Overdue Gratitude
To My Late Father17 total reviews
Comment from NightWriter
"Overdue Gratitude" is such a deep and loving tribute and poem about one's love for their father. Bravo. This poem pulled the heart strings. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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"Overdue Gratitude" is such a deep and loving tribute and poem about one's love for their father. Bravo. This poem pulled the heart strings. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Marta-Magdalena
I am sure that he would have loved this, it was well written and heart-felt and overall deserves more stars than just five. *****************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************Good Job!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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I am sure that he would have loved this, it was well written and heart-felt and overall deserves more stars than just five. *****************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************Good Job!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem and to comment.
Comment from Belinda
Even a father whom one love and cherish has his good and not-so-good sides. You point our both, and I think this is what makes your poem stand out.
You never understood why
your mad moments made me cry
I'm sorry about your dad. Your memories of him are well written in this poem, though...
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Even a father whom one love and cherish has his good and not-so-good sides. You point our both, and I think this is what makes your poem stand out.
You never understood why
your mad moments made me cry
I'm sorry about your dad. Your memories of him are well written in this poem, though...
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from Lyrical_CD
Good entry...there are a couple rough spots in this write, but I think your message was good and your notes lead me to believe you hadn't written something to him before. Good work.
Cory
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Good entry...there are a couple rough spots in this write, but I think your message was good and your notes lead me to believe you hadn't written something to him before. Good work.
Cory
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from WRITER1
A very nice tribute to your father. I think this is an excellent piece and worth of this contest. You did a really find job on it.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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A very nice tribute to your father. I think this is an excellent piece and worth of this contest. You did a really find job on it.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from drivenbackward
That's a very nice poem, fayesh. I'm certain your dad would be very proud of it, and happy to hear those kind words. Nothing I can say to change.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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That's a very nice poem, fayesh. I'm certain your dad would be very proud of it, and happy to hear those kind words. Nothing I can say to change.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Joyce L.
This is a good poem coming from a daughter to her father. It might just be me, but I felt like something was missing maybe in the emotions, it just didn't grab me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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This is a good poem coming from a daughter to her father. It might just be me, but I felt like something was missing maybe in the emotions, it just didn't grab me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like this poem. It is full of emotion and has some good images. I feel your loss. I have written about my parents' death also for this contest.
The rhyme scheme is good as is the wording. Yes even a Prince among men gets mad sometimes. It's only human.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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I like this poem. It is full of emotion and has some good images. I feel your loss. I have written about my parents' death also for this contest.
The rhyme scheme is good as is the wording. Yes even a Prince among men gets mad sometimes. It's only human.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from cwebb
A lovely message of a daughter to her lost Dad. The poem has a nice sentiment throughout. I did find some phrases a little awkward; 'Daddy Dearest' a bit overused phrase. The voice in the poem is often the passive voice , 'much of you in me they see', I would rather 'people see a lot of you in me.' I have been told passive voice is ok in poetry, but I prefer a more direct statement. Thanks, CW
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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A lovely message of a daughter to her lost Dad. The poem has a nice sentiment throughout. I did find some phrases a little awkward; 'Daddy Dearest' a bit overused phrase. The voice in the poem is often the passive voice , 'much of you in me they see', I would rather 'people see a lot of you in me.' I have been told passive voice is ok in poetry, but I prefer a more direct statement. Thanks, CW
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Nicnac
Oh, this is so moving, Fayesh.
I have a lump in my throat.
This made me think of my own dad. I am going to call him tonight.
I especially loved these lines:
You never ever once knew
how much I learned watching you
Lovely.
No suggestions.
Nic
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Oh, this is so moving, Fayesh.
I have a lump in my throat.
This made me think of my own dad. I am going to call him tonight.
I especially loved these lines:
You never ever once knew
how much I learned watching you
Lovely.
No suggestions.
Nic
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Nic, for continually taking the time to review my work. Most appreciated. :)
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You're welcome. :)
