A Refugee's Sojourn
contemplative cinquain (see author's note)71 total reviews
Comment from filmoreodragon
Excellent. I guess you are channelling millions right now as well. Moral is down where I work. We don't know if they can meet pay roll yet, and they are cracking the whip about tons more work.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Excellent. I guess you are channelling millions right now as well. Moral is down where I work. We don't know if they can meet pay roll yet, and they are cracking the whip about tons more work.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Morale is down all over the damned place - I am out of work and know many others who have jobs but just wait for the other shoe to drop in offices where every few weeks someone else is laid off. People are being squeezed to work longer and produce more for less reward and no guarantee they will have the job in a month. Thanks so much. Brooke
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Oh. Not channelling, living it. I am so sorry.
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This poem of yours certainly makes one think. I see it as someone who is trying to get out of the situation they are in but circumstances prevent it. There are so many ways to interpret it. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009
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Hi Brooke This poem of yours certainly makes one think. I see it as someone who is trying to get out of the situation they are in but circumstances prevent it. There are so many ways to interpret it. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 01-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009
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I think it applies to everyone in the world - nobody can escape reality for long - we can try to hide out from problems, obligations, responsibilities, but we can't stay hidden for long. Thanks, Gaye :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I liked this piece it is a very strong work very well written and greatly presented again showing your very talented and can tackle all forms with ease Fuller
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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I liked this piece it is a very strong work very well written and greatly presented again showing your very talented and can tackle all forms with ease Fuller
Comment Written 31-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much, Fuller - glad you like this cinquain :-) Brooke
Comment from NightWriter
"A Refugee's Sojourn" is a beautifully written cinquain poem. It's another challenging hurdle that you easily passed. Gravity could be seen to hold one back, always pulling, never giving up no matter how far one has gone. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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"A Refugee's Sojourn" is a beautifully written cinquain poem. It's another challenging hurdle that you easily passed. Gravity could be seen to hold one back, always pulling, never giving up no matter how far one has gone. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate this perceptive review :-) Brooke
Comment from pixiemillie
Dear Brooke, Oh to lose perspective- -living with head in the clouds and forgetting to keep those feet firmly planted so we can enjoy and/or assist those less fortunate- -or do we simply wish to keep our heads in the nubes and ignore what exists so much in society today? RoS
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Dear Brooke, Oh to lose perspective- -living with head in the clouds and forgetting to keep those feet firmly planted so we can enjoy and/or assist those less fortunate- -or do we simply wish to keep our heads in the nubes and ignore what exists so much in society today? RoS
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Rose of Sharon, some people do want to hide in the clouds - but they can't stay protected there forever even if they wish so! Thanks. Brooke :-)
Comment from RaymondJohn
Dear old Mrs. Crapsey again. Her poem form certainly isn't. It really forces the writer to put in movement and energy. Thanks for another fine write. Ray.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Dear old Mrs. Crapsey again. Her poem form certainly isn't. It really forces the writer to put in movement and energy. Thanks for another fine write. Ray.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Ray, thank you :-) I am rather fond of old Mrs. Crapsey :-) Brooke
Comment from Lyrical_CD
The natural laws that are sometimes both a blessing and a curse. I see this as though we might be able to escape some things or get away...we still have our thoughts that follow us. Good work.
Cory
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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The natural laws that are sometimes both a blessing and a curse. I see this as though we might be able to escape some things or get away...we still have our thoughts that follow us. Good work.
Cory
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Cory, thanks so much. I appreciate you insightful response :-) Brooke
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I'm currious to read your responce on my latest write...
Cory
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Nice work, Brooke. This poem presents quite a dilemma. No matter what we aspire to, there's always the concerns of day-to-day life to take care of, and sometime dominate our time.
John
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Nice work, Brooke. This poem presents quite a dilemma. No matter what we aspire to, there's always the concerns of day-to-day life to take care of, and sometime dominate our time.
John
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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John, thank you and good evening :-) I appreciate your perceptive comments. Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I always admire your courage to deviate from an accepted poetic norm, but to do so with the research to back up your position. I very much enjoyed your poem with the bonuses of entendres with "gravity" and your use of alliteration. I thought your title and picture choice were wonderfully synergistic as well.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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I always admire your courage to deviate from an accepted poetic norm, but to do so with the research to back up your position. I very much enjoyed your poem with the bonuses of entendres with "gravity" and your use of alliteration. I thought your title and picture choice were wonderfully synergistic as well.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Joan, for your thoughtful read and encouraging comments :-) Brooke
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I took your name, not in vain, but to warn joan marie that FanArt might be acting up again. She's been experimenting more with her own pictures and using no pictures at all when it's for a poem she believes carries the theme without one. However, she is also having computer problems, and I didn't want her to think the site's glitch was an additional symptom. She's another gutsy lady. -Joan
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Brooke, I think if the person who devised the cinquain could deviate from the accepted form, you are more than entitled to do so too.
Another powerful piece of writing. The word 'Gravity' has such an impact and taken either way, can give the poem a different meaning altogether. Very well done.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Brooke, I think if the person who devised the cinquain could deviate from the accepted form, you are more than entitled to do so too.
Another powerful piece of writing. The word 'Gravity' has such an impact and taken either way, can give the poem a different meaning altogether. Very well done.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Thanks, Kat, for your attentive reading of the poem and your kind review :-) Brooke
