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Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Hi Brooke Just lovely the poem and the artwork. We don't seem to have fireflys in NZ. But I have seen them in the States. You know this so reminds me of a little joke I heard. I am going to post it right now (no ratings required) Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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Hi Brooke Just lovely the poem and the artwork. We don't seem to have fireflys in NZ. But I have seen them in the States. You know this so reminds me of a little joke I heard. I am going to post it right now (no ratings required) Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 12-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2009
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They are not even in half of the states, I'm learning from readers. That is SO sad because I simply love them!! Thanks so much - I just read your joke posting - it is so cute :-) Brooke
Comment from Irrelevant
Brooke,
I love the wonder found in innocense that makes all seem so possible when the world was still so new to us. My impressions from your beautiful poem. I enjoyed this piece.
One suggestion:
"I caught a firefly in my fist"
I understand the 8 count requirement here and that "fire" is a one syllable word (one of those weird ones), but this line might sound smoother treating "fire" as a two syllable word, for it sounds like one. Perhaps:
"I caught a firefly in fist" ?
I know this will then be short a syllable in the line but I think this may gain something in the rhythm in return. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
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Brooke,
I love the wonder found in innocense that makes all seem so possible when the world was still so new to us. My impressions from your beautiful poem. I enjoyed this piece.
One suggestion:
"I caught a firefly in my fist"
I understand the 8 count requirement here and that "fire" is a one syllable word (one of those weird ones), but this line might sound smoother treating "fire" as a two syllable word, for it sounds like one. Perhaps:
"I caught a firefly in fist" ?
I know this will then be short a syllable in the line but I think this may gain something in the rhythm in return. Just a thought.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
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caught it in fist - that sounds unnatural to me to say caught in fist - one of those poetic lines that people write in sonnets that I call sonnet-speak - just not my style :-) I understand the rhythmic thing you're going after, but I'd rather have it sound right/natural to me :-) Thanks for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from fayesh
Once again your reflection on nature's wonders has not only a perceptive view, but spiritual wisdom which could only come from one attuned to Creation's beauty.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Once again your reflection on nature's wonders has not only a perceptive view, but spiritual wisdom which could only come from one attuned to Creation's beauty.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Thank you for this most thoughtful and gracious review. Brooke :-)
Comment from words
well done!
Especially liked the closing lines:
Too young was I to understand
God's stars don't light at my command.
This statement holds true of so many things we try to control in life.
The older I get, the more I realize that very little is within our control....
And, in many ways, I am thankful for that!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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well done!
Especially liked the closing lines:
Too young was I to understand
God's stars don't light at my command.
This statement holds true of so many things we try to control in life.
The older I get, the more I realize that very little is within our control....
And, in many ways, I am thankful for that!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Thanks for your thoughtfulness. Brooke :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
Brooke, this poem is lovely and the photo you chose is perfect. Little children are fascinated with insects but they don't realize the danger of putting them in a jar. However, you bring joy to the poem with the last line "God's stars don't light at my command.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Brooke, this poem is lovely and the photo you chose is perfect. Little children are fascinated with insects but they don't realize the danger of putting them in a jar. However, you bring joy to the poem with the last line "God's stars don't light at my command.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Mary Jayne, thank you for your perceptive comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from Lokman
There's this odd little sound I make when I read something that comes so close to what I've seen with my boys, and this was one of them. How do we explain to them that the true beauty of a firefly is in its freedom to create its light in nature, and not feel a need to try and capture it?
Shea
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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There's this odd little sound I make when I read something that comes so close to what I've seen with my boys, and this was one of them. How do we explain to them that the true beauty of a firefly is in its freedom to create its light in nature, and not feel a need to try and capture it?
Shea
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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Shea, thank you - I'm so glad this connected with your own experience. Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
I remember catching them and putting them in a jar for a while. We always let them go though when the nights hunt was done. Great poem. Love the ending. lol.
Sorry that I am late in reviewing. I had three trips to the Dr in the pass couple months and am still not back to 100%. Grandkids out of school and have been keeping them on and off. We also just found out my hubby has an Abdominal Aortic Aneurysm last week and have been busy running to the doctors and taking test. Still don't know what they will do yet. Hope you are well. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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I remember catching them and putting them in a jar for a while. We always let them go though when the nights hunt was done. Great poem. Love the ending. lol.
Sorry that I am late in reviewing. I had three trips to the Dr in the pass couple months and am still not back to 100%. Grandkids out of school and have been keeping them on and off. We also just found out my hubby has an Abdominal Aortic Aneurysm last week and have been busy running to the doctors and taking test. Still don't know what they will do yet. Hope you are well. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 09-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2009
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My goodness, Jeanette, with all that going on, the last thing you need to worry about is being late in reviewing. I sure hope you and your husband get your health issues all straightened out soon!! Thank you for your most thoughtful review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Carol D Parker
Oh this brought back memories of washing the dishes real fast so we could go out and catch lightening bugs as we called them. We put them in jars and kept them in our bedroom overnight. But, mysteriously, every morning they would be gone, jar and all. Your poem has a strong message that God doesn't answer to us. Excellent work.
Carol
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Oh this brought back memories of washing the dishes real fast so we could go out and catch lightening bugs as we called them. We put them in jars and kept them in our bedroom overnight. But, mysteriously, every morning they would be gone, jar and all. Your poem has a strong message that God doesn't answer to us. Excellent work.
Carol
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Carol, now there is a mystery!!! Was the firefly fairy sneaking them out? LOL Thanks for your fun review. Brooke :-)
Comment from skye
Those sweet little twinkling points of light are such fun to chase after in the early night.
Your poem points out how natural things cannot exist out of their element.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Those sweet little twinkling points of light are such fun to chase after in the early night.
Your poem points out how natural things cannot exist out of their element.
Very well done.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Skye, thank you for your thoughtful review, Brooke :)
Comment from NadineM
Brooke,
This is a poem about a child's bewilderment and sense of adventure. Life lessons are often realized in hindsight!
I remember when I was 15 and visiting relatives in Chicago, seeing a firefly for the first time. How fascinating it was.
Thanks for sharing this poem with me. Brought back precious memories.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Brooke,
This is a poem about a child's bewilderment and sense of adventure. Life lessons are often realized in hindsight!
I remember when I was 15 and visiting relatives in Chicago, seeing a firefly for the first time. How fascinating it was.
Thanks for sharing this poem with me. Brought back precious memories.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Nadine - they are among my favorite creatures!! Brooke :-)
