Challenge Me
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Comment from cardpackrat
As poems go, this is a nice poem about the shy girl and her collection of written work. Very well written and descriptive.
Within the confines of the contest, however, this poem needs a few pieces of tweaking. The fourth stanza doesn't follow the ABCB rhyme and the 5th stanza doesn't follow the structure that was given in the Notes section. A minor spelling change in Stanza 2 and then all is well.
The poem is great, but for the contest purposes, a few changes may need to be made! :)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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As poems go, this is a nice poem about the shy girl and her collection of written work. Very well written and descriptive.
Within the confines of the contest, however, this poem needs a few pieces of tweaking. The fourth stanza doesn't follow the ABCB rhyme and the 5th stanza doesn't follow the structure that was given in the Notes section. A minor spelling change in Stanza 2 and then all is well.
The poem is great, but for the contest purposes, a few changes may need to be made! :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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fixed the typo - thanx!
as for the abcb thing - i'm not IN the contest - was just practicing some rhyme lol :-)
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Ah, I see... well, in that case... awesome poem! :) Keep up the good work!
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very good poem/poetry lesson. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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This is a very good poem/poetry lesson. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2009
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thank you much! :)
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You're welcome, Shelley. Charlie
