Doll Houses
We all can feel this way. Both I mean!59 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Gray
I enjoyed reading your poem this afternoon. I liked the way the words flowed with the author's thoughts. I also liked the doll house images. A very nice descritive narrative.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I enjoyed reading your poem this afternoon. I liked the way the words flowed with the author's thoughts. I also liked the doll house images. A very nice descritive narrative.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Bryana
Making a little girl turn into a young lady,
which is such a beautiful sight got all to see.
"What a pleasant way she does spend her time;"
sending from the page to life, a wonderful rhyme.
This was my favorite stanza.
It's true a woman always goes
back to her dollhouse. Beautifully
written poem Mike, I certainly enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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Making a little girl turn into a young lady,
which is such a beautiful sight got all to see.
"What a pleasant way she does spend her time;"
sending from the page to life, a wonderful rhyme.
This was my favorite stanza.
It's true a woman always goes
back to her dollhouse. Beautifully
written poem Mike, I certainly enjoyed it.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I thank you so very much for sharing with me your favorite, the compliments and this review, Mike.
Comment from Little Arlana
For writing in a freestyle manner and having it rhyme that is quite a feat in itself! Your poem is well written and quite creative. It expresses the essence of childhood and growing up all in one.
4th stanza, second line -- "God! I am blest!" did you mean blessed? Or is there alternate spellings of the word?
I hope to read more of you work as I think you did a wonderful job in this poem. I found your authors notes helpful at the end of the poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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For writing in a freestyle manner and having it rhyme that is quite a feat in itself! Your poem is well written and quite creative. It expresses the essence of childhood and growing up all in one.
4th stanza, second line -- "God! I am blest!" did you mean blessed? Or is there alternate spellings of the word?
I hope to read more of you work as I think you did a wonderful job in this poem. I found your authors notes helpful at the end of the poem.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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No! I mean blest, unfortunately it resides in the unabridged dictionary as seldom used but acceptable, esentially meaning the same thing. Just that form lends itself to poetry a bit better.
Another unfortunately is that I would love to share my works more, but can't post very high. However, you should always feel free to look through my portfolio anytime that you wish. I thank you very much for this review and the compliments and consideration. Have a great week! Mike
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a beautiful poem, Mike. First, may I congratulate you on the fine job at shape poetry? It is amazing how the poem takes shape of a doll house (it is my interpretation, I don't know if it intended). As a writer of shape poetry myself (I even did a swan once!), I know how hard it is to paint the graphic image with your words. Yes, there is a little girl inside of every woman, and she wants to travel back in time see her dollhouse. Dollhouse here could be a metaphor of a stage in our lives, a mark. Thank you for the author's notes, I found them very interesting and helpful.
Nice rhyming job. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work with your friends here.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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This was a beautiful poem, Mike. First, may I congratulate you on the fine job at shape poetry? It is amazing how the poem takes shape of a doll house (it is my interpretation, I don't know if it intended). As a writer of shape poetry myself (I even did a swan once!), I know how hard it is to paint the graphic image with your words. Yes, there is a little girl inside of every woman, and she wants to travel back in time see her dollhouse. Dollhouse here could be a metaphor of a stage in our lives, a mark. Thank you for the author's notes, I found them very interesting and helpful.
Nice rhyming job. Thank you for sharing this wonderful work with your friends here.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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With this poem, it's a strange deal I only set about giving each stanza and idea the exact amount of type that seemed to be the best treatment. I did notice and appreciate how the whole poem shaped up. My ten headed monster is unfortunately is time and I am praying that somehow, I could devote much more of it to developing poetry and trying the various forms out. I would even try to do a picture illustration (such as fine art) using poems! I do seem to find the time to come up with the ideas.
I thank you very much for this rare review and thank you for it and the compliments. I think there is a say, "By the will of God, go I." With this poem, I have been absolutely amazed with the dynamics that developed in its body. I was thinking of my favorite members and that is how dollhouse came into it. Also, they were toys that were designed to develope womanly qualities in girl, yet very often it has been my experience that this is forgotten and simply it is a metaphore for a minor amusement, yet one that still brings out the best in the person who revisits that doll house. With the doll himself, though not said, he would loved to be put back on the shelf. LOL
Have a great day! Mike
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a deep and very sentimental poem. Some of the lines seem a little redundant, but still, I like the poem and I think it deserve nothing less than 5 stars, which means no revisions needed...
