The Magic Roundabout
more flower-inspired quatrains112 total reviews
Comment from N.C.Dent
What antique memories you stir
with the music of the organ
and the caliphs loud play
I remember well the county fair
and watermelon day,
and of calliope best remembered
are the tunes it used to play.
Thanks for a lovely ride. Nick
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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What antique memories you stir
with the music of the organ
and the caliphs loud play
I remember well the county fair
and watermelon day,
and of calliope best remembered
are the tunes it used to play.
Thanks for a lovely ride. Nick
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Nick, thank you. What a lovely poetic response! Glad this poem connects with your memories - I hope to do that with my work :-) Brooke
Comment from raimie
Oh,I love a merry go round! And yes they have a ditinctive sound. just bought my niece the movie Mary Poppins and she told my brother after w watched it, that she wanted a pink horse that flies! Jason was like, what? Where did she get that. well, there is the scene where they are on the merry go round and the horses fly off and they race them! He had to tell her gentley, that real horses aren't pink and don't fly -lol!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Oh,I love a merry go round! And yes they have a ditinctive sound. just bought my niece the movie Mary Poppins and she told my brother after w watched it, that she wanted a pink horse that flies! Jason was like, what? Where did she get that. well, there is the scene where they are on the merry go round and the horses fly off and they race them! He had to tell her gentley, that real horses aren't pink and don't fly -lol!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Raimie, thank you. I love Mary Poppins, carousels and imaginative little girls : -D Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very creative and very well written with great colourful presentation adding to the poetic theme I enjoyed well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Very creative and very well written with great colourful presentation adding to the poetic theme I enjoyed well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Fuller :-) Brooke
Comment from Penya
In the last line of the third stanza, I think it should be "we feel no need to gain control" because the tense feels more correct, if you know what I mean. Personally, I don't like the way it sounds "with no need felt to gain control" - it's just awkward. I love the rest of the poem.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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In the last line of the third stanza, I think it should be "we feel no need to gain control" because the tense feels more correct, if you know what I mean. Personally, I don't like the way it sounds "with no need felt to gain control" - it's just awkward. I love the rest of the poem.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Penya. I will have to revisit that line :-) Brooke
Comment from DictionaryGirl
This was a great poem and then I read your note about the flowers and I thought that made it even more cool! I bet you had fun writing this! It's really good.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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This was a great poem and then I read your note about the flowers and I thought that made it even more cool! I bet you had fun writing this! It's really good.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your gracious and warm response :-) Brooke
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I love calliopes! I love this poem! It is so fun. You have used the flower names in a most creative way, very nicely done. The colors and the graphic were both good choices also.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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I love calliopes! I love this poem! It is so fun. You have used the flower names in a most creative way, very nicely done. The colors and the graphic were both good choices also.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Thanks so much, Rose, for your positive and cheerful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Penpal
What a whimsical piece capturing the chidlike mood of carefreeness. I found that using names of flowers in this piece is very clever, and the mood carried me off to my childhood excitement at going to the fair.
An enjoyable read.
Pen
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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What a whimsical piece capturing the chidlike mood of carefreeness. I found that using names of flowers in this piece is very clever, and the mood carried me off to my childhood excitement at going to the fair.
An enjoyable read.
Pen
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Pen, thank you. I've really enjoyed writing the flower name poems :-) Brooke
Comment from --Turtle.
I liked this, I didn't realize it was all of those words were flowers till I got to the end. Are you going to make a book of poems with using flower names? It's an interesting theme. I liked the bright yellows of the presentation of this poem, and I found the end feeling I got from reading to be a happy one.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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I liked this, I didn't realize it was all of those words were flowers till I got to the end. Are you going to make a book of poems with using flower names? It's an interesting theme. I liked the bright yellows of the presentation of this poem, and I found the end feeling I got from reading to be a happy one.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Yes, I want to put all the flower name poems together - thank you for your kind comments about them :-) Brooke
Comment from MsRefusenik
I love "happy lights" as a flower name. You have turned your research into a delightful poem of whim and fantasy. It certainly deserves the "All Time Best" award and I congratulate you on it.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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I love "happy lights" as a flower name. You have turned your research into a delightful poem of whim and fantasy. It certainly deserves the "All Time Best" award and I congratulate you on it.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Maryellen - thank you - I've loved writing the flower name poems :-) Brooke
Comment from dneves
This is lovely, well conceived, well crafted verse. I enjoyed the well textured language and the well managed rhyme. The weakness is in the word inversion in order to induce rhyme, on S2L4-otherwise this is very strong!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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This is lovely, well conceived, well crafted verse. I enjoyed the well textured language and the well managed rhyme. The weakness is in the word inversion in order to induce rhyme, on S2L4-otherwise this is very strong!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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thank you for your thoughtful comments. I appreciate your taking the time to review. Brooke
