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Comment from adewpearl
a summer teen romance, I see. That is a great age when the tomboy all of a sudden becomes romantic with that first kiss - and by moonlight during summer vacation, no less - I love the use of morphs as a verb here. Good luck in the contest - this is a creative entry :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2009
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a summer teen romance, I see. That is a great age when the tomboy all of a sudden becomes romantic with that first kiss - and by moonlight during summer vacation, no less - I love the use of morphs as a verb here. Good luck in the contest - this is a creative entry :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2009
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Brooke Yes, it is a moment that will remain very special in my heart forever. We still speak one every so often through the years. I was an awkward tomboy able to beat any boy in the neighborhood at baseball or football. One special moment changed my vision completely. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from shelley kaye
snuck out of the summer camp cabin? LOL!
this was a great summer memory
like the different colours too
nothing to change or fix
thanx for sharing
and good luck in the contest! :-)
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snuck out of the summer camp cabin? LOL!
this was a great summer memory
like the different colours too
nothing to change or fix
thanx for sharing
and good luck in the contest! :-)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Shelley Kaye Moonlight on Florida beach, sweet sixteen and able to beat every boy in the neighborhood with baseball or football...and then well. a memory to change everything. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from nora arjuna
Moonlight kiss, tomboy morphs, love blossoms
hi carol, you got a story here, but when you were a child? lol. but those are the sweet things about childhood. i thought the classification should be non-fiction. checked the rules and it says must be a true story. add a period after 'blossoms'. good luck!
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Moonlight kiss, tomboy morphs, love blossoms
hi carol, you got a story here, but when you were a child? lol. but those are the sweet things about childhood. i thought the classification should be non-fiction. checked the rules and it says must be a true story. add a period after 'blossoms'. good luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Arjuna
I never thought to change that...sorry! It is most definitely a true story, though long ago. A moment in time when a simple kiss changed me from awkward teenager to demure young lady. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from Comanche
..interesting transformation of the persona...all done inside of six words. Good job at evoking a change many people can identify with...
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..interesting transformation of the persona...all done inside of six words. Good job at evoking a change many people can identify with...
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Comanche Thank you for the kind review. This moment in my life was the beginning of many changes but one of the most important ones that I remember. Carol
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Carol, love this delightful piece of whimsy! The two words which make this poem stand out are "tomboy morphs". Fabulous!
John
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Carol, love this delightful piece of whimsy! The two words which make this poem stand out are "tomboy morphs". Fabulous!
John
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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John I was an awkward tomboy, beating the boys at football and baseball. Suddenly, I didn't want to beat them at their game. Thanks for the awesome review. Carol
Comment from Quire's Gal
Dear Begin,
I absolutely loved this! Not only did you say so much with such few words, you managed to tell my story. I was once a hardcore tomboy, transformed by love. I liked the way you changed colors in the text...it gave it more "punch". I loved the word "morphed". It really made the poem magical. I am quickly becoming a fan of yours!
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Dear Begin,
I absolutely loved this! Not only did you say so much with such few words, you managed to tell my story. I was once a hardcore tomboy, transformed by love. I liked the way you changed colors in the text...it gave it more "punch". I loved the word "morphed". It really made the poem magical. I am quickly becoming a fan of yours!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Drusilla
I'm glad you said that...because that was my motivation. This story was a huge turning point in my life from awkward tomboy to young lady. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from tati
You described the "Magical Transformation" perfectly in 6 words, Carol. Very enjoyable to read. Nice contender for the contest. Regards, tati (August 04, 2009)
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You described the "Magical Transformation" perfectly in 6 words, Carol. Very enjoyable to read. Nice contender for the contest. Regards, tati (August 04, 2009)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Tati Hello, my friend. Thanks for understanding the changes that took place that night. From awkward tomboy beating the boys at their games to young lady. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
This is a very good effort for the
contest with an excellent picture
to support it. However, the text
appears to be out of line. Did you
use the advance editor?
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This is a very good effort for the
contest with an excellent picture
to support it. However, the text
appears to be out of line. Did you
use the advance editor?
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Phil I'm not sure what you mean...I'm not real good on this editor thing...tell me what you think I should be doing, please. Carol
Comment from samuelbrody
Carol...And so it goes. A master crafts woman plies her talent on the subject of love. But in six words? Yeah and Verily. You are an amazing woman. So talented, expressive, full of joy, wisdom, and understanding. The depth of emotion and meaning within these six words is genius. When one has the creative spirit flowing through your body, your soul...beauty, passion and art are the result. Nicely done. Michael.
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Carol...And so it goes. A master crafts woman plies her talent on the subject of love. But in six words? Yeah and Verily. You are an amazing woman. So talented, expressive, full of joy, wisdom, and understanding. The depth of emotion and meaning within these six words is genius. When one has the creative spirit flowing through your body, your soul...beauty, passion and art are the result. Nicely done. Michael.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Michael You make me blush like that teenage girl. Thank you so much for the awesome review. Your words definitely put a smile on my face. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Carol
Comment from Kayk4686
Very well written. It's amazing how so little words can accurately explain one idea. Please continue writing, it suits you. Best wishes, Kay
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Very well written. It's amazing how so little words can accurately explain one idea. Please continue writing, it suits you. Best wishes, Kay
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
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Kay I'm pleased that you can understand the monumental changes that took place that moment long ago. Amazing how a kiss can change someone's entire attitude. Thanks so much for the review.