EXCELLENT!!
:)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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This is a deep and very sentimental poem. Some of the lines seem a little redundant, but still, I like the poem and I think it deserve nothing less than 5 stars, which means no revisions needed...
EXCELLENT!!
:)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Not necessarily redundant, but changing in complexion.
Comment from RaymondJohn
Your notes are more interesting than the poem, but both are very good. I have a toy gun my parents gave me when I was four years old, before WWII ended. It went with a soldier suit they bought for me. I still treasure it and brings back very pleasant memories. Nothing really reminds me of any girls I liked. Fine poem with an interesting rhyme scheme. Best wishes. Ray.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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Your notes are more interesting than the poem, but both are very good. I have a toy gun my parents gave me when I was four years old, before WWII ended. It went with a soldier suit they bought for me. I still treasure it and brings back very pleasant memories. Nothing really reminds me of any girls I liked. Fine poem with an interesting rhyme scheme. Best wishes. Ray.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Unfortunately, my parents hand me downed my costumes, but I still have some toys that I endeared. Mike
Comment from Aussie
'The qualities in her that 'are' so well developed.'I got a little lost in the closing stanzas. From what you have written, little girls with little curls return to that place as old age approaches - we all become child-like and loved dearly, not as a child but an aged person that would love to cuddle a doll from her childhood. I hope I have your poem/story correct. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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'The qualities in her that 'are' so well developed.'I got a little lost in the closing stanzas. From what you have written, little girls with little curls return to that place as old age approaches - we all become child-like and loved dearly, not as a child but an aged person that would love to cuddle a doll from her childhood. I hope I have your poem/story correct. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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In a sense, those dolls were put up as she got board, but there was something special that she found in them that didn't exist otherwise. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Miki
Comment from frelanz
Awesome poem. Well written and I enjoyed reading this very much. Great photo with it! Awesome words chosen for this! It is A+ and needs nothing changed! I could envision everything I read and that I like...well done :-) Dawn
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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Awesome poem. Well written and I enjoyed reading this very much. Great photo with it! Awesome words chosen for this! It is A+ and needs nothing changed! I could envision everything I read and that I like...well done :-) Dawn
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I thank God for both FanArt and its search engine. It is only rarely that I don't find something that suites my poem and saves me a lot of time in creating something. I thank you very much for your review and the greatest of compliments. Mike
Comment from Suzie B
Hi Mike, cycles and circles my friend.
The treasured things that we disgard without a thought, simply knowing they'll be there when needed.
the fact that we humans do that to each other causes me sadness. I don't accept good people being laid to waste, by selfish souls who look no futher than the surface skin we wear.
This was beautifully written and deeply felt.
Suzie
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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Hi Mike, cycles and circles my friend.
The treasured things that we disgard without a thought, simply knowing they'll be there when needed.
the fact that we humans do that to each other causes me sadness. I don't accept good people being laid to waste, by selfish souls who look no futher than the surface skin we wear.
This was beautifully written and deeply felt.
Suzie
Comment Written 28-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I like this review, but it also goes deeper with me. Very often what gets us to look at another is that we know that they are special, but all too often, thoughts generated from prior life experiences and fear creeps in. In that sense our living bodies are the cloths and spirits our our bodies. What I nice metaphore. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from WRITER1
I have read your notes. Remember no one can make you feel insignificant unless you let them. I liked your poem and I feel that you put a lot of thought into it.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I have read your notes. Remember no one can make you feel insignificant unless you let them. I liked your poem and I feel that you put a lot of thought into it.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009
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I agree with no one, but when you stand on the top of a huge mountian, the truth becomes evident! Yet, just like climbing that mountain, the significance is in living that life to the best of one's ability. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Yes, the contents of this poem is very important to me.
