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4 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
That was a fun chapter, snod. Loved the dialogue. Christmas is a forceful, bold kind of guy who likes to keep her in the dark when he can. Thinks he's irrisistible to women.(Where have I heard that line before?)
Fun to watch the relationship develop.
Good job. I'm still having fun reading it.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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That was a fun chapter, snod. Loved the dialogue. Christmas is a forceful, bold kind of guy who likes to keep her in the dark when he can. Thinks he's irrisistible to women.(Where have I heard that line before?)
Fun to watch the relationship develop.
Good job. I'm still having fun reading it.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Thanks. I think both aspects of his character (forceful and secretive) are going to be importnat, so I'm chuffed that's come across.
Comment from WRITER1
He's very funny, I see a lot of you in Mr. Christmas. I think you patterned him after yourself. This story just gets better and better.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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He's very funny, I see a lot of you in Mr. Christmas. I think you patterned him after yourself. This story just gets better and better.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Damn, I was trying to hide that. Unfortunately there seems to be a fair amount of me in any main character I write. Busted.
Thanks for the review
Comment from SolarMagnet
(puts hand to head, closes eyes, holds out other hand) I sense you have a sense of humor. I have no idea the about the guild thing, I feel like I've been dropped into the second season of Millennium but lucky it's all just two people talking about needing a vehicle. Tell me if I'm funny sometime.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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(puts hand to head, closes eyes, holds out other hand) I sense you have a sense of humor. I have no idea the about the guild thing, I feel like I've been dropped into the second season of Millennium but lucky it's all just two people talking about needing a vehicle. Tell me if I'm funny sometime.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Haha, well, you got a smile out of me. Yes, not much sci-fi in this chapter. It does irk me sometimes when people jump in at chapter 15 and say, wait, who's this Uncle Mike they keep mentioning? Well go back and read chapters 9 - 14 LOL Thanks for the fun review.
Comment from worldofwordcraft
I like the way Christmas keeps teasing Laura. There actually isn't much action in the five chapters of the book I've read, but I've only just noticed, because the humour keeps me so entertained... a useful skill: I wish I could make my non-action scenes so engaging.
You missed a space:
"I'll leave(space)it"
But credit where credit is due: it's the first time in a couple of weeks I've caught you in a mistake, and your track record's much better than mine.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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I like the way Christmas keeps teasing Laura. There actually isn't much action in the five chapters of the book I've read, but I've only just noticed, because the humour keeps me so entertained... a useful skill: I wish I could make my non-action scenes so engaging.
You missed a space:
"I'll leave(space)it"
But credit where credit is due: it's the first time in a couple of weeks I've caught you in a mistake, and your track record's much better than mine.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Thank you. I feel my action sequences are my weak point. There has been some action earlier, and there will be quite an involved section later, once I can work out the mechanics of it. I'm glad it's not been a trial as a result. Thanks for the spag and the review
