Exploding Baby Ducks -
a nonsense tanka (see author's notes, please)64 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Sure is a nonsense poem, I'm not sure if I understand it but it's a laugh. Love the picture of the ducklings. Chhers Gaye
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke Sure is a nonsense poem, I'm not sure if I understand it but it's a laugh. Love the picture of the ducklings. Chhers Gaye
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Gaye, there really is little to understand other than I owed Zeezee the poem! LOL Thanks for putting up with my sillines. Brooke :-)
Comment from Joan E.
I adore the humor in your disclaimer about no baby ducks being harmed in the crafting of your poem! I'm glad going to camp was such a tonic and lead you to write a nonsense 5-7-5-7-7.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2009
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I adore the humor in your disclaimer about no baby ducks being harmed in the crafting of your poem! I'm glad going to camp was such a tonic and lead you to write a nonsense 5-7-5-7-7.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2009
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Joan, my daughter lives in Sherman Oaks - perhaps you can drop in on her some day and explain to her that I am funny - we just got off the phone during which conversation she reminded me again when I attempted a joke that I am not funny! LOL Thank you, Brooke :-)
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It's a generation thing, I think. My son is 32 and reacts the same way when I try to be funny. But he was "proudly" surprised when I first used OMG and knew what it meant!
If you ever need me to check in on your daughter (this idea occurred to me when you first mentioned she was hurt at work, but fortunately she recovered quickly) let me know. Sherman Oaks is only a half hour away in good traffic, which we sometimes have
Enjoy your weekend- Joan.
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What a sweetheart you are :-)
Comment from mstad55
Yeah yeah, yeah. Blah blah, blah. I read all about the fun and frivolity in the camp that I wasn't invited to. I wasn't even given honorable mention or latrine duty. At the very least, she could have been said I missed my flight, but ZeeZee chose to leave me high and dry in the woodshed. Maybe next year for the reunion someone will remember dear old Mike and send me a lousy invitation. When I first read camp woe-is-me, I thought it really took place and then I read the notes. It was a typical fun story of the zzwriter. I commented on it and she said she thought I was an enigma and left me out. Your exploding ducks might need an umbrella to keep from getting hit with beaks and tails.
mstad55
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2009
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Yeah yeah, yeah. Blah blah, blah. I read all about the fun and frivolity in the camp that I wasn't invited to. I wasn't even given honorable mention or latrine duty. At the very least, she could have been said I missed my flight, but ZeeZee chose to leave me high and dry in the woodshed. Maybe next year for the reunion someone will remember dear old Mike and send me a lousy invitation. When I first read camp woe-is-me, I thought it really took place and then I read the notes. It was a typical fun story of the zzwriter. I commented on it and she said she thought I was an enigma and left me out. Your exploding ducks might need an umbrella to keep from getting hit with beaks and tails.
mstad55
Comment Written 18-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2009
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Mike, thank you, I feel so bad!!! We all missed you. The umbrella is a good idea :-) You are an idea man. Thank you for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
LOL! For a minute I wondered who was masquerading as my favorite poet, hehe. Difficult subject to write a tanka about, but you handled it well. Kind of cute, in a sick, demented way. I loved the author's note about no baby ducks getting hurt. :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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LOL! For a minute I wondered who was masquerading as my favorite poet, hehe. Difficult subject to write a tanka about, but you handled it well. Kind of cute, in a sick, demented way. I loved the author's note about no baby ducks getting hurt. :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Diane - sick and demented - that is the best description anyone has come up with - I'm so glad you have accepted this in the totally stupidly silly spirit in which it was intended :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Well...... all of us can be silly sometimes. This one quacked me up. I actually event quacked a smile thinkin' about them silly little duckers. Cheers, Rose.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Well...... all of us can be silly sometimes. This one quacked me up. I actually event quacked a smile thinkin' about them silly little duckers. Cheers, Rose.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Rose, thank you for your most humorous and gracious response to my nonsensical poem - you're a funny lady!! Brooke
Comment from Roisin
Oh I knew it!! I'm sooo thrilled to see this! I've just read Zeezeewriter's story and it's absolutely hilarious. I said in my review that I hoped you and Jude would now post a tanka of Exploding Baby Ducks so just decided to check out if you had. Good on ya!! You even had me reaching for the dictionary in this one! Funny tanka and love your disclaimer in the notes, lol! I'm so glad no baby ducks were harmed! The picture is wonderful.
