Leaping Dolphins
a reflective septolet89 total reviews
Comment from Blue Danube
I was looking through your portfolio and was first attracted to the title of poem "Leaping Dolphins" words which just by themselves conjure the most amazingly beautiful images.
Had not seen the form of a septolet previously so this is good to continuosly increase my knowledge of the vast possibilities within poetry.
Your lines in "Leaping Dolphins" are rich with the images and emotions pertaining to the ocean and marine life.
Hope dolphins and others survive.
Blue
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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I was looking through your portfolio and was first attracted to the title of poem "Leaping Dolphins" words which just by themselves conjure the most amazingly beautiful images.
Had not seen the form of a septolet previously so this is good to continuosly increase my knowledge of the vast possibilities within poetry.
Your lines in "Leaping Dolphins" are rich with the images and emotions pertaining to the ocean and marine life.
Hope dolphins and others survive.
Blue
Comment Written 11-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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Blue, thank you. I love the septolet form - you remind me I need to write another soon :-) I appreciate your reviewing a non-promoted piece. Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
wow; it's a barrage of alliteration! Despite that, it's also got a floaty feel, which is a pathetic description I know. WHat I mean is that it reads like free verse; open and considered, whilst clearly being quite tightly formed. I mean that as a compliment!
Mike
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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wow; it's a barrage of alliteration! Despite that, it's also got a floaty feel, which is a pathetic description I know. WHat I mean is that it reads like free verse; open and considered, whilst clearly being quite tightly formed. I mean that as a compliment!
Mike
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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I will take that as a compliment, Mike :-) Thank you. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Another prize piece of poetry. How beautiful is this creature. Your right they certainly are dancers of the ocean. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
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Hi Brooke Another prize piece of poetry. How beautiful is this creature. Your right they certainly are dancers of the ocean. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 15-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
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I love dolphins, Gaye - glad you do too!!! Thank you. Brooke
Comment from Penpal
Hello Brooke,
I have been lucky enough to watch porpoises from fishing boats in the Atlantic, and they are such a treat to see.
Your poem captures that playfullness and the presentation as well as the alliteration are great.
Well written and upbeat and a pleasure to read.
Pen
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Hello Brooke,
I have been lucky enough to watch porpoises from fishing boats in the Atlantic, and they are such a treat to see.
Your poem captures that playfullness and the presentation as well as the alliteration are great.
Well written and upbeat and a pleasure to read.
Pen
Comment Written 13-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Pen, thank you - I've seen them a few times from tour boats - they are one great sight, aren't they? Brooke :-)
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They sure are. I love 'em!!!! No matter how sad I could become they could make me smile no matter what.
Pen
Comment from dportwood
Brooke,
Great imagery here enhanced by alliteration and strong descriptive words. Who isn't impressed by the grace and speed of dolphins, to say nothing of their friendliness?
Good luck.
Duane
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Brooke,
Great imagery here enhanced by alliteration and strong descriptive words. Who isn't impressed by the grace and speed of dolphins, to say nothing of their friendliness?
Good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 13-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Duane - I loved writing this one because yes, not all that much beats a dolphin :-) Brooke
Comment from wierdgrace
Okay did you pick the dolphins before you started writing?, this is wonderful, and perfectly smooth as the water the dolphins are jumping out of, the words are touching, I love the sea. thank you so much for sharing, and good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Okay did you pick the dolphins before you started writing?, this is wonderful, and perfectly smooth as the water the dolphins are jumping out of, the words are touching, I love the sea. thank you so much for sharing, and good luck.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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A water theme was required by the contest to go with a spiritual theme - the first theme that immediately jumped to mind was dolphins as they seem so spiritual to me :-) Thanks so much, Grace. Brooke
Comment from schlosslaw_2000
Excellent poem, Brooke. You have captured the sheerr joy these animals seem to display. Do you think they are in some way related to your River Otters? :-)Larry
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Excellent poem, Brooke. You have captured the sheerr joy these animals seem to display. Do you think they are in some way related to your River Otters? :-)Larry
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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You just never know, Larry!!! :-) Thank you. Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Interesting turn of a phrase in "rapturous praise dancers"--I had to read that three times before I understood the syntax. Nice use of concrete imagery in the first stanza and abstract concepts in the second. Good use of alliteration and superb juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Interesting turn of a phrase in "rapturous praise dancers"--I had to read that three times before I understood the syntax. Nice use of concrete imagery in the first stanza and abstract concepts in the second. Good use of alliteration and superb juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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If you've never seen praise dancers in a church, you should look at a clip on you tube - there are quite a few. Thanks, Alvin, for your thoughtful observations :-) Brooke
Comment from KennyRogers
Hi there Brooke. Really love this septolet with its images of unrestrained glorification by the praise dancers - reminiscent of King David. I also like the picture you draw of the dolphins "piercing vast ocean's
stillness", which your chosen artwork illustrates so well.
Best wishes, Kenny
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Hi there Brooke. Really love this septolet with its images of unrestrained glorification by the praise dancers - reminiscent of King David. I also like the picture you draw of the dolphins "piercing vast ocean's
stillness", which your chosen artwork illustrates so well.
Best wishes, Kenny
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Kenny, for this thoughtfully positive review :-) Brooke
Comment from perunest
Your graceful words echo the grace of
these magnificent creatures as they dance
their love of life in buoyant exuberance.
A very lovely and worthy entry for this
contest! Carolyn
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Your graceful words echo the grace of
these magnificent creatures as they dance
their love of life in buoyant exuberance.
A very lovely and worthy entry for this
contest! Carolyn
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Carolyn, thank you!! I put a great deal of thought into this one, so I greatly appreciate your encouraging comments. Brooke :-)
