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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Mute Calliope"
cinquain poetry

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Comment from Treesaw
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Very interesting, Brooke! Mesmerizing, in fact. I'll be out of the loop since breaking my leg in two places--here at the beach. Just spent a week in hospital and am now at the beach house. Keep writing...however, I do have loads to catch up on.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2009
    You went to the beach only to break your leg there??? How awful!!! Thanks for catching up on my poems - I'm honored :-) Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
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I like this cinquain a lot, Brooke. Calliope music always makes me smile; it's such a joyous sound. I got to play two of them a few times, on the riverboats Mississippi Queen and American Queen, both of which are now up for sale. So your poem is accurate as to those two instruments being denied a voice right now. That's sad.
Sally

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
    I did not know those boats were up for sale - I always dreamed of cruising on one some day! That is terribly sad. Thank you, Sally. Brooke
Comment from MJMuraco
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Thank you for your author notes because I always learn something. Your poem and photo are wonderful and flow very nicely together.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
    Mary Jayne, it is good to see you! Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
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Wow, the picture you found reminds me of a calliope that has taken on magical powers. I enjoyed your musing in your quizzical little poem, and your notes were very generous to the many folks who had no idea what this "instrument" is. My favorite phrase in your neat cinquain was "dulcet voice."

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
    Isn't it a great picture??? :-) Thanks so much, Joan, and good morning! Brooke :-)
Comment from LauraKatherine
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Fascinating thought in this cinquain, Brooke. What good does surface beauty do if inner beauty is not to be found? What good is to be found in having an object of beauty that cannot fulfill its purpose? Not much, IMO!

I enjoyed the line "denied its dulcet voice" for the beauty and sound of the words, how "dulcet voice" captures the purpose of a calliope, and as the center of the poem where the irony/tragedy is described.

Thought-provoking and lovely, even as it describes something sad. Enjoyed this (as always!) Laura

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    Laura, thank you - the dulcet voice line came about because two reviewers did not particularly like my original line there - and they were right! LOL shows that revision really works :-) Brooke
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
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I don't like the format, but I LOVED the premise.

I could sit here and argue with you about beauty in sound and beauty in vision for HOURS.

Great piece, Brooke.

:0)

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    Nescher, I love cinquains - glad you like the premise anyway :-) Brooke
Comment from BellaSpirit
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Brooke,

How pretty! I love the way you created the image of the mute calliope. What is beauty when the spirit is gone?

I think this one is a winner! ******
BellaSpirit

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    Thank you, Bella, for your perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
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What a beautifully melancholy image; a musical instrument without a voice. Like a Rich Tea biscuit with no cup of tea to be dunked in, it is clearly a think of beauty, but unable to fulfill its full potential.

Mike

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    What a British analogy! You and Margaret should meet for a cuppa - she's quite into tea. LOL :-) Thank you, Mike, for your most perceptive read. Brooke
Comment from jwryt
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i haven't seen a calliope..maybe i should really check it out..anyways, another nice poem from you..good take on the contest..thanks for the read..

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    Yes, you should - it will only take you a couple minutes at you tube :-) I think you'll like them! Thanks so much, my young friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
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Hi Brooke I had to read your author's note before your poem to find out what a 'callipoe' was. I went back to reading your poem and enjoyed your very clever poem. What a beautiful choose of artwork. Cheers Gaye

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
    Gaye, I hope you googled them at you tube to hear and see one. Thank you :-) brooke