Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Every hair of your head is counted.' He even sees the sparrow fall. Beautifully inspired story that must bring light and comfort to all who care to read it; I did and it brought comfort to me. Please keep writing in this vein because the world is in sore need of His love and we are his tools. Well done. Blessed be.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thank you so, so much for this fabulous rating and your kind words. I'm sorry it has taken me so long to respond.
Hugs,
Jani

reply by Aussie on 10-Aug-2009

Jani, I am a very patient person and know eventually you will respond in kind. Love, Kay.

Comment from ryanlion

Excellent

a very nice story filled with love and hope. i must confess i am not religous but i do agree with the basic principles of religion and you have capture them perfectly in this tale, well done

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thanks for the great review. :-)
Jani

Comment from LairDog5

Excellent

Powerful and poignant words of inspiration. What a wonderful story. I really thought the last line put it all into perspective. Sometimes, it's easy to think God doesn't even know we exist but he knows. He always knows. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Best wishes.
Lary

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thanks for the great review. :-)
Jani

Comment from mmichelle97219

Excellent

Its a keeper, janilou. I thought it flowed well, and I didn't find any problems to pick on. Glad the goats gave ya a break long enough to type.

happy writing
Michelle

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thanks for the great review. :-)
Jani

Comment from Penpal

Excellent

This is beautiful and the message is so heart reaching. While reading it my chest bubbled up with warmth. I love the ending, and the message of no one being insignificant.

A heartwarming story the touched this reader's heart.

Pen

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thanks for the great review. :-)
Jani

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

What a beautiful story with a message for all of your readers that all they have to do is have faith in the lord and he will help you well done I enjoyed regards Fuller

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009

Thanks for the great review. :-)
Jani

Comment from Writewoman

Excellent

I'm giving you a five even though a 5 means "no revisions needed" and I see a couple of corrections. However, a couple isn't bad either. Here are the errors I note:

1. Mixed verb tenses in very first sentence:
Milking goats takes forever some days, or so it seemed.
Took/seemed matches the past tense of the rest of this piece.

2. You feel their pain, dearheart, don't you?"
When a term of affection is used in place of a name, it should be capitalized -- "Dearheart"

Barb

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2009

Thanks for the great review. I changed those two things.
:-)
Jani

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

Sweetheart, I think you are one of the very few, who I will read this. I love God, but am not super religious, but you tell these stories with so much love and fate, that I can't help but keep reading. Very nice, my sweet friend
Peace
Heidi

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2009

Thank you so much, Heidi! :-) Glad you enjoyed it, especially when you wouldn't usually read stories like this.
Hugs,
Jani

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Excellent

Hmmm. I'm not entirely sure why I read this as I am anti-religion, particularly christianity.

I enjoyed the setting - you are correct of course, one must continue to tend the animals no matter what ebcause they rely upon us. I think your idea original and the way you ahve set it out is engaging to say the least.

Dialogue is natural, you almost make the mythical figure to be real.

I am absolutely certain in my own heart that anyone with faith who reads this will feel instantly uplifted. As such, you have achieved something wonderful.

Great writing, even though I do not share your beliefs.

Warm wishes
Kat

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2009

Thank you, Kat. I respect your belief and your opinion, and I'm thankful for your considerate review.
Hugs,
Jani

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

What a lovely story. Nice length and very well written. I can find nothing to edit. How often we forget that we are not alone.
Good work
Cheers
Rose

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2009

Thank you so much, Rose.
Hugs,
Jani