Treasures of a Tidal Pool
Reflective Quatrains83 total reviews
Comment from N.C.Dent
Brilliant. Long ago in another life, I regularly took bus loads of children on a field trip to Point Lobo, California to study the tide pools. What a joy that was and how I wish I'd had your poem to integrate our literature and science. Beautifully done. Nick
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Brilliant. Long ago in another life, I regularly took bus loads of children on a field trip to Point Lobo, California to study the tide pools. What a joy that was and how I wish I'd had your poem to integrate our literature and science. Beautifully done. Nick
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Nick, field trips to a tide pool - that sounds so cool - some of my all-time greatest school memories are of field trips - have you ever visited the Franklin Institute in Philly? The walk-through heart is one of my favorite ever field trip memories :-) Thank you so much for your extremely generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
What very good descriptions in this work bring the pools to life with the well chosen words again another very good work I enjoyed regards Fuller
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What very good descriptions in this work bring the pools to life with the well chosen words again another very good work I enjoyed regards Fuller
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Fuller, for your thoughtful response. Brooke :-)
Comment from Penya
Your language in this poem is sensational. This poem is so much fun to read aloud, and the vocabulary is dictionary-inducing. Your poems do not cease to amaze me. I only hope to become a poet like you someday. Someday =) . . . wish me luck . . .
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Your language in this poem is sensational. This poem is so much fun to read aloud, and the vocabulary is dictionary-inducing. Your poems do not cease to amaze me. I only hope to become a poet like you someday. Someday =) . . . wish me luck . . .
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much for your most generous review, Penya. You are a young woman with lots of talent - I don't think you need all that much luck! :-) Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is a good descriptive poem. Excellent use of vocabulary. You handle the abcb rhyme scheme well. Nice alliteration (e.g. "struggle to survive.") Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a good descriptive poem. Excellent use of vocabulary. You handle the abcb rhyme scheme well. Nice alliteration (e.g. "struggle to survive.") Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Alvin, for your kind comments on the craft of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
what is going on with everybody being called, "Site Member?" How'd you even know it was me that sent this review?
Reggie
Brooke,
beautifully written and so very descriptive of an actual tidal pool. The life span in tidal pools varies but while there, nothing can be of such beauty. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Brooke,
what is going on with everybody being called, "Site Member?" How'd you even know it was me that sent this review?
Reggie
Brooke,
beautifully written and so very descriptive of an actual tidal pool. The life span in tidal pools varies but while there, nothing can be of such beauty. Great work, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Reggie, thank you - sounds like you're a lover of tidal pools too! Brooke :-)
Comment from dportwood
The reader is immediately taken in by the iambic rhythm of this poem and the enjoyable abcb rhyming scheme. I had the added bonus of learning a new word - hegemony. Thank you for all of that. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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The reader is immediately taken in by the iambic rhythm of this poem and the enjoyable abcb rhyming scheme. I had the added bonus of learning a new word - hegemony. Thank you for all of that. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Duane, I love that word but didn't think I'd ever get the chance to put it in a poem! LOL Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from TinyTeena
Beautifully described. Each stanza flows well, aided by the regular rhythm and rhyme. There is a deeper meaning, other than that of the creatures in the tidal pool. I feel the poem is also referring to the life of humans. "life adjusts if it's to thrive" and "adapt or meet their certain doom". AS the world changes and evolves, Man must adapt to be able to survive. Environmental issues - pollution, clean water, types of energy, types of food and housing etc. If humans don't adapt to the changes and protect our resources we are certain to meet ur doom.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Beautifully described. Each stanza flows well, aided by the regular rhythm and rhyme. There is a deeper meaning, other than that of the creatures in the tidal pool. I feel the poem is also referring to the life of humans. "life adjusts if it's to thrive" and "adapt or meet their certain doom". AS the world changes and evolves, Man must adapt to be able to survive. Environmental issues - pollution, clean water, types of energy, types of food and housing etc. If humans don't adapt to the changes and protect our resources we are certain to meet ur doom.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Teena, thanks. Again, your review is so much more insightful than most :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
Beautiful description of a treacherous environment and the hardy, brave creatures who struggle to adjust and thrive within it. It's interesting how we can find beauty in unexpected places, the ones that could kill us because we are frail in comparison to their strength, the ones where the beauty is hidden beneath ugliness.
I like the use of the polysyllabic words: symmetry, anemone, hegemony, coloration's. I find it impressive that you can find ones that rhyme! (I always struggle with finding even one-syllable words to rhyme. Yet another reason I'm not a poet!)
Great use of color: color pops in brilliant bursts, bright coloration, green kelp, ornately-hued. I wasn't entirely certain that I liked the use of "color" and "coloration's" (relatively) close together, though, but that's just a quibble on my part. Both words certainly work in these lines and keep the rhythm strong.
I liked the image of the anemone pursuing their prey in guise of flowers. Wouldn't it be interesting if WE could disguise ourselves as flowers?
Overall, another thoughtful, descriptive poem. I enjoyed this. Laura
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Beautiful description of a treacherous environment and the hardy, brave creatures who struggle to adjust and thrive within it. It's interesting how we can find beauty in unexpected places, the ones that could kill us because we are frail in comparison to their strength, the ones where the beauty is hidden beneath ugliness.
I like the use of the polysyllabic words: symmetry, anemone, hegemony, coloration's. I find it impressive that you can find ones that rhyme! (I always struggle with finding even one-syllable words to rhyme. Yet another reason I'm not a poet!)
Great use of color: color pops in brilliant bursts, bright coloration, green kelp, ornately-hued. I wasn't entirely certain that I liked the use of "color" and "coloration's" (relatively) close together, though, but that's just a quibble on my part. Both words certainly work in these lines and keep the rhythm strong.
I liked the image of the anemone pursuing their prey in guise of flowers. Wouldn't it be interesting if WE could disguise ourselves as flowers?
Overall, another thoughtful, descriptive poem. I enjoyed this. Laura
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much, Laura, for your thoughtful and attentive comments - glad you like the rhymes of the multi-syllable words. I just don't have as much a thing against saying color and coloration in the same poem or any repetition like that in my own poetry or the poetry of others as some people do. I'm glad it didn't bother you THAT much :-) As always, I love hearing from you, someone who always reads and things about every line of each poem I write :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Pearl...It is a pleasure to read your poetry. It is intelligent, lyrical and flows very well. My favorite lines are:
"While color pops in brilliant bursts,
a constant struggle to survive
continues with each current's change,
as life adjusts if it's to thrive." Bravo! Take care...Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Hi, Pearl...It is a pleasure to read your poetry. It is intelligent, lyrical and flows very well. My favorite lines are:
"While color pops in brilliant bursts,
a constant struggle to survive
continues with each current's change,
as life adjusts if it's to thrive." Bravo! Take care...Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Bob, thank you so much - you are most kind and generous, and I so appreciate these kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I double-dog-dare you to read this poem aloud in front of an audience.
I was reading it to myself and I felt my tongue trying to rip itself out.
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A great piece, Brooke. I've never really lived close to an ocean, so most anything nautical really draws my imagination in. I don't think I've ever seen a tidal pool.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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I double-dog-dare you to read this poem aloud in front of an audience.
I was reading it to myself and I felt my tongue trying to rip itself out.
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A great piece, Brooke. I've never really lived close to an ocean, so most anything nautical really draws my imagination in. I don't think I've ever seen a tidal pool.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Why does your tongue trying to rip itself out sound like a scene from your book? LOL Thanks for the smile, Nescher. The tidal pools in Maine and Nova Scotia are spectacular if you're ever thinking about vacation ideas some day for your growing family :-) Brooke
