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Momentary Magic

tanka

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Comment from raimie
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That picture is so serene I could stare at it for hours. What beautiful words to such imagery. I can smell the jasmine, hmm so nice :)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
    Isn't her art just sublime? Thanks so much, Raime :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
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I LOVE night blooming jasmine. It grows wild all over my yard. The scent at night is awesome. But, you're right...during the day the perfume goes away, just like the shooting stars. But, at night, what a special treat! Sue

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    Sue, lucky you!! What a great excuse for sleeping with the windows open. Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from steevie
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i like your poem, Brooke
something about star gazing that has ones mind thinking on what is out there and how do we know that we are not really all alone

steve

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    Steve, you're right - stargazing definitely leads to philosophizing. :-) Thank you. Brooke
Comment from ylime
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!!!:O I have no idea how something so short can be so deep!
What can I say? Its just so...spectacular! love the art too
-emily

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    thank you, Emily - you should try writing a tanka - I find the short forms really force me to work for every word choice. Brooke :-)
reply by ylime on 01-Jul-2009
    I should try to do some poetry. Tanka might suit me because I like doing haikus :)
    -emily
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    the tanka is actually the older cousin of the haiku - even more ancient
reply by ylime on 01-Jul-2009
    Maybe the ancient people got tired of writing 5 lines,
    and switched it to 3 :)
    I like the way both tankas and haikus flow.
    I think I'll try to write one later today. Or tomorrow... no rush :)
Comment from MaureenLocher
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"Steeped in perfumed redolence" - wow! I like your comparison of flower to star. Short blooming time equating short stint in the night sky. Good picture also. Fits well.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Maureen, thanks so much for your thoughtful analysis and kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from mstad55
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Wow! If someone said that in the 60's they would have been accused of smoking something other than a ripe banana. And now I have to go look up another word, just in hopes to make some sense out of the tanka. Redolence? Maybe Re is related to Mickey. That would make sense. You'll think about that for a minute. Mickey Dolence was the drummer for the Monkeys. Nice job stimulating the old brain. Mike

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    I watched every episode of the Monkeys :-) Thanks, little brother. Brooke :-)
Comment from tonydem
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This poem puts you in the mood to go find an open field with someone you fancy, lay out your back holding hands and just stare up at the universe. Wonderful tool this poem is for the imagination.(I hope you didn't think I was going somewhere else with this review. I'm turning over a new leave, thank you very much.)
As Always
Tony

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Tony, thank you. Oh, you do make me laugh. Star gazing is all I ever thought it was about :-D Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
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Mmm... a fragrant poem, if ever such a thing existed. Quiet and magical... like the fireflies I saw the other day... reminded me of one of your other poems. Wonderful job.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Mary, that is lovely to think you saw fireflies and thought of my poetry - thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from LYLE
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Brooke,

I keep running into various poems of yours:) I could make a career of just reading your work, and have an enjoyable time doing so. I love night blooming jasmine, and I hope that my neighbors do also, because the aroma can be smelled on half the island I live on, depending on the wind.

Fondly, Lyle

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Oh, an island filled with the scent of jasmine - OK, when can I move in??? Thanks, Lyle :-) Brooke
reply by LYLE on 30-Jun-2009
    Whenever you wish - just clear it with my wife:-)

    Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Tell her I have no designs on you, just a guest room!! LOL
reply by LYLE on 30-Jun-2009
    Listen, Dear One, no one has any designs on me, including her! :-(

    Poor Ole' Lyle:)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    well, now you're going to make me cry, Lyle. I'm sure I very well might have designs on you if I lived down the street and not hundreds of miles away :-)
reply by LYLE on 30-Jun-2009
    Dear Brooke,

    Please don't cry:-) This part of Miami Beach does have some interesting people living here. Billy Joel lives a block to my right,
    and to my left is Edward Villella, at one time the lead dancer for George Balanchine, and now is the founding director of the Miami City Ballet. Across the street, Cher built a home for her mother, but never lived there. Kevin Bacon rented on the island for a while, as did Ted Kennedy with his sister. Robin(?) Gibb of the BeeGees bought on the island, but died shortly thereafter. So, all in all, it is a rather intresting place to live. So, even if I have no love, I can smell up the island to my heart's content:-)
    Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Sounds like you have the big bucks, Lyle. LOL I saw Vilella dance a few times back when he was a total wonder - I have a Billy Joel connection to. My Aunt Lil, the sole survivor of my mother's siblings lives on East Street in Hicksville, right across from Billy Joel's old alma mater, where many of my cousins attended school.
    Bet that impresses you!! LOL Brooke
reply by LYLE on 30-Jun-2009
    OK, Dear One, I am impressed. I thought that I would have some fun and bomb you with a bunch of names, and then wait for the response:)
    I envy you, because I never saw Villella dance. I di get to see Jacques D'Amboise, who had a wonderful leap, but not The Leap of Villella.

    As for Gibb, Billy Joel, Bacon, and the rest, I have never met any of them. As for the big bucks, no, not really. We moved on the Island in 1984, when the cost of the house was $ 295,000., but not on the water.
    Compared to the rest of the residents, I live in a tent:)

    Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Now you really do have me crying - first nobody has the hots for you, and now I find out you're practically living in a tent!!!! I just don't know how much worse this can get ;-)
reply by LYLE on 30-Jun-2009
    Well, truthfully, no one has had the hots for me since 1980, or perhaps, before then. Even if someone did, I wouldn't know what to do with her.
    If you remember A Chorus Line, there is a song "I Felt Nothing" in the show. A quick funny little story: after my divorce in 1978, I went on a
    date with a stunning young woman, age 26. I was 20 years her senior.
    When, after dinner, we returned to my hme for what I really expected to be drinks and conversation, she went into the bedroom and started undressing. I had not dated in 22 years and wondered what in the H...
    she was doing. She stood there totally naked and asked me what was I waiting for. I told her that I was waiting for her to get dressed. The next day I went top my doctor, told him the story and asked him what was wrong with me. He laughed and said "Lyle, she scared you to death! Don't worry about it, but I would suggest you move up into your age group."

    Fondly, Lyle
Comment from colinlinder
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See this is what makes you a far better poet (light years better) than me. This line:
much too soon depart the sky
I would have just said
Depart the sky much too soon.
So much more impact your way

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2009
    Colin, thank you. Your gracious comments have made my afternoon :-) Brooke