Campfire Wisdom
cautionary quatrains79 total reviews
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
Cautionary quatrains? Is there any type of poetry that you haven't written, Brooke. I like the simple wisdom in this one and who could not identify with it? I sure have burned my share of marshmallows. Now my steaks are a different story. I pay really close attention to them. Roger.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Cautionary quatrains? Is there any type of poetry that you haven't written, Brooke. I like the simple wisdom in this one and who could not identify with it? I sure have burned my share of marshmallows. Now my steaks are a different story. I pay really close attention to them. Roger.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Oh, there is an enormous list of forms I have not tried, and some I never intend to because their list of rules gives me a migraine just contemplating them. You should see some of the formulas for poems people post - you'd need a degree in higher math to figure out where various words and rhymes and accents are required! LOL Thanks so much, Roger :-) Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
golden brown's my favorite. While others impatiently burn theirs away I prefer the slow spin of perfection. Cute poem on a quite common topic. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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golden brown's my favorite. While others impatiently burn theirs away I prefer the slow spin of perfection. Cute poem on a quite common topic. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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Thank goodness - I've had well over a dozen people tell me they eat those black things and even prefer them - it is good to hear the voice of reason and good taste! LOL Thanks for your review, my friend :-)
Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A very good poetic interpretation of "haste makes waste." Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Nice juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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A very good poetic interpretation of "haste makes waste." Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Nice juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Thanks, Al - glad you enjoyed this lighter poem :-) Brooke
Comment from jakuper
Ha ha ha. I really laughed with pleasuere and recollection of burned marshmallow in my mouth. What a beatifully sung poem with fine rhyming and funny meaning.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Ha ha ha. I really laughed with pleasuere and recollection of burned marshmallow in my mouth. What a beatifully sung poem with fine rhyming and funny meaning.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Jack, you're not supposed to put them in your mouth when they are burning - I think you could get a pretty funny story out of how to cook a marshmallow! LOL Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke This poem is delightful and fun to read out loud
I realize toasting marshmellows is avery America pastime, one, I don't recall doing. If just usually sausages on the campfire for us. Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke This poem is delightful and fun to read out loud
I realize toasting marshmellows is avery America pastime, one, I don't recall doing. If just usually sausages on the campfire for us. Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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I always think of New Zealand as this exotic land with a million things I envy - but lack of marshmallow roasting - that is a true deficiency in your culture!!! LOL Thanks, Gaye :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
Ah yes! And, the white paper can either become an equisite sweet or burnt toast depending upon the patience and care provided. I made an analogy of writing to cokking the marshmallow. Sound words of advice. Sue
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Ah yes! And, the white paper can either become an equisite sweet or burnt toast depending upon the patience and care provided. I made an analogy of writing to cokking the marshmallow. Sound words of advice. Sue
Comment Written 25-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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I like your analogy, Sue - thank you for your insights and your review :-) Brooke
Comment from Helen Tan
Campfire Wisdom
I thought this was your entry to the Fanstorian boot camp contest.
A snow-white, slow-cooked marshmallow
becomes a gold confection
I love these lines...I can see the twirling of the marshmallows over the fire. "gold confection" - perfection I've yet to accomplish...I get mesmerised by the crackling of fire, the change of colour and the general lull I fee when I'm at a camp fire. Usually I miss that precise moment when it reaches gold.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Campfire Wisdom
I thought this was your entry to the Fanstorian boot camp contest.
A snow-white, slow-cooked marshmallow
becomes a gold confection
I love these lines...I can see the twirling of the marshmallows over the fire. "gold confection" - perfection I've yet to accomplish...I get mesmerised by the crackling of fire, the change of colour and the general lull I fee when I'm at a camp fire. Usually I miss that precise moment when it reaches gold.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Helen - I did not enter that contest - I just had fun going to other people's camps :-) All the fun and none of the work. LOL Thanks so much. :-) Brooke
Comment from Rabianabian
Hmm, how true... as for myself, I can't seem to toast a marshmallow without catching it on fire! Oh, well. Very good poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Hmm, how true... as for myself, I can't seem to toast a marshmallow without catching it on fire! Oh, well. Very good poem.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Everyone has had one catch on fire - you just need to practice your technique! LOL thanks, Mary. Brooke :-)
Comment from Fleedleflump
I'm afraid this haiku doesnt quite meet some of the requirements of the form, Brooke. I mean, there's too many lines for a start. Is this a modern haiku, perhaps?
Sorry? What? It's not meant to be a haiku? Oh darn it, silly me!
Don't mind me, it's Mike's Mad Wednesday Morning, or something.
I like this idea of dressing up fables/adages in whimsical metaphor; I suspect there may be more to come :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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I'm afraid this haiku doesnt quite meet some of the requirements of the form, Brooke. I mean, there's too many lines for a start. Is this a modern haiku, perhaps?
Sorry? What? It's not meant to be a haiku? Oh darn it, silly me!
Don't mind me, it's Mike's Mad Wednesday Morning, or something.
I like this idea of dressing up fables/adages in whimsical metaphor; I suspect there may be more to come :-)
Mike
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Mike, you're a hoot. Thank you my friend for forgiving me my transgressions in following the haiku rules in my quatrain poem! LOL Brooke
Comment from John D. Swanson
Guess I'm hasty as I like them burnt myself. Dad always told me that my hair would be darker if it was burnt. Maybe it was because he always burnt the toast, do you think? Thanks for the fun brought back by your writing.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Guess I'm hasty as I like them burnt myself. Dad always told me that my hair would be darker if it was burnt. Maybe it was because he always burnt the toast, do you think? Thanks for the fun brought back by your writing.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2009
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Thank you, John - this appears to be a site filled with people who burn their marshmallows from the comments I've received! LOL Brooke
