Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

I'm glad the lovebirds are going to make up; they are quite the dynamic duo. Good technique, leaving the chapter with a new unresolved dilemma.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009

Thank you so much for reading and your wonderful review! Been a bit busy with relatives visiting, but now trying to play catch up here. :)

Comment from angel of the quill

Exceptional

wonderful twist just when you think one chapter finished
the surprise comes into play and you find yourself on a roller coaster of excitement
great chapter great story

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2009

OMG! Where have you been my friend. I've missed you. Welcome back and thank you for your wonderful and exceptional review. My latest chapter is paying over a buck, LOL. Sorry this one didn't pay, which make me appreciate your review even more.

reply by angel of the quill on 06-Sep-2009

I wasnt well so i was unable to be here to review
i never worry about the price I simply read who I enjoy and review who i love

reply by the author on 06-Sep-2009

Well, thank you so much. I hope you keep feeling better.

reply by angel of the quill on 06-Sep-2009

life has its ups and downs and well such it is
I am happy no matter what I suffer momentarily
for life is too short to be in misery.
I love the chapters the story is really taking on its own life
and really a good novel to sit and enjoy sharing
I wish you the best success and hope someone takes you serious as a
novelist. perhaps even to publish you I see a world of potential in your work.

Comment from Vladilynn

Excellent

Ok I need to skip for the other one..because I missed reading that one..lets comment for this one first!!!!

Wow!!! and who's the ridiculous stole her body!!!!?


Yikkessssss!!!!another Linda comes out!!! No!!!!!

Loll

nicely written!!
love much,

Lynn

Good luck!!!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2009

Thank you so much Lynn for coming back and reviewing another chapter. I try to get one out a week, but sometimes I just don't have the time. Imagine how long it takes you to read a chapter, then multiply it by about ten to get how much I need on it from creation to editing, which when it comes to editing, that job is NEVER done, LOL. I've been re-reading my first chapters to make sure I haven't strayed too far. Thanks again!!!!!!!!

Steve

Comment from Deejharrington

Excellent

And everything seemed to be going so well, then what happens? A missing dead body. Was it the aliens? Or did she get up and walk herself, so to speak...hum??? You left the readers with a real cliff hanger, can't wait for the next chapter. Since I'm catching up, I'm sure its waiting for me!
deb

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your wonderful review Deb! The next chapter will be out (hopefully) Thursday. Most of it is written, lots of editing to do. :)

Thanks again! (I have some catching up to do myself, LOL)

Comment from Starcruiser

Excellent

I had some catching up to do here. The characters & storyline seem to improve with each chapter. I'm glad to see Stan & Lori have rekindled their love & bond again. Still reckon this would make a brilliant tv series, even an adult comic. Please keep writing! KG

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009

Thank you so much KG for reading and your very encouraging review. I love the TV series angle, and adult comic is another great idea. Thank you!

Steve

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Nightwriter, now if that ain't pure seduction.. a red lace teddy and her long neck with a pulsating vein, hell you make that image so inviting. This is truly not normal to feel this way!!!!!!! lol...again superb, the ending a clinching page turner . jimi

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for this wonderful review Jimi! LOL! :)

Comment from Mountainstar2

Excellent

I enjoyed this chapter and it's wording content. I think the picture is a perfect choice for the story. I also like the way it was written into the wording content, describing the picture perfectly. I only look forward to more of the same. Good luck on the next one...MOuntainstar2..

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for reading and your wonderful review MOuntainstar2! :)

reply by Mountainstar2 on 27-Jul-2009

It is my pleasure to do so...MS2..

Comment from Brindle.T

Excellent

Nightwriter

I really enjoyed this!

It is well crafted, I struggled to find any constructional objective critique...Although at the beginning I notice a little capitalisation instead of narration that offers good imagery...tut tut, really rather lazy...Thus is my only critique of an otherwise flawless piece....I am still however going to award it five stars....One of the best I've read today.

BrindleT

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for reading and your wonderful review. Narration is my weak area and I'm working to include more. Thanks again!

Steve

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

I like the way you've woven aliens and vampires together. I didn't see anything to correct. DSL modem died, so I am catching up. Great chapter. joan marie

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2009

Technology, it's a love/hate relationship, LOL. Thank you so much for reading and your wonderful review! :)

reply by joan marie on 26-Jul-2009

It is a unique story. Sometimes I get tired of the same old themes. It's nice to read your different spin on things. jm

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

steve,
hmmmm ... where can linda be? is she still alive or is she dead? so many questions. so stan was just angry, eh? lori jumped to conclusions. but then she is a little short of trust. we'll see.
:P
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2009

Thank you for reading and your wonderful review, Barbara! I think Stan just needed a little time to cool off.

reply by babylonia on 25-Jul-2009

i would think if my partner went behind my back and killed off my doctor of whom i have needed quite a bit since the beginning, i would need to cool off. BUT did she really kill linda? hmmm ... time will tell. LOL