Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "In Tenderness a Hand Extends"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from GABSTBOZ
Hi B
It's an honor to receive poems from you. Such substance in "In Tenderness a Hand Extends" In your additional notes you offer great invaluable wisdom.
You've a talented pen
Strength of ink within
May it soften a fist to a loving hand
I pray its ink not to run dry
For imagination we must all try
Heavenly we are all linked together
From where the pen traces into forever
Smiles
Gabor
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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Hi B
It's an honor to receive poems from you. Such substance in "In Tenderness a Hand Extends" In your additional notes you offer great invaluable wisdom.
You've a talented pen
Strength of ink within
May it soften a fist to a loving hand
I pray its ink not to run dry
For imagination we must all try
Heavenly we are all linked together
From where the pen traces into forever
Smiles
Gabor
Comment Written 29-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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Gabor,what a lovely poetic response to my poem - and tonight I've finally had a chance to read your work!!! Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke : -)
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Hi Brook
You are most welcome and a kind friend . All earthly souls are the ink in the pen and in difficult times it is good to be on the same page together . Kind souls like your self guide the pen closer to Heaven , and I'm just trying to say I appreciate your efforts and ideas . Keep up your great work , for it keeps the ink of the pen fresh and full .
Smiles
Gabor
Comment from dtimes3
True statement and well said. Trust is something alien to those at our home for Veterans. They have many other issues but winning trust is never easy. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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True statement and well said. Trust is something alien to those at our home for Veterans. They have many other issues but winning trust is never easy. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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I imagine you see this every day. Thank you. Brooke :-)
Comment from Roisin
I've read this one repeatedly and I have to say I love it. I'm not a major fan of the triolet and I love how you've used the form here and adjusted it to add more depth. The subtle changes in the repeat line make for wonderful reading, especially the last one; 'for tenderness my hand extends'. I love your message of compassion here. I think we can all be at fault at times for barging in gung-ho and making a big fuss about helping somebody out. It's good to be subtle about it and sometimes it's absolutely necessary, especially when the person needs to be treated gently. As always, I love your notes too and completely agree with your thoughts. This is such a wonderful, gentle poem. I love it.
Hugs
Roisin
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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I've read this one repeatedly and I have to say I love it. I'm not a major fan of the triolet and I love how you've used the form here and adjusted it to add more depth. The subtle changes in the repeat line make for wonderful reading, especially the last one; 'for tenderness my hand extends'. I love your message of compassion here. I think we can all be at fault at times for barging in gung-ho and making a big fuss about helping somebody out. It's good to be subtle about it and sometimes it's absolutely necessary, especially when the person needs to be treated gently. As always, I love your notes too and completely agree with your thoughts. This is such a wonderful, gentle poem. I love it.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Roisin, you understand my point perfectly - thank you for that, and thank you for your most generous review and thoughtful comments. I'm also glad you like the modifications to the triolet - I love form poetry, but that doesn't mean it can't be tweaked a little when the content needs it. :-) Brooke :-)
Comment from skye
What strength there is in a pair of hands.... what purpose, friendship, love.
Your images are strong... in words and art.
I love this poem... love the idea of extending ourselves with a helping hand.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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What strength there is in a pair of hands.... what purpose, friendship, love.
Your images are strong... in words and art.
I love this poem... love the idea of extending ourselves with a helping hand.
Very well done.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Thanks, Skye - your visits and comments are always most appreciated :-) Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Your latest poems show such caring and compassion. You are right one has to be careful even the needy are proud and don't want charity just caring and love. LOL Gaye
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke Your latest poems show such caring and compassion. You are right one has to be careful even the needy are proud and don't want charity just caring and love. LOL Gaye
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Gaye, for your thoughtful review and comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Kristia
Hi,
Your words are so true. Reaching out and accepting help can be so hard. The flow of your work is very nice and I enjoyed it. I think it brings a very powerful message. Cheers
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Hi,
Your words are so true. Reaching out and accepting help can be so hard. The flow of your work is very nice and I enjoyed it. I think it brings a very powerful message. Cheers
Comment Written 27-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2009
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Thanks so much for your kind and perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from RapturedHeart
Very beautiful, Brooke. And a nice twist on the triolet, too. There really is something about acts of compassion - when they're genuine. They just brings us all up or down to the same level. Well done,
Heather
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Very beautiful, Brooke. And a nice twist on the triolet, too. There really is something about acts of compassion - when they're genuine. They just brings us all up or down to the same level. Well done,
Heather
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Thanks, Heather - I appreciate your lovely comments :-) Brooke
Comment from tonydem
Very nice sentiment in this one, Brooke. But I would expect nothing less from you. Sometimes an offer of help is refused due to pride. It's tricky to get acoss to that person that we all need help at one time or another.
Tony
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Very nice sentiment in this one, Brooke. But I would expect nothing less from you. Sometimes an offer of help is refused due to pride. It's tricky to get acoss to that person that we all need help at one time or another.
Tony
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Sometimes it is pride, sometimes mistrust - sometimes both. Thanks so much, Tony. Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
There are so many of us who over the hand of friendship to others some do except reluctantly as you say this is due to experiences in their past well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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There are so many of us who over the hand of friendship to others some do except reluctantly as you say this is due to experiences in their past well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Fuller, thank you for your perceptive response to this poem, Brooke :-)
Comment from Peter@Poole
How lyrically lovely and tenderly stated, Brooke. Isn't it wonderful, that one can still recognise its triolet roots. You have produced a masterpiece, though I'd rather call you mistress. Peter
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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How lyrically lovely and tenderly stated, Brooke. Isn't it wonderful, that one can still recognise its triolet roots. You have produced a masterpiece, though I'd rather call you mistress. Peter
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Peter. I'm so glad, that you who have so mastered the triolet approve of my modifications to the form :-) Brooke