Hugs
Roisinx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Oh I knew it!! I'm sooo thrilled to see this! I've just read Zeezeewriter's story and it's absolutely hilarious. I said in my review that I hoped you and Jude would now post a tanka of Exploding Baby Ducks so just decided to check out if you had. Good on ya!! You even had me reaching for the dictionary in this one! Funny tanka and love your disclaimer in the notes, lol! I'm so glad no baby ducks were harmed! The picture is wonderful.
Hugs
Roisinx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Roisin, this was so much darned fun! LOL Silly and stupid, but fun! :-) Thanks for being a sport and reviewing it :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
Kudos for the humorous response to a humorous challenge. And, the laughs keep coming....This has been quite fun - getting caught in this funny exchange - and learning lots about FS during the process. Plus, making friends. Appreciated your humor....Sue
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Kudos for the humorous response to a humorous challenge. And, the laughs keep coming....This has been quite fun - getting caught in this funny exchange - and learning lots about FS during the process. Plus, making friends. Appreciated your humor....Sue
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Sue, you're a great sport for reading this - and then to review it too! LOL Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have done very well showing your humor in this piece I like your comments a true animal lover I would never doubt it regards Fuller
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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You have done very well showing your humor in this piece I like your comments a true animal lover I would never doubt it regards Fuller
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Fuller - you're a peach :-) Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
The title alone makes me want to read the poem. I laughed at the phrase "boom-bang altar" and at your authors' notes. "No baby ducks were actually harmed in the making of this poem." What a hoot. :)
I couldn't quite remember the syllable count of a tanka, so I counted them up and then remembered it's basically a haiku with two extra 7 syllable lines at the end. Good reminder. Sometimes I get all these forms mixed up in my head!
I like the opening and closing with violent images: exploding and boom-bang altar. (They're so overblown and dramatic that they make the poem humorous.) The use of the word "nadir" is excellent as a lead-in to the next line, "Have we come to this?" It also seems a bit sarcastic/humorous/deliberately melodramatic, given the poem's topic. Points to the silliness inherent in the poem. Exploding ducks, what an image!
I loved the sweet photo, BTW. They are simply too cute, although I would never want to keep ducklings myself. Too much work! I can barely keep up with my two children. Imagine what would happen if I had a bunch of ducks running around and pooping in my yard?!
Too funny. Laura
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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The title alone makes me want to read the poem. I laughed at the phrase "boom-bang altar" and at your authors' notes. "No baby ducks were actually harmed in the making of this poem." What a hoot. :)
I couldn't quite remember the syllable count of a tanka, so I counted them up and then remembered it's basically a haiku with two extra 7 syllable lines at the end. Good reminder. Sometimes I get all these forms mixed up in my head!
I like the opening and closing with violent images: exploding and boom-bang altar. (They're so overblown and dramatic that they make the poem humorous.) The use of the word "nadir" is excellent as a lead-in to the next line, "Have we come to this?" It also seems a bit sarcastic/humorous/deliberately melodramatic, given the poem's topic. Points to the silliness inherent in the poem. Exploding ducks, what an image!
I loved the sweet photo, BTW. They are simply too cute, although I would never want to keep ducklings myself. Too much work! I can barely keep up with my two children. Imagine what would happen if I had a bunch of ducks running around and pooping in my yard?!
Too funny. Laura
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Laura, thank you for putting up with the silliness of this poem. I'm amazed so many people actually reviewed the damned thing, and I'm even more amazed you managed to write one of your thoughtful, detailed reviews about it. You should get a new award for this review alone - it could be some kind of reviewers' challenge - make them all have to review the stupidest poem ever and find something to say about it! LOL Brooke
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Great idea! I should start a contest with this premise! I'll write a really crappy poem (won't be hard for me!) and everybody has to write a serious review of it. Voters can vote on the review that is the best, most thoughtful one. Nah, won't work. Most voters wouldn't understand, I think. LOL
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
I read Zeezee's story about camp and I giggled at the 'Exploding Baby Ducks'. I howled with laughter when I saw the title waiting in the inbox! LOL.
You've got a terrific sense of fun, Brooke. Great humour and wit. I love it.
Nice tanka by the way; glad no ducks were really hurt in the writing of this poem...awww...aren't they cute? LOL
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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I read Zeezee's story about camp and I giggled at the 'Exploding Baby Ducks'. I howled with laughter when I saw the title waiting in the inbox! LOL.
You've got a terrific sense of fun, Brooke. Great humour and wit. I love it.
Nice tanka by the way; glad no ducks were really hurt in the writing of this poem...awww...aren't they cute? LOL
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Kat - sometimes silliness just overcomes me - not often, thank goodness. And yes, baby ducks are adorable and I wouldn't hurt a feather on their little backs. :-) LOL Brooke
