(eighteen hard-boiled eggs) cinqku
17 syllable form73 total reviews
Comment from N.C.Dent
It is a rare blessing to receive both pleasure and instruction from the same lovely piece of literature. It is often the case in what I read from you hand, a fact that calls for both appreciation and gratitude. Unknowing,you have instructed me in poetic forms new to me while allowing me to draw pleasure from the instruction by example. My thanks. Nick
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2009
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It is a rare blessing to receive both pleasure and instruction from the same lovely piece of literature. It is often the case in what I read from you hand, a fact that calls for both appreciation and gratitude. Unknowing,you have instructed me in poetic forms new to me while allowing me to draw pleasure from the instruction by example. My thanks. Nick
Comment Written 11-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2009
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Nick, I love that about this site - I have learned quite a few new forms I had never heard of or never paid attention to until I came to FS. This is my one and only attempt at this form so far, and now I pass an interest of it onto you from a friend on site who passed it on to me. I love it. Thanks so much. Brooke :-)
Comment from dtimes3
Cinqku very much. Love the eggs but I do eat grits sometimes. Sorry about the egg shortage. I just built a chicken coop and populated it with six hens. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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Cinqku very much. Love the eggs but I do eat grits sometimes. Sorry about the egg shortage. I just built a chicken coop and populated it with six hens. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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You can express mail me the eggs. LOL Thank you for your punny response :-) Brooke
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke I just adore this form of poetry and how well you have applied it to you experience. The photo of the eggs was perfect. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke I just adore this form of poetry and how well you have applied it to you experience. The photo of the eggs was perfect. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Gaye, thank you :-) I was pleased when I found that photo :-) Brooke
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Hi Brooke What time is it in your part of the World. 12noon here. Cheers Gaye
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it's 8 pm here - that means you're 16 hours ahead of me, - that seems right because I figured out a long time ago with some Australians on site that I was 14 hours behind them. It's really weird to think it's lunchtime tomorrow somewhere else :-)
Comment from Rabianabian
Your backround stories for your poems are always very interesting--and the poetry form is new to me, I've never heard of it before. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Your backround stories for your poems are always very interesting--and the poetry form is new to me, I've never heard of it before. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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I had never heard of the form until a couple weeks ago when another member used it - I like it. Thanks so much, Mary. Brooke :-)
Comment from Lyrical_CD
Just make deviled eggs and everyone will be happy. I had the opportunity to do some volunteer work in college that was very rewarding at a food kitchen. Good write.
Cory
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Just make deviled eggs and everyone will be happy. I had the opportunity to do some volunteer work in college that was very rewarding at a food kitchen. Good write.
Cory
Comment Written 25-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Ah, Cory - that requires a bunch more preparation and then the eggs can't be pocketed for later as many people do - many of the guys take the egg to work as many of them have at least day or seasonal work. :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from luna
Dear Brooke, I've never heard of this form before and find it quite interesting. Do you mind if I give it a try? I enjoyed your writing and your notes, you certainly did this unknown-to-me form justice.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Dear Brooke, I've never heard of this form before and find it quite interesting. Do you mind if I give it a try? I enjoyed your writing and your notes, you certainly did this unknown-to-me form justice.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 25-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Hey, I gave it a try because amicus posted the form - I don't own it and am thrilled to have you give it a whirl - thanks, Jenny :-) Brooke
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
I like this new form, Brooke
may be something I can do
plus, I can cook hard-boiled eggs
2 for 2 today
wow
love, jan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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I like this new form, Brooke
may be something I can do
plus, I can cook hard-boiled eggs
2 for 2 today
wow
love, jan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Jan, is it not nice to feel accomplished?? LOL Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
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absolutely, it is. some days I really struggle with that!!!
other days, I just want to write it my way and the heck with
all the parameters people want to give us. Just because I
write a lot of haiku/senryu formats for Lexi does not mean
I plan to do everything that way nor do I want to be
criticized if I go away from it. If I don't call it that anywhere
in the posting, am I (or any other writer) held to that
standard or are we not allowed to play with the formats
as we have the need to meet our creativity? I read things all
the time without any kind of format but it seems to work so
I give the writer credit for that.
