Comment from sara-beth

Excellent

Hi there, this poem/prayer is kind of universal, I think. It strikes me that it is beautiful and full of meaning and good intentions, but also that anyone could adopt this attitude, regardless of their beliefs. Cool!

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2009

Thank you, Sara-beth - I'm so glad you see the universality of it, which is why I selected the mandala to illustrate it and not a Christian symbol. Brooke :-)

Comment from allinmyhead

Excellent

Very timely poem for me to be reading right now.
I love the use of the word "conduit". Good theme, well expressed.
Very creative rhyme scheme with the repeated lines used very cleverly (lines 1, 4 & 7 and also 1 & 2 being repeated as 7 & 8). As usual, well done.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009

I'm so glad you like the triolet form - it's hundreds of years old, so I guess it's lasted all that time since lots of people like it! :-) Thanks so much. Brooke :-)

Comment from Deejharrington

Excellent

Beautiful words with more wonderful meaning! Not being a Christian (as you know) I translate to see if I can relate it within my own belief system. This fits is perfectly. I know when I meet someone who is filled with negative energy I can change that, if only I can change it to positive. I try to be a "transmitter" of pure, white energy, or I just have to walk away.
deb

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009

Deb, One of the reasons I did not use praying hands but a mandala as the illustration for this is because I did not want it to be exclusively Christian. I think not only all major religions but many non-religious people who are humanists share core moral beliefs in compassion and kindness. I'm so glad that came through to you in the poem :-) Brooke

reply by Deejharrington on 01-Aug-2009

You're welcome
deb

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Hi Brooke Pure joy this triolet, the Lord has heard your prayer because, from what I've learn't about you in your poems and authors notes. LOL Gaye

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009

Thanks so much, Gaye, for a lovely, gracious response :-) Brooke

Comment from dihardest

Excellent

My senior year in high school I was elected class president by one vote. At my suggestion the Biblical Scripture "If there be any kindness we can show, let us show it now, for we shall not pass this way again" was adopted as the class motto - by one vote. So, I vote that the thoughts you share, the inspiration they evoke be oft repeated. Inundate humankind with this message.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for sharing that story from your life with me and for your kind review :-) Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I am trying to catch up from my D.C. trip, and I'm being sabotaged by a bad computer cable, which I should be able to replace tomorrow. Right now, I'm typing like a fool for as long as I can!

I admired your prayerful triolet. You repeated the right key and secondary lines and managed strong rhymes. The title, picture and color perfectly completed the ensemble.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

Thank you, Joan. I appreciate your thoughtful attention and hope your computer cooperates with you soon! :-) Brooke

Comment from LYLE

Excellent

Brooke,

The thought of being God's conduit is a kind and warm wish, and very much in character. I have been thinking about this piece for a while and within me, and only a personal question within me, because I am not questioning your wishes, I keep asking myself why does God need a conduit.
We are all His children, created in His image. If he is, as it is written, our Father, then why can he not speak to each of us personally? He can certainly heal a failing spirit, or help someone in need. I have met a lot of "Born Again Christians" over the years, and most of them have had the same type of circumstances push them into that faith.
They were at the ends of theit ropes and finally gave up
by saying, "God, I've done all I can do: it is now up to You." Many have been pulled out of their despair and made whole again. Others have failed and are gone by overdose
or some alternate exit from life. Yours is a thoughtful poem
and I am simply responding with thoughts:)

Fondly, Lyle

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

I will offer one example, Lyle, of a person acting as God's conduit. My daughter was 12 when our neighbor, a young woman considerably older than her, had a baby. The young woman had AIDs and had transmitted it to the baby girl. My daughter spent hours each day after school and on weekends caring for that precious infant, who was hooked up to medical equipment, frail, and in need of so much love and care that her own mother was just not really capable of giving. Miranda, a little girl herself, lavished love and attention on the baby, who eventually was removed from her mother and taken to Children's Hospital, in the city. Miranda later asked me where God was when this innocent baby was dying such a cruel death, and I told her that the baby had known God's voice everytime she had spoken gently to her and had seen God's face every time Miranda smiled at her. My daughter was God's conduit. I believe people who treat others with kindness are God's helpers every day. :-) Thank you, Lyle. Brooke :-)

reply by LYLE on 29-Jul-2009

Dear Brooke,

You answered everything that I had asked. You are right: there are conduits in this world; your daughter being one of them. I now understand what you were writing about and thank you for the enlightenment. I knew that you would have an answer, it was just that I didn't. Thank you.

Fondly, Lyle

Comment from debskatz

Exceptional

Hey brooke,

this is a beautiful poem. it's nicely iambic tetrameter & the rhymes are good. it reminds me of the prayer of St. Francis, my favorite prayer.

Thank you so much for sharing this lovely spiritual poem with us!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

Deb, thank you so much for this beautifully generous response to my prayerful triolet - I so appreciate your graciousness and generosity of spirit. :-) Brooke

Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards

Excellent

Brooke if anyone candoit as a conduit it is certainly you. Great message which all of us should see, hear, and do. We know we wants us to.

Dave

Oh Look at O Brother Who Art Thou and give suggestions, please.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

Dave, I will head off to your essay now - my daughter is visiting this week, so I've been neglectful of my FS friends :-) Thanks for your great review :-) Brooke

Comment from Nescher Pyscher

Excellent

I don't know how you write these. I can't read them without m face twisting into a huge knot and my tongue cramping. Even when I read them silently!

;0)

Good piece, Brooke.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2009

You and Sam and Ray and a couple others should all have to enter a repeating line form poetry contest just for MY amusement. :-) I LOVE repeating line forms, but I sure can tell how they annoy the hell out of some of you guys! LOL Thanks so much, Nescher :-) Brooke