poem for Hirishima Day but the date passed me, next year perhaps. Cheers GAye
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2009
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Hi Brooke This is an excellent poem showing the feeling of ordinary people. I have been to 'Peace Park' in Hiroshima, a very moving experience. I had intended to post my little poem for Hirishima Day but the date passed me, next year perhaps. Cheers GAye
Comment Written 20-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Gaye - oh, that must have been such an experience! Brooke
Comment from aviddbrut
you grab the heart of the issue in my mind brooke. real flesh and blood people died, mothers lost children, children lost parents. the entire population of the city I live in would have been gone. unfathomable. inhumane. your poetry always cuts to the essence of the pressing issue. thank you for writing.
david
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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you grab the heart of the issue in my mind brooke. real flesh and blood people died, mothers lost children, children lost parents. the entire population of the city I live in would have been gone. unfathomable. inhumane. your poetry always cuts to the essence of the pressing issue. thank you for writing.
david
Comment Written 19-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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David, thank you. It is lovely of you to review a poem no longer promoted and to leave such thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from allinmyhead
A chilling bit of poetry.
It is the mother's I think about, no matter when or where war breaks out. You captured this perfectly.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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A chilling bit of poetry.
It is the mother's I think about, no matter when or where war breaks out. You captured this perfectly.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Yes, if everyone thought about the mothers when figuring out how to settle disputes, perhaps things might play out differently. Thank you. Brooke
Comment from marion
Hi adewpearl, this is a very, very good nonnet - worthy of six stars for me, which I do not have. It has a real strong feeling of foreboding ... you have captured that emotional so well by using mothers and their children, in relation to the bomb about to be dropped. I really liked this one, Brooke. Marion.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009
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Hi adewpearl, this is a very, very good nonnet - worthy of six stars for me, which I do not have. It has a real strong feeling of foreboding ... you have captured that emotional so well by using mothers and their children, in relation to the bomb about to be dropped. I really liked this one, Brooke. Marion.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Marion - I appreciate your most encouraging comments and wish for a six :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
Chilling nonet, Brooke. You are right: no mom wants to think that their child could be the next victim of an attack like this, or any other kind of attack (such as murder, kidnapping, rape, etc.) ("That sort of thing happens to OTHER people, not me," we all think.) But the fact is, we don't know the future; we don't know if we'll wake up tomorrow morning or live another hour.
One thing I thought of while I read this. On 9/11, did the people in the 2nd tower, watching their neighboring tower burn and crumble, have any idea that they would be targeted next?
I like how you took a historical incident and made it personal through the use of the mother-child imagery. The "tucking babes in bed" line was extremely effective in this regard.
I liked the eloquence of this line: rattled/with the rasps of those not yet dead.
Thought-provoking. Sad. Disturbing. Still, I'm glad I read it. Excellent work! Laura
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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Chilling nonet, Brooke. You are right: no mom wants to think that their child could be the next victim of an attack like this, or any other kind of attack (such as murder, kidnapping, rape, etc.) ("That sort of thing happens to OTHER people, not me," we all think.) But the fact is, we don't know the future; we don't know if we'll wake up tomorrow morning or live another hour.
One thing I thought of while I read this. On 9/11, did the people in the 2nd tower, watching their neighboring tower burn and crumble, have any idea that they would be targeted next?
I like how you took a historical incident and made it personal through the use of the mother-child imagery. The "tucking babes in bed" line was extremely effective in this regard.
I liked the eloquence of this line: rattled/with the rasps of those not yet dead.
Thought-provoking. Sad. Disturbing. Still, I'm glad I read it. Excellent work! Laura
Comment Written 11-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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Laura, I've often thought about the people in the second tower in just this way. Thank you for your most perceptive and insightful comments - I always know you've really given my poems a thoughtful read, Brooke
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Wow, Brooke! Exceptional!
Just got back from a long weekend (Great time, Friday through Tuesday inclusive, went to a Shakespeare festival :) So I come back to 100+ PM's--although I'm b guessing if you were without internet for 5days you'd have way more than 100 :)
You say you did not want to pass an opinion on the tragedy--but you did--very effectively. All the invective in the world against the Japanese and what they MIGHT have done, can never justify this--in my opinion. Lives can't be weighed in the balance the way we did. And I've heard all the arguments about inviting the Japanese to a demonstration and how that wouldn't have worked, and they suck! So, we only had two bombs--they didn't need to know that. Oppenheimer, and I'm sure many of the others involved in the Manhattan project, were never the same, and many were called traitors for their opinions.
Reaching the Moon didn't change the world the way it should have done. This horrible event changed the world forever. You know I love SciFi--one of the things that scares me is if there is a race of people out there who can reach Earth, then what are they going to make of us?
Exceptional work, on a stain on US history!
John
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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Wow, Brooke! Exceptional!
Just got back from a long weekend (Great time, Friday through Tuesday inclusive, went to a Shakespeare festival :) So I come back to 100+ PM's--although I'm b guessing if you were without internet for 5days you'd have way more than 100 :)
You say you did not want to pass an opinion on the tragedy--but you did--very effectively. All the invective in the world against the Japanese and what they MIGHT have done, can never justify this--in my opinion. Lives can't be weighed in the balance the way we did. And I've heard all the arguments about inviting the Japanese to a demonstration and how that wouldn't have worked, and they suck! So, we only had two bombs--they didn't need to know that. Oppenheimer, and I'm sure many of the others involved in the Manhattan project, were never the same, and many were called traitors for their opinions.
Reaching the Moon didn't change the world the way it should have done. This horrible event changed the world forever. You know I love SciFi--one of the things that scares me is if there is a race of people out there who can reach Earth, then what are they going to make of us?
Exceptional work, on a stain on US history!
John
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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John, thanks so much for your most generous and thoughtful response to my poem about this horrific tragedy. I agree - nothing can justify such inhumanity that really is beyond my comprehension. The Shakespeare festival sounds grand - what plays did you get to see? Brooke
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Henry V, As You Like It, and Foxfire-- a fantastic play set in the Blue Ridge Mountains. The Cedar City, Utah, Shakespearean Festival is a Tony Award winner! People from all over the US, and even some from the UK, come. Plus, you could spend time exploring the incredible Colorado Plateau! :)
Comment from Kym Jade
It is beyond belief that any human being could have something to do with wiping away so many others in one stroke. Thank you for posting this and giving us cause to reflect.
Hugs
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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It is beyond belief that any human being could have something to do with wiping away so many others in one stroke. Thank you for posting this and giving us cause to reflect.
Hugs
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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Beyond belief - Amen to that. Thank you, my friends. Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
forefathers grace descendants
with a will to see things through,
but measures somehow taken
with an eye to something new
do ever leave the taste of ash
on tongue.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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forefathers grace descendants
with a will to see things through,
but measures somehow taken
with an eye to something new
do ever leave the taste of ash
on tongue.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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Mike, thank you. Your poetic responses always give me reason to pause :-) Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
It's a decision I don't know I could make.
A very thoughtful piece, Brooke. Not something you want to start your day with, but definitely getting inside your head.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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It's a decision I don't know I could make.
A very thoughtful piece, Brooke. Not something you want to start your day with, but definitely getting inside your head.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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I'm incredulous that it is a decision any human could make, Nescher. Thank you. Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
What a terrible sense of dread that would be after knowing what has happened. Just waiting for another round of total devestation.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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What a terrible sense of dread that would be after knowing what has happened. Just waiting for another round of total devestation.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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I can't truly imagine the depth of feeling this would involve - I've never been in anything near that degree of peril. Thank you. Brooke