I apologize for my diatribe. Just got on a pony and rode for
awhile. Must be the farm girl in me. LOL! love, jan
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Jan, I understand - some people like things in neat little boxes that fit their expectations and heaven help a person who does not deliver the package they think they ordered!!! You can rant to me any old time you want!
Comment from tonydem
Very clever Ms. Brooke. I sense you get a lot of inspiration from your work at the shelter or food pantry or church, or where ever else you spread you happiness.
I hope the two denied at least got orange juice and toast.
Tony
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Very clever Ms. Brooke. I sense you get a lot of inspiration from your work at the shelter or food pantry or church, or where ever else you spread you happiness.
I hope the two denied at least got orange juice and toast.
Tony
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Well, we don't have a toaster, but we have plenty of bread and two microwaves. We rarely have anything as luxurious as orange juice - we serve powdered milk, water, powdered lemonade and powdered iced tea in addition to coffee or tea.
Sometimes we're lucky enough to have someone donate bottled apple juice or something else like that if it's on sale - but fresh milk and orange juice are pretty much a Christmas, Thanksgiving, Easter thing. Thanks, Tony. Brooke :-)
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" we serve powdered milk, water," What do you mix powered water with?
(Ok, I'm teasing. It just looked so funny I couldn't resist.
Tony
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go ahead, tease away!!! God is watching. LOL
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Touche'
Comment from AlvinTEthington
The situation is tragic, obviously.
But I am wondering about combining Japanese forms with the English poetic tradition. I can't imagine John Donne writing a haiku or Basho writing a sonnet. You do well with this combined tradition, but my whole concern is can we just put two cultures together and call them multicultural. Does each culture need to maintain its own identity? Remember the Japanese kept the Europeans out of their country for a long time. Food for thought (no pun intended.)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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The situation is tragic, obviously.
But I am wondering about combining Japanese forms with the English poetic tradition. I can't imagine John Donne writing a haiku or Basho writing a sonnet. You do well with this combined tradition, but my whole concern is can we just put two cultures together and call them multicultural. Does each culture need to maintain its own identity? Remember the Japanese kept the Europeans out of their country for a long time. Food for thought (no pun intended.)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Alvin, you are far too philosophical for me when it comes to forms - somebody invented this form and it sounded good to me when I read it as posted by another member, so I used it. It didn't even occur to me to wonder what the Japanese would think!!! :-D I just thought - when amicus writes one of these little numbers, I like it! LOL Thank you for your deep thoughts : -) brooke
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Remember, I taught Philosophy on the college level for years...
Comment from LauraKatherine
Sad. To think of all the eggs stacked in the dairy cases at my local grocery store, and all those people needing food and being unable to receive these coveted eggs.
I haven't run across a cinqku before, so it was interesting to read its history. You've used it effectively here to emphasize the last line (the point of your poem, that 2 people will be denied eggs).
Also noticed the use of numbers: eighteen, twenty, two. Makes us do the math: 18 eggs minus 20 egg-craving people equals negative 2 denied people. Again, effective, subtle and sad.
Excellent work. Can't see anything to fault here. :) (Except the lack of eggs for the shelter.)
Laura
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Sad. To think of all the eggs stacked in the dairy cases at my local grocery store, and all those people needing food and being unable to receive these coveted eggs.
I haven't run across a cinqku before, so it was interesting to read its history. You've used it effectively here to emphasize the last line (the point of your poem, that 2 people will be denied eggs).
Also noticed the use of numbers: eighteen, twenty, two. Makes us do the math: 18 eggs minus 20 egg-craving people equals negative 2 denied people. Again, effective, subtle and sad.
Excellent work. Can't see anything to fault here. :) (Except the lack of eggs for the shelter.)
Laura
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Laura - yes, in a society of plenty, we have households that throw away an average $500 worth of food a year, and then we have those who long for an egg. Brooke
