When Children Still Believe
reflective cinquain88 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke A lovely poem. Reminds me of 'When I wish upon a star' you show in your words that wishes don't always come true. Cheers GAye
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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Hi Brooke A lovely poem. Reminds me of 'When I wish upon a star' you show in your words that wishes don't always come true. Cheers GAye
Comment Written 23-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Gaye - your comments are most perceptive :-) Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Hmm.
I dunno that this is "sad".
A falling star is one of the most beautiful and magical sights there are, aren't they? And do you remember the first time you saw one?
A great poem, Brooke, but I don't know that it worked the way you wanted it to.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Hmm.
I dunno that this is "sad".
A falling star is one of the most beautiful and magical sights there are, aren't they? And do you remember the first time you saw one?
A great poem, Brooke, but I don't know that it worked the way you wanted it to.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Sorry it got lost in the translation, Nescher - it is meant to be ironic - a play on the term falling star, the traditional meaning being of shooting stars and then my meaning of a plummeting star that falls in the more negative sense. Thank you for your comments. Brooke
Comment from gerryheb55
A lovely poem with an abruptness that tells the story of a reality that we all face! Always just a breath away from an event that takes away, that which just moments ago, appeared within our grasp! Very well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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A lovely poem with an abruptness that tells the story of a reality that we all face! Always just a breath away from an event that takes away, that which just moments ago, appeared within our grasp! Very well done!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your insightful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Nanny 6
What an eye opener. Wish upon a star with the true belief that the wish will come true, and sometimes it does, for awhile...This poem made me ponder...Have a good one Brooke. Judy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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What an eye opener. Wish upon a star with the true belief that the wish will come true, and sometimes it does, for awhile...This poem made me ponder...Have a good one Brooke. Judy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much, Judy. I appreciate your t houghfulness. Brooke :-)
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a lovely and poignant little poem, Brooke. I like the way you managed to make the cinquain rhyme, which is not easy. Very nice.
Sally
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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This is a lovely and poignant little poem, Brooke. I like the way you managed to make the cinquain rhyme, which is not easy. Very nice.
Sally
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Sally, thank you. I can't help myself from rhyming :-) Brooke
Comment from jmyron
A bittersweet, but good poem. Good imagery, good storyline, but stars don't fall, meteors fall. A star ends it's life in a much more spectacular manor. It goes Nova or even Supernova, the cataclysmic explosion to which all too many love affairs have in common with the end of a star.
John
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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A bittersweet, but good poem. Good imagery, good storyline, but stars don't fall, meteors fall. A star ends it's life in a much more spectacular manor. It goes Nova or even Supernova, the cataclysmic explosion to which all too many love affairs have in common with the end of a star.
John
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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Thank you, John, for your thoughtful comments. I was not trying to be scientifically accurate :-) Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Brooke,
This reflective cinquain is well-written and presented. The artwork provided seems to be of stars in motion! An interesting picture!
The message you include here is profound and makes me want to "thank my lucky stars"! I'm blessed, thus-far.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Brooke,
This reflective cinquain is well-written and presented. The artwork provided seems to be of stars in motion! An interesting picture!
The message you include here is profound and makes me want to "thank my lucky stars"! I'm blessed, thus-far.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Nadine, it is good to hear from you. Thank you for stopping by and leaving such thoughtful comments :-) brooke
Comment from DeboraDyess
You are such an incredible poet. This is truly beautiful. You used this poetic form well, and the words chosen are perfect. Beautiful imagery. Blessings, Deb
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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You are such an incredible poet. This is truly beautiful. You used this poetic form well, and the words chosen are perfect. Beautiful imagery. Blessings, Deb
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Deb, I am honored by your most generous review - thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from jgaman
This cinquain is nicely done. I really like the coupling with the picture you chose. It is amazing how you took just the right words to make a point quickly and to the point.
Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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This cinquain is nicely done. I really like the coupling with the picture you chose. It is amazing how you took just the right words to make a point quickly and to the point.
Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from Robbi Kayser-Stange
Just like in real life wouldn't you say? LOL. I liked the content if not the style of this work. It showed a good line of reasoning for the obvious last line. Good work, a fun read. Robbi
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Just like in real life wouldn't you say? LOL. I liked the content if not the style of this work. It showed a good line of reasoning for the obvious last line. Good work, a fun read. Robbi
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Robbi, thank you. Not a cinquain fan, huh? I love the form - but different strokes... I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
